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Carole Patton Mennie spent 25 years as a journalist, writing for a wide variety of business and computer publications. During that time, she won the American Business Press Award for Outstanding Journalism. These days, she sells real estate in north-central New Jersey, and is passionate about her first love--poetry! She has two talented daughters, one handsome son, and four grandchildren. Oh yes, she is married to a wonderful guy who puts up with notebooks (and crumbs) in bed.

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Poem Title Poet Name Critique Given by carole j mennie Critique Date
japanese verse 24 (Old Age) Erzahl Leo M. Espino Hi Erzahl--Lovely Haiku, expertly done. You have mastered the form. Also, a salty truth in L3. [Well, we ought to get something in return for the painful joints, the wrinkles, right?] Nice! Best--Carole 2003-09-27 09:12:19
Haiku - untitled Andrea M. Taylor Hi Andrea--You've got the 5/7/5 syllable style down. Good job! However, a Haiku should also make sense gramatically. 'Abound' is a transitive verb suggesting 'plenty' or 'abundance' so while you might say 'fish abound in the stream,' you can't say 'fish is abound.' You need a replacement. (Autumn is afoot; ablaze?) Good job. Thanks for the opportunity! Best--Carole 2003-09-27 08:34:05
Hamburg Haiku Michael J. Cluff Hi Michael--I am becoming quite a fan of haiku and tanka, and this is excellent! The 5/7/5 form is right on. The images are superb, and I like your use of 'trills'--also, the title! Bring on the special sauce! Memorable piece. Best--Carole 2003-09-23 23:28:34
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Poem Title	Poet Name	Critique Given by carole j mennie	Critique Date
japanese verse 24 (Old Age)	Erzahl Leo M. Espino	Hi Erzahl--Lovely Haiku, expertly done. You have mastered the form. Also, a salty truth in L3. [Well, we ought to get something in return for the painful joints, the wrinkles, right?] Nice! Best--Carole	2003-09-27 09:12:19
Haiku - untitled	Andrea M. Taylor	Hi Andrea--You've got the 5/7/5 syllable style down. Good job! However, a Haiku should also make sense gramatically. 'Abound' is a transitive verb suggesting 'plenty' or 'abundance' so while you might say 'fish abound in the stream,' you can't say 'fish is abound.' You need a replacement. (Autumn is afoot; ablaze?) Good job. Thanks for the opportunity! Best--Carole	2003-09-27 08:34:05
Hamburg Haiku	Michael J. Cluff	Hi Michael--I am becoming quite a fan of haiku and tanka, and this is excellent! The 5/7/5 form is right on. The images are superb, and I like your use of 'trills'--also, the title! Bring on the special sauce! Memorable piece. Best--Carole	2003-09-23 23:28:34
Poem Title	Poet Name	Critique Given by carole j mennie	Critique Date