This Poem was Submitted By: Lora Silvey On Date: 2012-02-10 17:20:53 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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Saturday’s Delight

Saturday morn  all scrubbed and sunny finds himself, wee master  climbing footstool to chair Tea cozy’s used for coffee wares  lounge as cream pitcher to sugar bowl stand in obedient attendance Chocolate crisps snuggle close  to oatmeal rounds  iced and dressed  with red candied cherries A plate set to tempt  brings flashes of delight  to child’s eager eyes as grin rushes to ear Demitasse cup set  with cream splashed coffee  plays host to unconventional  morning fare Young fingers  gingerly clasp crisp to dip  precocious appetite to sate Quiet chuckles hide behind  the twinkle in Grandma’s eye

Copyright © February 2012 Lora Silvey

This Poem was Critiqued By: Mark D. Kilburn On Date: 2012-05-30 16:41:31
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
I know this is older but I couldn't find any newer ones so thought I'd try this one, glad I did. I am in a foul mood and this read made me smileand I wasn't sure I could smile today...i found this whole poem to be a very happy one, grin rushes to ear was very well done. I could almost hear most poets slipping the cliche ear to ear in there and congrats on not doing that. Grin rushes to ear is wonderfully original and keeps with the rest of the poem perfectly and for me this was a very strong line. What is a demitasse tea set? just curious, I suppose I could google it. All in all very nice and I honestly cannot give you any suggestions for improvement or rough spots, i don't see any, enjoyable read, very strong and nice ending, I can feel your pride and joy in that final line. mk

This Poem was Critiqued By: Mark Andrew Hislop On Date: 2012-03-01 18:20:53
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Dear Lora Makes me want to go back to my grandma ... :-) Mark.
This Poem was Critiqued By: Ellen K Lewis On Date: 2012-02-17 14:20:30
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Oh Lora this is awesome! What a special memento for a tea-party! Your images are perfect. Not a wasted word anywhere. I adore the informal formality (if you will) the atmosphere is energetic. By bringing grandma in at the end, you have treated us to a timeless piece. I wonder who has the most fun? LOL ~big smile~ Ellen
This Poem was Critiqued By: Tony P Spicuglia On Date: 2012-02-11 09:51:25
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
Now Lora, there is the opening scene of a great movie. I sort of added a next line –as grandpa glances over the top of his newspaper- but that’s just me. What I think –demitasse- makes me thirsty for other such morsels in your piece. –Eager eyes- (I always look to the eyes first, that is again- just me) and the conventions of unconventional make a mystery that isn’t. I could almost see, directly after the scene- from a sun lit sliding glass door, either a neighbor, or dog, or even Sean Connery walks in and is at home in the image you projected. A very fun, fun piece to open my morning. Thank you.
This Poem was Critiqued By: cheyenne smyth On Date: 2012-02-11 00:49:27
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.25000
Hi Lora, This is such a delightful poem and one I enjoyed from beginning to end. I'm thinking your are writing about your child or grandchild and a tea party set for two. I like your word choices, the easy flow and the theme is magical, Well done. Best wishes, cheyenne
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