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A Vanishing at the Shore None can tell why the moving towards this mastery Is like a rainbow, on a blessed wing - But all can say the vanishing. Mark Steven Scheffer from 'After Stevens' One must leave to return. When I recall your first rainbow ride, The way the tide tugged at your feet, Water and sand work against instinct, That “Get out now,” that visceral scream – How you let go, gave in to the wave, Let the tide take you out to see. And when an angle had been subtended, And sky of bland blue unraveled its knot, There against the dark clouds you arched Your back and stood in defiance of the storm. No more than a long Sunday cast from shore - There! And you had disappeared into the froth and foam. Come and go. Here and gone. Wave after wave Crashed ashore and yet not one was yours. Though all were yours. And stood we there Waiting on the waves, calling your name. How long you were gone we shall never know. Long and gone are but tempos, nuance. The ebb and flow of water over rock, and light; The pregnant rainbow, now but a clever caption, Or a boat bobbing seven leagues from home. Once a lad with a box of eight crayons. Then - Footprints in the sand. And we are running - |
This Poem was Critiqued By: James C. Horak On Date: 2006-02-07 16:04:10
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.96875
Well kept within divergent imagery and allusive
metaphor, your poem speads gossamer sheen just
like the image of a winged rainbow you borrowed
from MSS. Yes, we are not at best, penned down
to crusty absolutes and pointless designations.
"a boat bobbing seven leagues from home" is close
enough.
Do "water and sand work against instinct" or is it
merely to consider inglorious, aspects of change.
This only, the cause of precious memory?
Regardless, it is delightful to see your extraordinary
Muse pricked by another, then you willingly share
in that run, "Footprints in the sand".
Always stay so young.
JCH