This Poem was Submitted By: Mark Andrew Hislop On Date: 2005-08-29 12:12:39 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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Wow poet this is powerful

Wow poet this is powerful I have read it Over and over and I come Away with different feelings Each time. Good structure, word flow, images, You never fail to project  So much poet. I like the way You projected this  One poet: Good structure and word flow. Good title for this Piece poet. Wow pure joy. Good structure  Poet with word flow. The images are Emotionally filled. And so is the world Some of us live in poet. A world of dreams, hopes, despair, Truth or fiction Sometimes it is hard And most difficult to tell good structure word flow images thanks for  Posting Once more poet. 

Copyright © August 2005 Mark Andrew Hislop

This Poem was Critiqued By: Turner Lee Williams On Date: 2005-09-07 23:00:31
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.89362
Mark–This appears to be a parody/poem of address directed at critiques/ reviews/responses felt to be overused on TPL. IMO, the repeated/standard phrases are due mainly to the assorted skill levels of writers/poets/ critiquers/reviewers present: some quite accomplished; some promising; some mediocre; and others are novice (like myself). Although your point/ theme is sardonically presented, it is well taken by this reader who will insure reviews/critiques in the future (from his pen) are worded differently than the verbiage used in your post. I’ve learned an awful lot about poetry/poets in general and it’s due largely to exchanges with TPLers like yourself. Thanks. TLW

