This Poem was Submitted By: Jordan Brendez Bandojo On Date: 2011-09-06 06:48:14 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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Living on the Edge

In the province where the emaciated stem lives, I remember... The cockerel's crow That wakes me at dawn: No alarm, no busy sound. The quacking of the ducks  gives me a special vigor, Watching them bathe in the rain No hot or cold shower  Only a pail of water  Hauled from the well. No telephone to ring Only an echo bouncing off the mountain No A/C which cools Only the blow of open air No oven for heat  Only wood to gather No TV to watch  Only stars at night No car to drive Only carabao's sleigh to ride. No buffet at a table meal Only Father's sermon advocating us to avoid a morsel No entertainment No electronic laughter. The joy in Mother's tear.

Copyright © September 2011 Jordan Brendez Bandojo

This Poem was Critiqued By: Dellena Rovito On Date: 2011-10-01 16:43:23
Critiquer Rating During Critique: Unknown
Jordon, All the basic we need and no frills is to some like heaven. Minus all the earthly bull and living realistic aware of the magic in nature. Sign me up I'll be happy! Love the idea now where do you find this place? Dellena

This Poem was Critiqued By: Tony P Spicuglia On Date: 2011-09-24 20:31:55
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
It is a touching piece; although the setting is counterintuitive. I know there are those who live in the basic manner, but I haven't visited one since my last time to Pennsylvania and overseas. I think in this piece, your point wasn't the lifestyle or availability, rather the fact the in the simplist form, living is easily more fulfilling to the soul. Often I have wished to live in the wild, on a mountain, away from it all- and yet how would I survive without reading your verse, that you poignantly share with us all here. I am a voracious reader- and have many poetry books; those would suffice I guess- Still, I often wish for there..
This Poem was Critiqued By: cheyenne smyth On Date: 2011-09-08 01:17:12
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
Hi Jordan, This poem gives me a sense of peace with its excellent word selection and profound theme. What a lovely place it would be with no distractions to keep us from enjoying our world as He made it. I have failed at picking a favoite line or phrase as I like all. Each line is outstanding and enjoyable to read. Well done. Best woshes, cheyenne
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