This Poem was Submitted By: Mark Andrew Hislop On Date: 2005-12-05 09:23:38 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!To Listen to Music While Reading this Poem, just Click Here!
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there are so many things i don’t want to learn
this is one of them, and the questions
is or are
why don’t i want to learn them. it. maybe
i just don’t want to take my place in today
or find that today has a place as tall as me as paunchy as me
i might be embarrassed to find that i
actually fit. can fit. am accommodated
by the hear and now here on the sparking end
of history
why is this?
(someone said balzac and my ears started smoking) so
if i learn this, that
i am not in these times but these times
are in me, that’s gonna piss me off for
some reason Stop Being Pissed Off
.ellipsis.
(no cigar.)
.ellipsis.
well fuck that, then
.ellipsis.
maybe i'll come back later
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Copyright © December 2005 Mark Andrew Hislop
This Poem was Critiqued By: Lora Silvey On Date: 2005-12-30 14:25:57
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.96774
Mark,
A very unusual read, rings of rage at something that is and can't be changed, of self discovery and dislike for what is discovered, something that possibly was railed against in another and then discovered in one's self. As always, you've left me not quite sure of what you speak, sort of a chaos, much like the wind touching down here and there but never staying long enough to see or catch.
Best always,
Lora
This Poem was Critiqued By: Dellena Rovito On Date: 2005-12-24 15:10:23
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Mark,
The human comedy is 'us'.
You have to laugh about it![or we would cry]
You know sometimes I think we get tired of learnng we're always wrong.
[we are] Theres always more than what meets the eye!
So we gotta learn! We are choiceless actually.
If we got 'it' the wrong way/we will inadvertantly get 'it' in the shorts.
ellipsis/ellipsis/ellipsis]
[from my view]
dellena
This Poem was Critiqued By: Tony P Spicuglia On Date: 2005-12-18 12:51:51
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
One thing I like about this piece, other than the sarcasm- is that it throws PC our the window, and (if I read you right) you have a disdain for Balzac's (it's always somebody elses fault) philosphy. I feel however that whether you "come back later" (I assume you mean another time, since we have spanned the 1700's to 2005), depends on whether there remains the "requirements".
Yours is the first poem I have critiqued this month. The sight seems encompassed by PC (media driven opinions), that it just doesn't matter whether you (or your target audience) choose to learn the lessons of realism, literally or figuratively- 'cause it remains subjective anyway.
I think pot shots are cast iron with tequilla bouncing off the hyper-heated bottom- but that's just me. In closing, I enjoyed this piece, particularly the discussion on embarasement- it made me smile- with cigar in hand, and Ellipses tending the tail, at least I would have known I had a good time.
Thanks for sharing.
This Poem was Critiqued By: Thomas H. Smihula On Date: 2005-12-07 16:11:01
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.75000
Bold statement showing emotion. Not wanting to belong yet finding one does sort of irony. Well done on presenting this thought. Thanks for sharing.
This Poem was Critiqued By: arnie s WACHMAN On Date: 2005-12-07 14:00:47
Critiquer Rating During Critique: Unknown
according to Einstein, the Universe is an elipsis so you may well be calling on yourself. So, fuck that!
Nope, no ceeegar!
BTW, 7th line 1st stanza: Hear? or Here?
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