This Poem was Submitted By: DeniMari Z. On Date: 2011-02-05 01:36:48 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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Life Tree A Challenge To Be

Weak roots can rise above loose dirt, clear spaces personal places nurtured with rain; portions of sand to favorably grow grand. Planted firmly as long as time allows it to stand.

Copyright © February 2011 DeniMari Z.

This Poem was Critiqued By: Tony P Spicuglia On Date: 2011-03-03 20:43:49
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Deni, for me there is always the heritage, of one instance or event, coloring the rest. Remove a single event, an one may remove as much yielded good, as bad. It is perilous to assume otherwise. “As long as time allows it to stand”, and in that you bring in weak roots, and/or loose dirt and sand. The rain is the medium for growth. Without it, most trees will not flourish. A nice analogy to life itself.

This Poem was Critiqued By: David Keesey On Date: 2011-02-15 00:33:17
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
I'm lost. There is a tree with roots above the ground yet it loosely grows in sand? Planted firmly? Too much going against the grain here to make heads or tails. Kindest Regards, David
This Poem was Critiqued By: Dellena Rovito On Date: 2011-02-13 14:00:06
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
Deni, So much the better when roots are strong. A lot of us come from weakness and overcome it all. By pure will. The tree is a challenge indeed. I also believe we live till we allow ourselves to surrender to death. Within our capabilities of course. I like this thoughtful poem. good job Deni.. Dellena
This Poem was Critiqued By: Lora Silvey On Date: 2011-02-08 19:28:44
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Yes, if the roots are weak they can still grow if allowed to but only if left to gather strength less they be tampered with and then all will come crumbling down. Your short brief poem gives good insight to the fraility of the human condition, great word choices. Lora
This Poem was Critiqued By: Mandie J Overocker On Date: 2011-02-07 18:57:34
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Deni, I like this... I like the internal rhymes and the brief lines that carry your image to fruition. I personally love trees and this is one of my favorite poems so far... Thanks for sharing...Mandie
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