This Poem was Submitted By: David Keesey On Date: 2011-03-15 08:02:39 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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I’ve got a heart

I’ve got a heart; A heart that beats, pounds, pumps, works real good. Didn’t cost me anything; I just found it there, since I can’t remember. It swells from time to tear, But most of all it loves to laugh. It breaks wide open and pours something out Don’t know what it is; only know it’s the best. Makes everything new, fun, worth the wait To break wide open again. I know it works real good cause When it doesn’t pour out the something that makes The world wondrous, sunny and fun It gushes out stuff worse than tears For tears only follow in its wake. It makes everything go away, swamped, Pushed to the back of its own over swelling greed To total self fulfillment whatever that sad Something is. I’ve got a heart and it works real good.

Copyright © March 2011 David Keesey

This Poem was Critiqued By: Duane J Jackson On Date: 2011-03-26 00:30:29
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Hi David, I like the energy in this. I am given to feel that you are passionate about your heart and appreciate its place in making you human. Hearts can make or break people but you appreciate the balance and that's a good thing. They balance us, more often than not. Thanks for sharing this. Duane.

This Poem was Critiqued By: Tony P Spicuglia On Date: 2011-03-17 14:59:33
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.66667
I don’t think I’d change a thing. The examination of the heart was done well. I think, in retrospect, the metaphors are as alive as your description of the heart. The joys and the pains associated with its inception and conscription. One has to believe, after reading your piece, the heart would have chosen it’s vocation; were the choice possible. In describing your heart, is seen a better picture of you. That is always a good thing. I enjoyed the write.
This Poem was Critiqued By: DeniMari Z. On Date: 2011-03-16 02:50:30
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
The most vital organ one can have that can involve so much in one's life - has stood out in your poem quite simply stated and not something the reader has to sift through to find the meaning of what your intent is in this light, candid, clearly written poem that intertwines emotions, feelings all that come from the heart - with a upbeat natural melody written in poetic fashion. Refreshing "happy" post, blessings, Deni
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