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This Poem was Submitted By: DeniMari Z. On Date: 2006-06-14 06:46:25 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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My Helping Hand

When God opens a door for me My heart is full of hope and glee The wonder of it all - surpasses anything small Any problems I drag around with me disappear instantly When God reaches down a helping hand I grab on tight - the pure delight The wonder of it all - surpasses anything small Any doubts I drag around with me disappear instantly When angels stand by in guard of me My spirit soars and I feel so free The wonder of it all - surpasses anything small Any weaknesses I drag around with me disappear instantly When my faith in God is strong and sure I'm willing to walk through any door The wonder of it all - surpasses anything small Any fears I drag around with me disappear instantly Hoping Heaven will be my home one day gives me strength to find my way The wonder of it all - surpasses anything small Any bad thoughts I drag around with me disappear instantly

Additional Notes:
Revised - Old post from summer of 2001 -

This Poem was Critiqued By: Jordan Brendez Bandojo On Date: 2006-07-02 06:17:00
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.68750
Hi DeniMari, Thanks for posting this. This is boosting my "weak" belief. When God makes me realize things He makes me think that unfavored events are way to blessings The wonder of it all - surpassess anything small Any disbeliefs I drag around with me disappear instantly I would probably make my own version of your stanza. (smile) You know, I sometimes think that God has forsaken me when what happens is unfavorable to me. I frequently act like a child, giving God a warning. Like saying to God that if you don't want this thing to happen in my favor I would think you have forsaken me. (smile) It always leads me to a thought that everything happens has a purpose! Thank you for this! Jordan

This Poem was Critiqued By: Lora Silvey On Date: 2006-06-18 23:45:33
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.93333
DeniMarie, You've written a good inspirational piece, one that encourages regardless of one faces. If only we all could remember that we aren't alone, that there is someone their to carry our burden. I did have a bit of a problem with the repetition of your third, fourth, & fifth lines in each stanza however I know this to be exceptable when writing in a spirital or religious form. The clear cut language drives home your point while your title is most fitting. Keep the faith, don't let go and keep writing. Nice to see you again. Best always, Lora

This Poem was Critiqued By: Ellen K Lewis On Date: 2006-06-14 17:08:03
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
I like the repetion of those few lines. It makes it all seem so simple a solution doesn't it? And yes, we all drag that baggage around! I love the way you have identified the strengths and weaknesses of man; alone or with God. It's funny how God's instant solution can seem so clear at times and so untouchable at other times. You have reminded us 'how and when' God responds and the strength in His guidance. You have good cadence, sing-song like flow and appropriate rhyming. It's a nice piece!

This Poem was Critiqued By: marilyn terwilleger On Date: 2006-06-14 14:18:48
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Hi Denimari....this is a lovely poem and I am glad youn posted it as I have never read it before. It beautifully limns the thoughts many of us carry around with us but cannot put into words. There have been so many times in my life that the only thing I could hang on to was my faith and my God. the repetition of....I drag around with me disappear instantly....works well here and makes the other lines and phrases sound certain with an undying faith. When God reaches down a helping hand I grab on tight - the pure delight....these lines are stunning and a postivie display of your faith. this is a good poem but I can see how much you have grown as a poet since you wrote this...well done. blessings...Marilyn

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