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A Night At The Ballet An adult escape, domestic care and worries, quickly left behind. We arrived breathless, Driven performers, just before the curtain call, blend of old and new. Stretch, twist, lift, bend, leap, contemporary at its best, Saturday at the Lowry music a delight. ‘Constant Speed’ gives us, physics and passion merged, Signed for the 1st time. Appreciated. Returning home, hearts kindled with excitement, next time bring the kids! |
Additional Notes:
Took Paula to see the Rambert Dance Company on saturday first time she had ever been to the ballet.It was a premiere of the first signed ballet "constant speed" inspired by Einstiens centenary
It drove me to write this. Its a performance duet for a male and female voice
1st and last stanza for both voices, the left for the male overlapped by the female on the right (syllable for syllable)
hope you like it!
This Poem was Critiqued By: Elaine Marie Phalen On Date: 2005-10-06 06:35:31
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Hi Stephen,
I love the format you've created here! The interlocking haiku are very well done, and the play back and forth, between the two voices, would sound very effective when spoken aloud. There's a dance-like effect to this. I do note that the female "side" has fewer words; it's as if the male is the one experiencing an awakening and the female (who may already love the ballet) feels less need to wax eloquent about it. The woman utters a single haiku; her spouse uses three and includes much more energetic diction. "Physics and passion" probably possess great appeal for him (and be somewhat unexpected).
I enjoyed the shift in perspective from the opening haiku to the final one. The couple at first is looking forward to an evening away from the demands of family and home; by the end, they regret not having brought their children. Gone are the days when ballet embodied somewhat androgynous performances, embellished with frills and theatrical excess. Today's dance is more direct, more athletic, and more intellectually-oriented. Yet it still affects our emotions and elicits the familiar response of excitement and greater insight into human possibilities.
What a delightful poem! I feel almost as if I've witnessed this production and vicariously shared in your reactions.
Brenda