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Tomorrow's Forecast

I’ve read the reports, and looked at the charts, considered the fronts confronting our hearts, put all the percents and past stats together. There’s just no predicting How you’ll decide whether…

Copyright © August 2005 Rick Barnes


This Poem was Critiqued By: Moira Grace Hamel-Smith On Date: 2010-02-07 04:59:35
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
Sounds like you're standing on the edge of some ones whim. By the time you're doing this math you already know "How you'll decide whether" The cadence belies the question. There is so predicting.


This Poem was Critiqued By: Rachel F. Spinoza On Date: 2005-09-06 07:28:37
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.97059
Hi Rick Love it - the light lilting tone - the wonderul punny ending the perfect cadence and rhyme the assonic wonder of confronting/fronts I hope the chart indicates blue skies ahead best to you and yours in these terrible times hugs, Roni
This Poem was Critiqued By: Tony P Spicuglia On Date: 2005-09-05 12:15:36
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Rick you leave us at the future.. to fill in and to deduce, subject, passions, even “whether” the results are effective to the challenge. There is beyond all else, the feeling that we must, from that moment on, answer the questions ourselves or the poem will never be finished. Tomorrow's Forecast – The hook in the title. I read it, and looked ahead, almost as if the verse you wrote was tantamount to the predictions to be made. I’ve read the reports, - Reports can be good or bad, but it does indicate that we are not going blindly forward, there is a portent of things to come. I guess, like the charts, the information is only as good as the (unbiased) expertise of the person who interprets it. Probably that is the largest problem, reports are filtered, and the color of the filter is usually not neutral. and looked at the charts, - Charts normally indicate historical reference, if this, then that, and since this is here, that will be there, problem is it is only a reference, a single point within the boundaries of the chart can change the moment, even while the chart is correct. considered the fronts – I read this many times and looked to clarify it for me – what I decided was, (as you inform us in your next line), no man is an island, and the “heart” must discern the interaction of multiple fronts (decisions/hopes/dreams/ priorities/ect.). confronting our hearts, - So then our heart is the interpreter, the filter required for wisdom. put all the percents and past stats together. – And from the evaluation, sometimes long coming, sometimes instantaneously, the prediction is colluded to. What happens is seldom an isolated storm, more often than not, it was the evaluation and implimentation we ourselves have made that determines the options for “whether”... There’s just no predicting How you’ll decide whether… Rick, this is a simple, magnificent piece. I think it outdoes your vision, (to me), but I know it implements with me, an entire vision of that next forcast, and my part in the making. Thanks for sharing.
This Poem was Critiqued By: Latorial D. Faison On Date: 2005-09-03 21:20:34
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.97143
Rick, this is a cute and appropriate poem for just about everything and every thought that can occur. I like the title very much. It's metaphorical as this poem can be taken to speak of weather or whether . . . , and I think that's very clever. I am a fan of short poems that make readers think. Thought provoking words keep us on our feet. How we'll decide whether . . . is always a mystery wrapped in reasoning. Thanks for sharing a piece as poetic and powerful as poetry should be. I appreciated this one, especially in lieu of the disasters left behind by Katrina. Great poem. Latorial www.latorialfaison.com
This Poem was Critiqued By: Claire H. Currier On Date: 2005-08-31 05:18:12
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.75439
Good Morning Poet and a wet one it is, not meaning anything by that......just no sunshine for three days and I am ready to check out those front........its neat how you put the weather and life's situations together to forecast......indeed, I know that happens with moods, depending upon the mood of the person you are with your own happy mood could change if that person is down and under......must be the same with heart, fronts, and weather ........when it rains it pours mama often said, and the tears we shed only fill the rivers as they too flow....now that did not make sense to me.....enjoyed the rhyme as well and the images projected with the flare of your pen.......thanks for posting, sharing your talents with us. God Bless, Claire
This Poem was Critiqued By: Paul R Lindenmeyer On Date: 2005-08-29 18:15:09
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Rick, quick analogy linking hearts and hurricanes so to speak. Rhyme scheme works, pace is good, and the conclusion is foggy, as it usually is. Title eye catching, since it is always up in the air. Terrible pun.. Enjoyed the projection..Peace, Paul
This Poem was Critiqued By: Joyce P. Hale On Date: 2005-08-29 15:49:32
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.73684
Excellent, Rick! Just as I was thinking it was about the weather, you let us know that it is about whether... (:D What a unique short write, using all the words to mislead the reader, then springing the surprise onto us! I enjoyed it very much! Peace. Joyce
This Poem was Critiqued By: Joanne M Uppendahl On Date: 2005-08-29 14:38:20
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.85714
