This Poem was Submitted By: Michael Bird On Date: 2007-12-16 23:01:50 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!To Listen to Music While Reading this Poem, just Click Here!
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When I Die When I die
Don`t stand over my grave for days on end weeping
I shant be there
For I will be scattered about
Like a thousand winds
I will be the first rays of the morning sun
-That warms your heart
I will be the crystal blue sky above
-Whose expanse abounds
I will be the autumn rain
-To wash away all your sadness
I will be the freshly fallen snow
-Brilliant and white and pure
I will be the new moon on a midsummer`s night
-To light your way
I will be the cooing of the dove in the spring
-Who brings peace and tranquility
So dry your tears my love
Rest your sorrows
Rejoice in life
Take flight
And soar to the Heaven`s with me
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Copyright © December 2007 Michael Bird
This Poem was Critiqued By: Thomas H. Smihula On Date: 2008-01-07 11:25:32
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.75000
Michael,
This is the second of your poems I have read this month that shows me life beyond. In this piece you take the opposite approach instead of one leaving you but you leaving them. I like both venues. Well done.
Thanks, Thomas
This Poem was Critiqued By: Claire H. Currier On Date: 2007-12-18 08:52:43
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Beautiful read Micheal one that certainly was inspired from above. Your words bring to life the one you are so searching for, I can hear her voice speaking to you.........love the gentle nature of this one. May you find such peace, love and joy as you dry your tears and rest your sorrows for I am certain your love is with you still. God Bless, Claire
This Poem was Critiqued By: marilyn terwilleger On Date: 2007-12-17 15:50:44
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Hi Michael...when I saw the title of your poem I thought it would be a depressing write, however you surprised me with your beautiful words. Since my husband passed away the holidays are always the most difficult to endure. This poem eases some of the sadness I feel. Your words are soft, loving and evocative. I do believe it is possible to hold a loved one in your heart...you just need to listen and open your mind. This is lovely....brava...marilyn
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