This Poem was Critiqued By: arnie s WACHMAN On Date: 2005-09-05 18:12:43
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.51111
Wow poet. Good structure and flow. Thanks for posting!
This Poem was Critiqued By: Rachel F. Spinoza On Date: 2005-09-02 10:06:57
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Wow poet this is powerful [really it is! ] Wow poet this is powerful I have read it Over and over and I come Away with different feelings Each time. [As we approach everything - newly over and over as our emotions, vulnerabilities change from moment to moment - things take on subtly different meanings - what a spectacular point to make - f i am not off base about this interpretation] Good structure, word flow, images, You never fail to project So much poet. a lot and yet so little to say about a poem - which is after all the reflection and offering of one's deepest feelings. And so is the world Some of us live in poet. A world of dreams, hopes, despair, Truth or fiction Sometimes it is hard And most difficult to tell good structure word flow images thanks for Posting Once more poet. Indeed! Thanks for this amazing poem Rachel
This Poem was Critiqued By: Lora Silvey On Date: 2005-08-29 21:47:48
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.79592
Mark, LOL, I get it I think, you are tired of the same old reteric, but sometimes if it's true why not state it. It does give a person the feeling that the critiquer did not really read the poem and is just giving a generic critique. Sometimes there is nothing to suggest, so I guess what I'm saying all the above aply to your poem and then some. Thank you for a wake up call, perhaps I and others have fallen into a routine, I will be paying closer attention. Lora
This Poem was Critiqued By: Elaine Marie Phalen On Date: 2005-08-29 19:49:59
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Mark, this is very neatly developed, with its shift from what seems to be a satire on the triteness of most critiquing (not much originality, is there?) into a parallel between the poetic realm and the way we lead our everyday lives. They, too, demand structure and order, which can be impossible to attain at times! Like a badly-written poem, one's existence is often an embarrassment to the person living it. And, yes, even when events repeat themselves, we do "come away with / different feelings / each time". Growth and maturity lend altered perspectives, just as rereading challenging poetry can enhance one's understanding of it. I do cringe just a little when I recognize those overused expressions we tend to trot out whenever we can't think of anything else. "Good structure, word flow" - what in heck is that, anyhow? Are we talking metrical verse? Rhyme? Stanzaic pattern? As in real life, what people tell us often lacks useful specifics. "Good job," we say when somebody succeeds at a task ... but we say it regardless of whether the end product is exceptional or merely adequate. We damn with faint praise, in truth. There's no allowance for brilliance, any more than for mediocrity. You have a sardonic touch here, but there's also something wistful about it as soon as you introduce the analogy to personal affairs. For me, that's the poem's salient point and its strength. I didn't expect such a conclusion, and it works very well! Brenda
This Poem was Critiqued By: Claire H. Currier On Date: 2005-08-29 16:50:49
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.74074
I refuse to take this poem personally poet...........I do find it hits the spot on more then one occassion and perhaps more then one critiquer and yes, I am included in that number.........still, if the structure is good and the word flow produces the results you are setting forth then why not say so......if I knew what I was talking about you could write yet another.....thanks again for taking the time to post.....I should take a vacation now, happy end of the summer......God Bless, Claire Of course taking a little from one critiquer then another and another I can see how you came upon the poem why did I not write this one.....
This Poem was Critiqued By: Dellena Rovito On Date: 2005-08-29 16:40:28
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.78947
Mark, you said it perfectly......... Wow poet this is powerful I have read it Over and over and I come Away with different feelings Each time. Good structure, word flow, images, You never fail to project So much poet. I like the way You projected this One poet: Good structure and word flow. Good title for this Piece poet. Wow pure joy. Good structure Poet with word flow. The images are Emotionally filled. And so is the world Some of us live in poet. A world of dreams, hopes, despair, Truth or fiction Sometimes it is hard And most difficult to tell good structure word flow images thanks for Posting Once more poet. Couldn't say it any better........ Dellena
This Poem was Critiqued By: DeniMari Z. On Date: 2005-08-29 15:29:53
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.75000
Hey Mark, I'm hesitant about commenting on this...perhaps I should try to do it, without repeating any of your poem. (Smile). I'm not sure of the message intended, are you saying, you want different language used to comments on your poems? These seem the standard feedback lines, that all of use here. Of course, I think we all try to put a little of our individuality in critiques, but that itself can become risky. I'm glad I stopped to read and comment on this, it was different. DeniMari
This Poem was Critiqued By: marilyn terwilleger On Date: 2005-08-29 14:08:44
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.91429
Hi Mark, First of all I am delighted to find a poem from you! And secondly I am not going to tell you that it has "good word flow, good structure, or that it is pure joy!" I get these same responses, usually from the same critiquer, over and over again. Now that you have let the cat our of its proverbial hat it may very well stop. I remember a few years ago there was some discussion about critiques on the forum and someone said just because you do a critique and sign it "God Bless" doesn't make it acceptable...I'm paraphrasing but you know what I mean. After that I rarely had anyone sign off like that. I haven't seen you post on the forum for quite some you still go there? Some interesting stuff lately. I am not really interested on my critiquing score...I do it because I think if a poet is brave enough to post their work for all to see they deserve a response. Personally the most important part of this site are the critiques...we have great poets here and if a person will just listen to what they have to say and take it to heart their skill as a writer will certainly improve. So write on, my friend, as you have yet to disappoint me as a there! While we are on the subject of crits I would enjoy one from you pressure or anything but do it now! Hope your life is singing along and the blue bird of happiness sits on your window sill (smile) Peace...Marilyn
This Poem was Critiqued By: Paul R Lindenmeyer On Date: 2005-08-29 13:31:02
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Mark, a most interesting introverted assemblege of sometimes cynical, cynicisims. The both repititious, and recycling of repetitions in minimally changed statements is so accurate in the world of critiqers. It is so hard to verbalize beyond "the most powerful thing I have ever read!" A nice gesture, but how many times has that critiquer said that in the last year? Just once, just now, just to you??? Really! We must give them credit however. They take their time to try to give you some kind of a read on your work. That we lay it out there every time we post, is a given. That someone responds at all is a gift. So if we begin our synopsis of the critique with the "I've heard that too many times." attitude, perhaps we skewer our continued analysis of the responder's missive. One cannot argue with the overusage of "absolutes", however, one always likes to hear about acceptance and understanding on the part of others about a published work, even if the intent was simply to share secrets, paint passsions or pass on mercy and graces given. Your work is accurate, has good pace and clear verbiages. The short sentences force the reader to both read, and think back on wether or not they used that statement in one of their own critiques..Forcing honest critiquing is always a of interest to the true poet. It is why I hope one day we will go back to blind critiques. It was so fair and even if occaisonally corrupted, a much more honest way to make each of us better writers. It is a hobby of intellect, and in this arena all the honesty you can acquire, you should acquire!! Grand Writing, Peace, Paul
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