This Poem was Submitted By: Michael Bird On Date: 2006-08-11 20:23:43 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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Your day at the beach

I saw your pictures today That you sent of your wedding day On the beach you stood hand in hand Exchanged vows and wedding bands For you and yours,my gift to you These words to say A toast,if you will   May joy and peace always be with you,and your vows anew May your day on the beach be always sunny  ahead of you,and never out of reach May you always find peace of mind  -it comes to those who are kind May your children be blessed every day May you know that love will show  as life gets shorter,your feelings grow May you be poor in misfortunes,rich in blessings May you know nothing but happiness  from this day forward   God bless this couple who married today

Copyright © August 2006 Michael Bird

Additional Notes:
for Nancy,my internet friend,and her new hubby

This Poem was Critiqued By: arnie s WACHMAN On Date: 2006-08-19 03:20:58
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
What can I say? It's a wonderful tribute to this couple whom you obviously love. For a moment I thought it was about yourself. This poem stands on its own merits. Thanks for posting.

This Poem was Critiqued By: Turner Lee Williams On Date: 2006-08-16 03:47:41
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Michael--I love the duality potential of this title: because either literally or metaphorically it's all a winning proposition. The vivid verbiage, including excellent end rhymes, present enthralling imagery of "Nancy and new hubby" nuptuals. This is a well written tribute to these newlyweds. Thanks for an uplifting read. No suggestions felt or edit needed. TLW
This Poem was Critiqued By: DeniMari Z. On Date: 2006-08-12 16:02:21
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Dear Michael, This was nicely written, almost in a greeting card fashion - your happiness for your friend is clear, within each line. I do think, the structure is a little choppy - but really doesn't take away from the intent of the write. You've touched on so many things a new couple starting out, would be happy to hear. I would try to embellish it just a bit, with imagery for a more poetic flare. You have showered them with many things, to look forward to as husband and wife. Sincerely, Denimari
This Poem was Critiqued By: Lora Silvey On Date: 2006-08-12 10:28:39
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
Michael, How lovely and thoughtfully written, a most wonderous gift for a friend. What an honor you will present them. I can see this in a greeting card or artfully penned on parchment to be encased as a keep-sake; something to look back on years latter. Thank you for sharing this with us. Best always, Lora
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