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This Poem was Submitted By: Andrea M. Taylor On Date: 2004-10-12 20:35:07 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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God's Kinder Garden (first poem)

Once upon a time, a special flower grew, He was planted here for both me and you. The cutest little bud to be seen by all Which nearly bloomed to four feet tall. Blossoming with all sorts of love and fun My dandelion, my joy and my beloved son. Short lived while defying Nature's fury, To harvest his rest with God in His glory. Like all flowers to give our hearts a lift, I thank the Lord for my most precious gift. I will visit His garden to stay - at last, After my steps on life's journey have past. Til' then memories will be my best guide, Cherishing these few with maternal pride. Together we'll dance on the blue sky dome, When the mother and son are finally home.

Additional Notes:
My first adult poem was written shortly after my son passed away at 5 years old. It was first published on TPL and dedicated to my son, Terry's memory

This Poem was Critiqued By: James Edward Schanne On Date: 2004-10-26 11:20:24
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.12698
This is a very simple yet heart felt poem, sometimes simplier lines can give the most immediate view of the soul. Thanks for letting me read and comment.

This Poem was Critiqued By: Gerard A Geiger On Date: 2004-10-19 13:13:07
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.66667
Dear Andrea; A beautiful,poignant,heartfelt tribute to your first child...honest,simple, overflowing with the love of a mother caught in this heartwrenching and tragic aspect of life... Everyone who reads this poem feels your pain... Thanks for the opportunity to read this work.. Gerard

This Poem was Critiqued By: Nancy T Bindhammer On Date: 2004-10-19 10:11:58
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.00000
How tragic but expressed in such a way that it makes me want to cry tears of joy for the time that you will both be together again! This is a true poem of the heart and I was grateful to have stumbled upon it - thank you for such a heart wrenching but beautiful piece of art! May your heart find peace until that day when you are reunited. peace Nancy B

This Poem was Critiqued By: Turner Lee Williams On Date: 2004-10-13 02:27:24
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.77778
Andrea--An excellent dedication to your five year old son whom you lost. This rhyming elegy is respectively and poignantly done metaphorically: a very creative use of flora/nature to depict the child's life. The parallel lines comprising the couplets and addressing both speaker/pro- tagonist, are fresh; tastefully scribed; while being poetically sound. This piece creates vivid imagery through it's figurative language of reciprocal love between this mother and child. Although sad, this first effort/poem is a bittersweet tribute which is quite polished and undoubtedly/hopefully served as a catharsis. Thanks for sharing this personal melancholy/heartwarming/gutwrenching/beautiful/tearful poem with fellow TPLers (for some-the second time). Your poetry hasn't changed in quality from this initial post through now, just more eclectic. TLW

This Poem was Critiqued By: Latorial D. Faison On Date: 2004-10-12 23:33:39
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.46154
Andrea, This is beautiful, and I do thank you for posting it. I have 5 and 6 year old sons, and I know that I take for granted sometimes the precious gifts that they are. Sometimes we get so caught up in ourselves and everyday life that we forget to love on the little ones. This is a beautiful poem, and it did not seem primary at all. It's very sentimental, and I'm sorry for your loss. I believe that poetry/writing is therapeutic, and I write daily to heal my own soul and spirit. I hope that you continued on after this poem. Well, I guess you did if you're still here at TPL. This was original beauty. The words. The sentiment. The style. Everything about this one is truly precious and poetic. Thanks for sharing. Latorial www.latorial.com

This Poem was Critiqued By: charles r pitts On Date: 2004-10-12 20:42:28
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.42857
I feel privileged to have been allowed to share in such a personal, painful, private, tragedy. I can only hope, that in the face of such devastation I cannot imagine, I would have half the strength, half the courage you have had in sharing this terrible part of your life. This poem sets an example for all to follow. Something so very tender must be accepted just as it it. Thank you.

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