This Poem was Submitted By: Paul R Lindenmeyer On Date: 2004-12-11 10:50:16 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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Out The Window I Go

  The holiday season just brings out the best  of laughter and joy and the sharing of jest. The lights and bright colors all mingle and blend  with humour and stories too hard to pretend. It's August, it's hot, and the window sill's cool,  no hurry today, it's vacation, no school!! Head pressed on the screen, and relaxed I recall,  "Get off there!" he said, I did nothing at all. When your five, hearing mutes all you don't want to hear.  His words never even got thru the first ear. Oh wisdom, sum total of all mistakes made,  exacts quite a toll, when its'call's not obeyed. The thrill of the free fall's not all that they say,  then the uncushioned landing jumped into the fray. Out the window I flew, screen frame zooming away,  with a landing not done in the usual way. Using wood screens to fly, taking off from a bay,  is not even endorsed by the great EAA. "Hear's" the lesson hard learned, and the truth of it all.   Perhaps "Hearing" will keep you from taking the fall. May your season be filled with the blessings of light,  and may all of your memories be filled with safe flight.       

Copyright © December 2004 Paul R Lindenmeyer

Additional Notes:
True story, and as you can see I survived!!! I think!! Peace, Paul EAA is Experimental Aircraft Association.

This Poem was Critiqued By: Jennifer j Hill On Date: 2005-01-04 09:27:20
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Dear Paul, Thank you for sharing this story and for giving us such a good laugh. You helped me remember some of the crazy things I did as a child. How fun, you might have inspired many a poem with this offering. The title draws the reader in immediately. And the stroy is such a good one. With a great lesson learned! This is my favorite part: "The thrill of the free fall's not all that they say, then the uncushioned landing jumped into the fray. Out the window I flew, screen frame zooming away, with a landing not done in the usual way." I laughed to tears with that one. You're right! The season brings out sharing and laughter and jest. That's one of the things I love about Christmas. Hope yours was wonderful. And a happy New YEar as well. Blessings, Jennifer

This Poem was Critiqued By: James Edward Schanne On Date: 2005-01-03 13:50:50
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.18750
if other peoples mistakes made the same impression on us as our own(mentally and physically) then we'd find it much easier to grow wiser. And having an eleven year old step daughter I can see the words of warning as they go around hear ears and never in them but thats the nway things always tend but I have hope that I impress somewhat. Thanks for letting me read and comment.
This Poem was Critiqued By: Sherri L Smith On Date: 2004-12-23 10:21:49
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
Dear Paul, Thanks for a wonderful story, Happy Holidays to you and yours. Sherri SMith
This Poem was Critiqued By: arnie s WACHMAN On Date: 2004-12-19 17:01:34
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Thanks for the laugh Paul. I had a similar experience from a window when I was (I think) three years of age. I can still see the stitches in my lip and eyebrom at the age of 69! Fell onto a rock garden twenty feet below. As you can tell (or can you) I still have my facilties (although many may question that!). Good ryhming story. Thanks for brightening up my day.
This Poem was Critiqued By: Dellena Rovito On Date: 2004-12-15 18:10:42
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.00000
Paul, Cute poem/ took a fall by not minding your elders/father? You took a big fall. Off the house. It wasn't so fun to land. Kids get crazy..did you become a free faller? Or did that give you fear? Happy blessings of light to you. dellena
This Poem was Critiqued By: Mell W. Morris On Date: 2004-12-11 12:15:12
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Paul: I guess it'safe to assume you were on the mezzanine or second floor. What a way to celebrate Christmas but boys will be...You maintain your pace here very nicely with an aa/bb cc/dd rhyme. This seasonal poem works quite well in the structure for which you opted. The piece is light and jolly, the choice of the words seems apposite and roll with the flow. It's as if the window screen jumped with you and cushioned your fall. (Note Stanza 3, line 4: its call's. Its is a pronoun, no apostrophe). Now I come to a chord which strikes a personal note with me: ""Hear's"" the lesson hard learned and the truth of it all. Since I am extremely deaf, that "rang my bell." A timely story for children and I treasure moments when elders pass down their wisdom in little vignettes. You write quite ably and I'm always glad to see your name on either a poem or a review. I am quite curious about you but I think it's rude to be intrusive. Thanks for the window ride! Best wishes, Mell
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