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This Poem was Submitted By: Michael Bird On Date: 2004-01-15 22:56:02 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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Dreams Will Come

I know it`s been a hour or two Well past your bedtime This I have to say to you To dream again is not a crime Just lay your pretty head right down Let your hair fall all around Then all your troubles will go away Many dreams will come your way Good thoughts are here to stay Dreams that come while you sleep Will be yours forever to keep Just lay your pretty head right down Let your hair fall all around Close your eyes and say a prayer You will go to places unaware Feels like you are floating on air Your journey will come from the heart And travel to places far apart Dreams will be there from the start Now I see a smile on your face Your troubles no longer in a race I know you are in a better place Just lay your pretty head right down Let your hair fall all around You will hear a pleasant sound Then you will know that you have found Your dreams All safe and sound

Additional Notes:
for Kathy

This Poem was Critiqued By: Irene E Fraley On Date: 2004-02-06 14:54:38
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.68750
Hi Michael, I wondered if this was a song as I read. The repetition of the lines, "Just lay your pretty head right down Let your hair fall all around" sounded like a refrain to me. There is a fairly complicated rhyme scheme in this poem and it must have been a challenge to meet the form. The image you present of a child being soothed and being given a "lullabye" poem is really nice and easy for the reader to picture. The mix of couplets with alternate lines rhying is interesting. I did stumble in the reading out loud in the first and fourth stanza, as the rhhythm seemed to change. I enjoyed this poem, particularly as it reminded me of my children when they were little. Rene Fraley

This Poem was Critiqued By: Claire H. Currier On Date: 2004-01-27 08:25:33
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.56364
I am certain after such a lovely read Micheal that Kathy enjoyed this poem very much ...nice structure, superb word flow, images appear as one travel down and I like the rhyme effect as well......It does have a musical undertone to the read as well so I am sure it would do well placed to music......for a small child this would be kinda like a lullaby for it would lull you to sleep with music......there are so many different places within the lines that should be pointed out ats being superb in their saying and meaning......thank you for posting and sharing this with us, be safe and God Bless, Claire I have not dreamed in years and when I did the only dream I do recall was a nightmare involving turtles....big, large turtles caught in Canada by a french uncle and brought to our home in Massachusetts to make turtle soup which I do not recall eating....thank the Lord for little blessings....... know this has nothing to do with the poem just wanted to share my one dream......hehehe....

This Poem was Critiqued By: Gerard A Geiger On Date: 2004-01-23 19:29:59
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
Dear Michael; A very nice lullaby...I can almost hear it put to music. It sounds like Kathy could not sleep because she wad a bad dream...Your soft words and rythmic rhyme scheme help set the mood, the cadence, for kathy to fall back to sleep,to dream, to drift, peacefully, slowly, to sleep. Thanks for the read, Gerard

This Poem was Critiqued By: Mick Fraser On Date: 2004-01-22 08:44:07
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 8.77778
Hello Michael; This is a very traditionally structured work and reminds me of why I came to like poetry in the first place. First, I don't have to spend a lot of time interpreting this offering. Your message is quite clear. Second, I found that the words with all the rhymes could easily be put to music and lastly, your ending ties up the piece completely...there aren't any unanswered questions. Ty for sharing your effort and keep writing. Mick

This Poem was Critiqued By: Robin Ann Crandell On Date: 2004-01-17 13:53:12
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
Michael, This reader is reminded of putting my daughter to bed. What a time it is to share moments as those listed above in your poem. I would like to refer to a specific part of your poem, and explain the thoughts I had when I read it. Dreams will be there from the start Now I see a smile on your face Your troubles no longer in a race I know you are in a better place "Dreams will be there form the start." This is so moving. When I lay my child down to sleep at night.. I always hope that they will have dreams of happiness, and that they will be there as soon as they close their eyes. "Now I see a smile on your face." As my child falls asleep, I see the smile that embraces her face. Making me so happy, forcing me to give her another kiss - even though I've already given 10 of them. "Your troubles no longer in a race." No matter what a young one is having touble with, I can pray that in sleep their troubles will be taken away. They can sleep peacefully, not worrying about the day that is about to pass. "I know you are in a better place" Dreams have a way of letting us fantisize of things that can be out of reach here on earth. They have a way of letting us excape from the world that we live in here. We can only hope that the dream they have will take them to a better place, and not a nightmare of something that they are afraid of. Great Poem. Made me think more about my little one. Thank you for sharing. Robin.

This Poem was Critiqued By: Regis L Chapman On Date: 2004-01-16 18:25:24
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.66667
I like this poem as even something to read to a child, which feels like this is exactly what it was intended for. It's simple, a bit long, but it would seem necessary when reading to a child. I have not criticisms at all for this. Well done! Thanks, REEG!

This Poem was Critiqued By: arnie s WACHMAN On Date: 2004-01-16 17:43:04
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 7.40000
Yes...but what about the night mares? How do you explain those? Pizza before bed? Ah, I'm getting off course here. I like the repetition here. It sounds lyrical and melodical to me.It's a pretty poem, and reads very well. I like the title. Is this your daughter? Thanks so much. It's one poem from you I haven't read in a long time.

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