O Rick O~! Are you making fun of me? <smile> I don't think so. You can't know that I'm in the business of making charts and predictions. How could you know? I'm not a meteorologist, either. ;-) OK, I'm just a little giddy with finding a new poem from you here, today. Allow me to settle down. Good. Done. Do I do the short and pithy or the word-by-word novella? I think it will have to be spontaneous, so I don't know yet. With your forebearance. Here goes! I’ve read the reports, and looked at the charts, considered the fronts confronting our hearts, put all the percents and past stats together. There’s just no predicting How you’ll decide whether… I'm laughing! A prediction that seems undeliverable only a few days ago. This is witty, not gritty, not boggy, not balmy, and has a certain danceable beat, if you don't mind my saying so. I'd still like to go word by bouncy word, or maybe write on quantum physics (as if I knew!) or, best option, continue laughing with you. Unbelievably, I'm getting a migraine. But I'm happy, anyway. We are supposed to have, by way of weather, a thunderstorm here soon. It might be that the visual lightning is my own miniature front coming in. The unpredictable RB makes all of the stats outdated. Nice when you drop in like this - no sarcasm intended! ;-) Favor us with the whole spectrum of your poetic weather. Also, reading this poem aloud, I discovered that it contains only words that can actually be read while keeping the jaws clamped together. Ideal for a ventriloquist. I can't seem to get myself to behave, percentage wise. I loved it. Thanks, and next time I promise to make less sense. Joanne
This Poem was Critiqued By: Mell W. Morris On Date: 2005-08-29 11:53:48
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Ricko? "okay, I'll go first." I love how we do all our fore-analysis. "This is SO sweet!" "I've read the reports, and looked at the charts, considered the fronts confronting our hearts, put all the percents and past stats together. There's just no predicting How you'll decide whether...? And Melba says what ahe always says, "Mahvelous, darhling. Simpully outa sight!" And it IS! And you get way humble but lately I've decided the better poets on this site should fluff their feathers once in a while!! You and I and Turner, JoUp, love word ways and word plays and she and I really kicked up dust on Io until we were nicely asked to clear out. After the dust literally settled, remember leaving? One should never dally with space dust too often but we had packed our rose of Sharon and that settled that. Darling poet, you made these words, played with these words, thought of wrong steps several times, but it pass with no repercusions. Rick, I really LOVE it...my forever favorite. No toying with a confection of such magnitude. Heartiest congratulations! Should take 1st. Mell
This Poem was Critiqued By: Duane J Jackson On Date: 2005-08-28 23:58:39
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Hi Rick, Written masterfully! I was especially drawn to this one thanks to the effective use of rhyme. Rhyme has always been my favorite and always will be....it's good to see others project this form so effectively. There is ingenuity in your theme...it is unique and innovative. A 'forecast' for the weather in our hearts...mmm...now that kind of a forecast would be tough as the flip flop between happiness and sorrow is anybody's guess. Interesting symbolism used in terms of 'fronts confronting our hearts'. I liked the sound of it too......strong 'c' sounds - charts/considered/confronting and 'ah' sounds - charts/past/hearts. I noticed that you spell 'weather' as 'whether'. I don't believe this to be a mis-spelling. Rather, it seems to be a pun and you leave it open to the reader to predict 'whether' it's going to get any better or not...'whether' the sun will shine or dip...etc. That indeed, was the icing on the cake. Hat's off to you! Take care, Duane.
This Poem was Critiqued By: Turner Lee Williams On Date: 2005-08-28 19:05:49
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.91429
Rick--Just an excellent metaphoric/analogous relationship inference. From inception of the superb title through this imaginative matching/ follow-up verbiage, an offering well thoughtout, humorous, witty and entertaining. Moreover, the incomplete ending, a stroke of dramatic genius and is in direct coorelation with theme and tone. Tight, terse and tantalizing post. TLW
This Poem was Critiqued By: Lora Silvey On Date: 2005-08-28 17:26:18
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.78723
Rick, This is a delightful read. Good structured followed with an easy flow of words dances your reader right through to the end. Your cadance and the rhyme are perfect. OK, now I know these are alot of the words that one probably shouldn't use when critiqueing a poem but your poem put me in such an up mood....your subject reminds me of my oldest daughter and I had to chuckle for I never knew how the wind would blow with her, whether it was going to be stormy or a clear sunny day. Thank you for such an uplift with this winner. Lora PS, one suggestion IMO, I loose the "and" at the beginning of line 2, it would keep it more in line with the rest of your writing. Great work, bravo
This Poem was Critiqued By: Dellena Rovito On Date: 2005-08-28 17:09:03
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.71429
Rick, Love this one alot!! How you say for you........she says for her. Men/women are really not that far apart! It seems as such but it's not. How you make a male friend is the same as female. I like your whether/weather very clever. You are so intelligent and humorous. Hope the wind blows your way in a late summer breeze. And I predict not much rain, only enough to water the crops. hugs Dellena
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