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With Leaves Stirring Atop my high-stepping mare, we ride down the canyon to watch the sun sink in glory. The same old story? Not when it is a scene that eludes an artist's brush, A panorama of southwestern colors that change fom cumin, orange, then euclase. Sage with its purple-blue tints arriving with hints of earth tones, shades which Bespeak desert. The majestic wind, rising from no specific place, uplifts the faces of alder trees with labile leaves. A profusion of grasses waves, trembling by the surprise Of their unmaking. These scenes rarely waver from stillness, stones which know a life without desires, dwelling in its own distance from nowhere. Then utterly Focussed, scattering chips of granite to praise these views of time and place. |
This Poem was Critiqued By: Latorial D. Faison On Date: 2005-10-07 21:40:47
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.96000
This is some nice word play and wonderful descriptions you have. I think its great when writers can illustrate true beauty through words. I rarely do that. Watching the sun sink in glory is a beautiful thought, and you end the poem with another great thought . . . praising the views of time and place.
There's so much true beauty in nature, and you have captured a still shot of a glorious moment, and because you've written it poetically, we can all share. Great job.
Latorial
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