This Poem was Submitted By: Robert L Tremblay On Date: 2004-09-11 04:28:01 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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Poet's Prophetic Metophor

A Cardinal View Twin towering infernos, minimized To naught by metamorphosed faith despised, Demonically spiral round the beams As though from merged apocalyptic dreams. The suicidal eaglesí grisly blow, Which brightens the horizonís gruesome glow, Imprints itself on stilled and stifled shock As misanthropic crows regale and mock. In quantized grief that elevates sublime Within poetically rhythmic rhyme, Humanity transudes to smoke inhaled By the Divinityís purpose unveiled. As tentacles entwine lungs thirsting air, Sound spirits simmer in forlorn despair; Revealing the eleventh as a sign Imposed upon your destiny and mine. With quickening homage from soul bestowed Within Divine celestial abode, Mankindís creationís realized, As Love is beckoned, heavenly disguised. In resurrection, absent swaddling clothes, Agape quivers as dark void it loathes; And rises somberly as wings unfold Majestically, blinding to behold. To suffer not would likely tender, too, Compassionate love, nobler of the two; Thus, the Divine Planís mystic management Throughout the gallows of the firmament. Now, with humanity at bay, in sight, Yet, humbled by His meditative might, He banishes importance far away To herald in the Final, Lasting Day. copyright Robert Tremblay @2002 BOB 

Copyright © September 2004 Robert L Tremblay

Additional Notes:
I don't know about anyone else, but I, truly, grow tired of this journey. Bobby T.

This Poem was Critiqued By: Jordan Brendez Bandojo On Date: 2004-10-06 07:56:45
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
Hi Robert, I miss reading your philosophy. Thanks for sharing.

This Poem was Critiqued By: Latorial D. Faison On Date: 2004-10-02 06:14:48
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
This is a tightly written exquisite poem. You take the tragedy of 9/11 to an absolute OTHER level. To begin with, I adore the title,and yes, millions of poems have been written on 9/11, and even after 3 years, you are still able to capture the horror and the spirituallity that stems from what happened that day. The style of the poem is so poetic and it flows well from the first stanza down to the last. It's not merely a simple poem about 9/11, but in its own little complex way, it discusses the reality of it with such poetic elegance and sophistication. Your word choice is so proper, and it's consistent throughout the poem. I don't think I could choose a favorite line in this poem, because they all work so well together. Aside from the mispelling of "metaphor" in the title, it's a perfect poetic rendition. The first line "twin towering infernos, minimized" sets such a stunning tone for what follows. This is in no way an elementary piece of work, and I was glad to read it on the Link this month. Great rhyme scheme, great smooth read with lots of depth and meaning. It was a joy to read. Good work. Latorial
This Poem was Critiqued By: marilyn terwilleger On Date: 2004-09-15 16:04:27
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.64286
Hi Bobby T. I don't usually go for long poems and have read many about 911 but this one that you have written is a masterpiece! I love the rhyme and the cadence of this moves along easily not forced (I admire poets that can do this) and held my attention throughout. Sadly not all long poems are capable of this...R.L Stevenson and T.S. Elliot come to mind. I cannot pick out a favorite phrase or stanza I can only tell you that your words are very effective and I hope a lot of people have had the opportunity to read this well written and important poem....Brava! Peace...Marilyn
This Poem was Critiqued By: Jana Buck Hanks On Date: 2004-09-13 12:29:56
Critiquer Rating During Critique: Unknown
Dear Bob. I hope you do not tire of this life too much. I value your poetry and this one is just another example of excellence. Many things have been written about Sept. 11 and the travesty of man. I love they way you have handled this subject, in a sort of mystical view. You are gifted. EAch stanza enfolds into the next and with each endstop, the reader must muse for minutes over what has been said, or at least this reader did. It is hard to pick out which verses I like the best,that is rather like chosing one child over another, but these two jump out at me. As tentacles entwine lungs thirsting air, Sound spirits simmer in forlorn despair; Revealing the eleventh as a sign Imposed upon your destiny and mine. With quickening homage from soul bestowed Within Divine celestial abode, Mankindís creationís realized, As Love is beckoned, heavenly disguised. Thanks so much for sharing this with us. Bright Blessings Jana
This Poem was Critiqued By: Robert Wyma On Date: 2004-09-12 14:22:39
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
Well written, very interesting and deep poem. This carries the desolation of our human and planetary condition in context, when placed in human terms, and then by contrast the journey has to contain betterment within a divine plan when viewed from another more elevated perspective. The biblical context of an eye for and eye will not take us far, yet in circles of power this rules the day. There is so much meaning, subtle meaning that speaks to my perceptions, and the hidden world that moves the external machinery we touch. In your poem I can see the forces of spirit, and the forces of matter clearly colliding in an all out battle for supremacy guided by the unseen hand (and meditative eye) that knows the outcome. Thanks for the inspiration. Robert
This Poem was Critiqued By: James Edward Schanne On Date: 2004-09-12 09:37:17
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 8.57143
Lots of good imagery in this piece, the line -Agape quivers as dark void it loathes - reads to me as if it needs a word or two to make sense of it like perhaps - Agape quivers as dark as the void it loathes - or perhaps something else if that alters your intent. Thanks for letting me read and comment.
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