This Poem was Submitted By: Mandie J Overocker On Date: 2010-11-07 17:18:50 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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The time, it has changed yet again Each day, light now seeps in so soon; November’s sun has turned to black In early evening afternoons. It used to be much earlier Those hands of time began to spin October’s sun would fade away Days slipped into the night-time dim. Autumn is a season of change Time is something I seem to lack I can never figure if we’ve Sprung ahead or have fallen back? But here’s a little memory trick To help folks inflicted like me In the Spring we will â€œspring ahead” In the Fall we â€œfall back” you see. 

Copyright © November 2010 Mandie J Overocker

This Poem was Critiqued By: Dellena Rovito On Date: 2010-12-04 15:58:48
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.85714
Mandie, I like this...sweet. I like the rhyme......the dark of winter and lovely sun of spring. Very peaceful yet thought-full. Dellena

This Poem was Critiqued By: Tony P Spicuglia On Date: 2010-11-28 12:58:52
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
The interaction of the physical world, sun and moon cycles intermix with man's desires. Spring forward, fall back but the rotation of the earth hasn't changed- You make a point of the relativism of time to us inhabitants, yet also how time itself is impervious to the ramblings of man. I think, time doesn’t even care if we are coming or going- confused or whatever; animate or not, the image is there. A good piece to ponder.
This Poem was Critiqued By: kevin Dunn On Date: 2010-11-08 23:14:24
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Hello Mandie. I am not going to spend a lot of time doing a critique on this as it seem you obviously only posted/wrote it to touch on the time change. I was once told, take it as you will "Don't abandon an idea to soon" I believe unless you did not care, that you can do a much better job of this idea. liked it anyway, its fun. Kevin
This Poem was Critiqued By: cheyenne smyth On Date: 2010-11-08 17:45:55
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Hi Mandie, A fun but gentle reminder of our changing times. I'm not sure I like daylight saving time but I'm sure it won't go away so we have to make the best of it. When I was working I went to work just before the dawn and came home at dusk...I hated that. Well written and delightful poem. Best wishes, cheyenne
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