This Poem was Submitted By: Robert L Tremblay On Date: 2004-02-21 02:18:15 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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Silent SCREAM!

Could have been doctor, lawyer, president, whatever. Could have been plumber, carpenter, any laborer; Maybe, given Fate, a thief or, even, drug addict, But, impossible now, due abortionist's edict. Because of abortion, this life will never know breath Although some say not life; but, if not, is it in death, For, genetic matter is one or the other, but Neither is impossible to imagine, then what? If lineage is sound, this being's genes would remain The same, barring mutation, until it's life would wane And, if genes are life's essence, then must this not be life;                         Given this, what right to kill it has the surgeon's knife. Four months in development, this being does appear To be human with arms and legs; no doubt, mankind's peer  In worthiness and comparable to any man In soul's value; maybe, more, considering it's clan. Not by rape or incest was it conceived but by choice; Therefore, this creature was in love and all should rejoice Over the mystery involved in this creation Which has stayed the same since universe's formation. Some would say the world is overpopulated, so We have a moral right to terminate unborn foe Whose mouth would add to five billion the number to feed While millions today do not even have needed seed. Well, the truth be known, there is plenty of food around,  The hunger that's present due to politics unsound And to place the blame for hunger upon the unborn, Tempts almighty God and foreshadows Gabrielle’s horn. Regardless of belief, whether life begins or not At conception, if truth be good and compassion sought, Who, in God's name, could find something worthwhile to redeem In dismemberment of body during silent SCREAM!!?

Copyright © February 2004 Robert L Tremblay

Additional Notes:
By the way, I do believe in Freeedom of Choice. Bobby T.

This Poem was Critiqued By: Mick Fraser On Date: 2004-03-06 19:03:07
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.61538
Excellent Robert. I appreciate your tribute to the ones that cudda been. I too am freedom of choice, but your words makes one stop and ponder. This is on my list simply because it made me think...and not often does any writing provoke me in that way. Mick

This Poem was Critiqued By: Regis L Chapman On Date: 2004-03-02 11:16:10
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.17857
Wow. A powerful breakdown of this topic. It's a good thing for the notes, or else I might have misunderstood. This is a divisive topic. My take on it that while I am naturally against any type of killing, I am a man, and therefore I have to respect the karma of whosoever makes this choice for themselves. The poem in fact makes me quite sad in consideration of the topic. It's like a group of little arguments and statements on the topic gathered up into a small package with a big punch. Great job in really honestly looking at this topic. I find it quite interesting though, to speak of this general debate, how men really have such a stake in considering this. Maybe it's the caveman impulse unfolding itself, or a control issue. The unfortunate thing about the topic is that really at this point in the evolution of the human race birth control is a real thing. Death is likely to come in so many ways, considered on the whole. Most of us here know nothing of that problem, but it is a truism for most people in the world. All of this can be thought of as sad for one reason or another, but mostly is just the second law of thermodynamics coming around again. Thanks, REEG!
This Poem was Critiqued By: Jordan Brendez Bandojo On Date: 2004-02-25 17:46:51
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.89286
Dear Bob, I also believe in Freedom of Choice but still it is subjected to a limitation that it would not harm anything, specifically the life. Your theme is is absolutely significant for it is one of the byword issues in our society today. Abortion is rampant and some part of the world is legalizing it! Are they not haunted by the SILENT SCREAM(s)? The title is very effective for the poem. Because of abortion, this life will never know breath ---- so brutal is the life that never recognize breath. The line is poetic that way ("life will never know breath") A little comment on this line: The same, barring mutation, until it's life would wane -- I think the apostrophe here is not need, isn't it the possessive "its"? Also in this line: In soul's value; maybe, more, considering it's clan (its clan?) Sorry if I got it wrong! Anyway, this doesn't effect to the totality of the poem. I like the inclusion of "Gabrielle’s horn". It is a manifestation of originality. The application of rhyming is a plus factor especially that it doesn't hinder the inlfux of ideas. From all the submissions for this month, I think this is my choice. Good luck! Thanks for sharing, Bob! Jordan
This Poem was Critiqued By: Sherri L Smith On Date: 2004-02-22 14:23:18
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.90000
Dear Bobby, I too believe in Freedom of Choice, but I lost a daughter and I hate to hear of abortions, abandoned, and abused children. I have a special place in my heart for each of them. It takes courage to write what you feel and I know courage is not something that you lack. I am sure you will get a lot of grief for this, but it stands the test, and it is so true. Sherri
This Poem was Critiqued By: Wayne R. Leach On Date: 2004-02-22 11:57:55
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
A very strong statement, and well made! I do think ther appears to be a little too much strain in the rhyming attempts. There are seemingly a lot of commas that detract some from the force of the poet's statement. Maybe a few could be left out?? Maybe, given Fate, a thief or even drug addict, But, impossible now due to abortionist's edict. - [just a thought or 2] Great work overall. Write on.
This Poem was Critiqued By: Claire H. Currier On Date: 2004-02-21 10:23:10
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.56757
A most difficult subject to write about poet and you have done it well and I am certain this will touch the heart and soul of many......those who have already had an abortion will tell you, if they are honest about it, that they have cried over and regret it since.......hard not to for indeed it was a life, a part of one's body and in my mind it was murder........Freedom of Choice..........sure choose not to have sex unless you are ready to carry on with life should you be fortunate enough to conceive......oh well....enough from me.....Good structure, word flow keeps the read going and allows for images as one does travel down that road of life and death......I like the issues you bring up too poet about food and government. nicely stated and added the right touch as well. Thank you for posting and sharing this with us. Again, a most difficult subject for many to write about let alone safe, God Bless, Claire
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