This Poem was Submitted By: cheyenne smyth On Date: 2010-12-08 17:16:34 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!To Listen to Music While Reading this Poem, just Click Here!
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Oh Shakespeare Oh Shakespeare, Shakespeare scribe your words of love
Inside my mind despite the clutter there
Then speak of starless skies and heaven’s glove
With runes of poets dreaming everywhere
Beside my bed the orchid buds, its leaves
Like sugary dew in beautiful light
Compose the sweetest verse you know that weaves
Its golden thread to kiss the shadowed night
Where trysts are sweet like woven braids of rhyme
My quill is dry and words refuse to stay
So please become my muse with words divine
In winter’s silent snow or spring’s full sway
Oh Shakespeare, Shakespeare please release the flow
Of ink, my pen desires the lover’s glow
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Copyright © December 2010 cheyenne smyth
This Poem was Critiqued By: Dellena Rovito On Date: 2010-12-30 15:03:33
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Cheyenne,
Everything flowed great until the last two lines....
Maybe
Oh Shakespeare, Shakespeare let my pen's ink flow
.............................desires the lover’s glow
Whatever.....
Loved your rhyme and rhythm. A lovely piece
Dellena
This Poem was Critiqued By: Tony P Spicuglia On Date: 2010-12-17 08:48:38
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Shakespear is, amazingly, underrated.
Your verse for a muse, for inspiration, has gone to the correct source. If one cannot find inspiration in the compositions of Shakespeare, then where might one find excellence?
I particularly appreciated "words devine", "sugary dew". Often, when wondering what poet to read, reading Shakespeare, poetry and more, answers the question.
This Poem was Critiqued By: Lora Silvey On Date: 2010-12-11 16:49:03
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
This is quite a unique and wonderful sonnet. Your metered count is spot on as are your rhymes. The verbiage you use is well chosen for your subject. The lilting flow of the romantic plea is simply delicious and the wording couldn't be better--an earnest plea to the master to be your muse if only for just a moment to write a romantic poem. Most enjoyable. Lora
This Poem was Critiqued By: DeniMari Z. On Date: 2010-12-10 09:28:51
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Beautiful post Cheyenne - a yearn to master the great - and be able to inspire others through written words.
I favor the poems of Plath - but it's a personal preference, Maya as well - so many from ages ago wrote the most beautiful poems like Dickenson- Ah...just to read poetry is on of life's pleasure that so many ignore.
I imagine they watch reality t.v for excitement and inspiration. (Smile)
There's nothing in this poem I would change - there are lines that stand out -
Beside my bed the orchid buds, its leaves
Like sugary dew in beautiful light
Compose the sweetest verse you know that weaves This being my fav verse - sugary dew - how poignant!
Its golden thread to kiss the shadowed night
December itself is a month full of anticipation and inspiration - I hope to read more from you,
as always I'm in awe,
blessings,
Deni
This Poem was Critiqued By: kevin Dunn On Date: 2010-12-08 21:20:56
Critiquer Rating During Critique: Unknown
Just my kind of poem. Utterly beautiful in every way. Not being a fan at all of modern poetry any more than I am of modern art, I can say best seen here in along time. Thanks. Kevin.
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