This Poem was Submitted By: Jordan Brendez Bandojo On Date: 2011-09-06 06:48:14 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!
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Copyright © September 2011 Jordan Brendez Bandojo
Living on the Edge
In the province where the
emaciated stem lives,
The cockerel's crow
That wakes me at dawn:
No alarm, no busy sound.
The quacking of the ducks
gives me a special vigor,
Watching them bathe in the rain
No hot or cold shower
Only a pail of water
Hauled from the well.
No telephone to ring
Only an echo bouncing off the mountain
No A/C which cools
Only the blow of open air
No oven for heat
Only wood to gather
No TV to watch
Only stars at night
No car to drive
Only carabao's sleigh to ride.
No buffet at a table meal
Only Father's sermon advocating us to avoid a morsel
No electronic laughter.
The joy in Mother's tear.
This Poem was Critiqued By: Dellena Rovito On Date: 2011-10-01 16:43:23
Critiquer Rating During Critique: Unknown
All the basic we need and no frills is to some like heaven.
Minus all the earthly bull and living realistic aware of the magic in nature.
Sign me up I'll be happy!
Love the idea now where do you find this place?
This Poem was Critiqued By: Tony P Spicuglia On Date: 2011-09-24 20:31:55
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
It is a touching piece; although the setting is counterintuitive. I know there are those who live in the basic manner, but I haven't visited one since my last time to Pennsylvania and overseas.
I think in this piece, your point wasn't the lifestyle or availability, rather the fact the in the simplist form, living is easily more fulfilling to the soul.
Often I have wished to live in the wild, on a mountain, away from it all- and yet how would I survive without reading your verse, that you poignantly share with us all here.
I am a voracious reader- and have many poetry books; those would suffice I guess-
Still, I often wish for there..
This Poem was Critiqued By: cheyenne smyth On Date: 2011-09-08 01:17:12
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
This poem gives me a sense of peace with its excellent word selection and profound theme. What a lovely place it would be with no distractions to keep us from enjoying our world as He made it. I have failed at picking a favoite line or phrase as I like all. Each line is outstanding and enjoyable to read. Well done.
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