This Poem was Submitted By: Dellena Rovito On Date: 2012-05-10 18:15:43 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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Didn't see Atlantic City Never strolled the Boardwalk Baltic Avenue, Marven Gardens From what states are they?  Haven't been anywhere Never done anything much As inept as the best playing At the game of my life At the crunch of every roll Always rushing to go past go  Lies the push for more dough The lifetime mass passes  Community chest just in jest Hotels for houses make your move  Moneys phony nothings stable Pay no taxes take your chances If all else fails you go to jail Free Parking bro's Parkers  Waste your time collect your dime  Travel the Reading Railroad   Follow the commercial road toad! So what does one play today? Other games many other places  Moving with the roll of the die

Copyright © May 2012 Dellena Rovito

This Poem was Critiqued By: cheyenne smyth On Date: 2012-06-04 17:53:13
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.66667
Hi Dellena, This is a fanciful poem and one I enjoyed reading from the first line to the last. You have chosen fine words to express yourself and even though they are light hearted I detect some melancholy betweem the lines. I'm probably wrong and you just wrote this for fun. And fun it is. Your syllable count is uneven but that doesn't detract a thing from this piece. Well done. Best wishes, ccheyenne

This Poem was Critiqued By: Ellen K Lewis On Date: 2012-05-24 00:30:29
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.00000
Dellena, this is delightful! A light- hearted read that everyone can relate to. The last line keeps playing over in my mind....Since you are talking about the present, maybe you could come up with something else that relates to chance...'click of the mouse' comes to mind..LOL Its good to see that you are 'in the game' here! ~smiles~ Ellen
This Poem was Critiqued By: DeniMari Z. On Date: 2012-05-14 16:48:37
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
Cute take on the game that's been around for a very long time. Spent hours in my youth playing it and enjoying every minute until it went in to overtime - (smile) AC is here in NJ and trust me you're not missing much unless you're a compassionate gambler which I bet you aren't. Nice short and sweet - clever as well, blessings, Deni
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