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This Poem was Submitted By: Kenneth R. Patton On Date: 2005-08-18 13:39:10 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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How sad it feels to recognize how unique and rare this is To be really truly cared for should be a simple thing How easy it feels to care for you without obtuse agendas No need for second questions deflected with minutia How uplifting it feels to be honest Without fear of retribution No cautious thought or crafting required before speaking How glorious it feels to strip away defenses To live so light and airy Our own footprints can’t be seen

This Poem was Critiqued By: Tony P Spicuglia On Date: 2005-09-04 12:17:03
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Kenneth, there is a reality here that one may dream of. It is capured in the main lines of the thoughts you have shared: • without obtuse agendas • Without fear of retribution • Our own footprints can’t be seen I guess the wonder of it all, as you deduce, is that we are amazed when it comes so easy. I wonder if you mean only our interaction, or also, as bears out you last line, the interaction with a deity as well. Good, easy, piece.

This Poem was Critiqued By: Philip M Pope On Date: 2005-08-29 16:50:00
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
Congratulations! You have crafted a free and easy terza rima sonnet which likely symbolizes the Holy Trinity. Early enthusiasts of terza rima, including Italian poets Boccaccio and Petrarch, were particularly interested in the unifying effects of the form. Terza rima is typically written in an iambic line, and in English, most often in iambic pentameter. If another line length is chosen, such as tetrameter, the lines should be of the same length. There are no limits to the number of lines a poem composed in terza rima may have. I assure you I am quite unaware why anyone would feel -'How sad it feels to recognize how unique and rare this is'- For it does, indeed, seem as if the paranoia of the writer is peeking through these gauzy couplets. PMPope

This Poem was Critiqued By: Claire H. Currier On Date: 2005-08-24 03:33:33
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.77500
Hi Poet....Another winner in my book, simply do enjoy reading this one over and over again. The structure used along with your word flow makes it so nice to find such beauty in a relationship, rare at times though many like to say they have this kind of love. If you are able to say that you have been and are truly loved and cared for I pray you count your blessings. Couples should grow together in their love and have such feelings of contentment feeling the ability to be so comfy in and with their love for each other.....I see it in my sister and brother in law who have been married close to forty years. I saw it with mom and dad as well. .how easy it feels to care for you..this line says it all and is so lovely in thought, just like a prayer of sorts, to care for someone so much with no questions asked, open, honest and so fulfilling. how nice the feeling of being honest with someone you love, no matter what the subject might be, knowing there is no fear of retribution..at times without such love couples tend to hurt themselves in one way or another. anyone who has told their spouse a lie can relate to this...the more lies they tell the harder it seems to be able to find the truth and bring it forth. Sad, indeed to have to do something like this to someone you profess to love, ..how glorious it feels to strip away defenses......to live so light and airy our own footprints can't be seen...my favorite line poet, ... to be so light and airy that footprints can't be seen.. Thank you for posting and sharing this with us and I know it has made my list of favorites, God Bless, Claire

This Poem was Critiqued By: Dellena Rovito On Date: 2005-08-22 13:46:02
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.66667
Kenneth, I'm so envious I could spit! To have such a relationship with anyone is quite precious a thing! And this person perhaps your mate is triple blessed. The most wonderful gift one can give his children is to love his mate. You teach others what love is and what it means and others learn from that example. And this is whats lacking in our whole world. Do you see the potential? A great poem indeed. Wonderful Ken and I'm not trying for points. Dellena

This Poem was Critiqued By: Joanne M Uppendahl On Date: 2005-08-20 12:17:12
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Ken: My new crits are short, for everyone. No less value of and appreciation of your work. I really love these lines - they are the whole poem for me: How glorious it feels to strip away defenses To live so light and airy Our own footprints can’t be seen Indeed, what a 'glorious' way to live! And thank you for this example of howing a loving relationship changes everything. Best always, Joanne

This Poem was Critiqued By: marilyn terwilleger On Date: 2005-08-19 14:22:52
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Hi Kenneth, I love this poem! It flows easily and sends such a beautiful but simple message to anyone who has been truly loved and cared for. All couples should have such feelings of contentment and feel this comfortable in their love for each other...truly cared for should be a simple thing...how easy it feels to care for you..these lines are so lovely...no need for second questions...too bad not all lovers can know this...how uplifting it feels to be honest without fear of retribution...this is so very true...wonderful...no cautious thought or crafting required before speaking...anyone who has told their mate a lie can relate to this...the more lies they tell the more lies they must tell...how glorious it feels to strip away defenses...yes..yes...to live so light and airy our own footprints can't be seen...to me this is the most compelling line and if I had to choose it would be my favorite...such an amazing thought to be so light and airy that footprints can't be seen..I have to admit I wish I had written that line! Very well done...goes on my list! Peace...Marilyn

This Poem was Critiqued By: Mark Steven Scheffer On Date: 2005-08-19 09:45:00
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Ken, This has a nice, "easy" feel. It is a soft, contemporary statement (without overt religious terminology, without being driven by any one religion's complex mythology) of a merging into the One - through another. Anyway, that's my reading. It may simply be about the spendid union of love. I know that. Mark

This Poem was Critiqued By: Turner Lee Williams On Date: 2005-08-18 22:02:34
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.86667
Kenneth--Your simple title belies the import of your theme and tone for unconditional/unbridled love. The over-all verbiage is like laser bullets striking the heart dead center. If only love in the real world could be so uncomplicated; so tolerant; so compromising. The hyperbole of the final stanza is goose-bumpy (WOW!) and my favorite lines of all eight vivid imageries; "To live so light and airy Our own footprints can’t be seen" You've definitely grabbed the attention of this reader with your well thoughtout post. Great stuff.

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