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Arthurian Ode - Part One A kingly babe by heaven’s heart sent through thunderous clap and darkness corrupt birthed the blest in legend to be met carefully disguised in destinies thrust. The knights are plenty and castles stone cold wrapped in pageants and glamorous gloss the pagans once bold, turned sour and old England embraces the Roman Church cross. The life of church and crown are parched spilling blood in the waste of war as the comforting hearth, lost to the march of drunk lusty power beyond England’s door. The once great Merlin has left all behind to steward the vision gifted by powers while star wrapped signs mark well the decline of wizards tradition as Christianity flowers. Merlin wears patience like a time worn saddle steering the plan from devious loss as mixed forces battle, spending men as chattel while courts of comfort ledger the cost. The seasons march past, and no hints betray Arthur’s purpose uncommon, yet plainly bound in the promise of hope, he bears the oath blind to cause still sleeping sound. His course well marked by destinies dance Arthur wanders to the old man's fire where ripened chance, grows circumstance and the mystic’s true sight, reveals the higher. “Arthur, come near, and I’ll view the worth warming the promise to England and man heritage has cursed, by stardust and earth a battle of forces bound in your plan.” “Merlin of the Woods, you bait such replies like clever court gossip, scheming to drop truth bound lies, in riddled disguise to engage my ear, and hold my stop.” The Wizard stare is beyond the youth, “I see well into distant dark days when man will choose, the promise of truth and lift the heart with unstained displays.” “Arthur, my view is wide without waste the time we spend could stop this day marking the place, that forked my fate and darkened the light of divinities play.” “I will tell you this, young Arthur of light your kingdom awaits like a promised bride dressed in white, she will lift histories sight to the greatness of good, through the darkness of pride.” “It is for you young Arthur, to weigh this well for the future will catch, the words that fall echoing the spell, that marks heaven or hell and the freedom enshrined in humanities call.” “Old wicked wizard, our time is done and I must sleep to find the true when the morn has come, our fate will be won and the high will reveal the place for you.” |
Additional Notes:
More to follow..... I hope.
This Poem was Critiqued By: Latorial D. Faison On Date: 2004-10-03 11:06:02
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Robert, this is passionately written with much respect for the history of England. I was more amazed as each stanza and line went on by. Poets have different motivations, and I'm always astounded when I come across poetry whose motivations are different from my own, because I know what it takes to write a poem. It does take passion and it takes pride, love and yearning for the subject inside.
You have skillfully crafted this poem. It's brilliant use of language sets the tone which is required. I felt like I, myself, was somewhere in King Arthur's court bearing witness to all that unfolds.
I think you do a wonderful job of articulating the scene with poetry. The reader is drawn in. To be honest, I felt like I was reading a Shakespearean play. I could picture it all.
I'd be interested in seeing the "more" that will come after this. It will make a great piece in total. I'm curious, did you study literature anywhere? This is some great writing, and I'm glad that you shared it at TPL this month.
The title is so aesthetic, and what follows is a poem so rich in history and creativity. Poetic genius. Great work.
Latorial
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