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Grounded A winged phalanx breasts the hill, and were I myself, four times or more, a titan, I could, with limbs outstretched, my fingers run through such down as heat a heart to comfort’s perfect state. With carving wings, the shavings of spring air doppler my ear with before and now and farthest thrust, to dust my memory with longing. Were I among their numbers, flanked by form and sergeant’s chevron, I should, with blush of spirit stand that tall, the ‘V’ of victory my seasoned song. I kiss the air, a covenant upon my lips, to live each breath, a measure of such consequence. |
This Poem was Critiqued By: Wayne R. Leach On Date: 2004-07-22 20:56:48
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.93333
A wonderful flight down a page. Your alliteration and staccato lines make this poem fly of its own accord. I believe this to be a tribute to those with wings, and an excellent one, too. I see nothing I could suggest for improvement. Thanks for sharing. Peace. wrl