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Fleur de lys

Somewhere over the rainbow  the daughter of Titan's flew.  A lovely haloed maiden fair  with flowing hair, and fast of wing.  Traveling with the speed of the wind splitting light waves as she crossed the sky.  In her wake the rainbow was born.  From the 'eye of heaven' earthward, bearing commands from Gods Zeus and Hera.  In Greek Mythology she was named  the 'Goddess of the Rainbow'.  Her task was bringing women's souls  to paradise. To reveal to them love  in varied form. To encourage hope, peace, gratitude, and compassion.            On earth, in the springtime  she comes into day as floral sovereign.  Lofty stature, she's the flower Iris. Delicately fleshed blushed in beautiful, as fresh and true of multi-hues,  the poor man's orchid. Common  yet royally rich, the three petal Flag. Guarded sacred in the garden stand by sharp and bladed knaves. She's pleasure  to the soul, a brilliant show of cheer and healing.  From the sun to a raindrop to your eye, the  rainbow arcs. Presenting part of the full circle. Our souls exist through our eye, colored Iris.  A bouquet gift 'From the eye of heaven…'

Copyright © April 2005 Dellena Rovito


This Poem was Critiqued By: Helen C DOWNEY On Date: 2005-05-04 09:04:37
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 8.68000
Dellena, Well written and full of informative things that I did not know. Excellent flow, describing the different meaning of the IRIS (lys). Beautifully done. I wish I had a chance to read this ealier. She sure is a winner! So glad that you posted her. Helen


This Poem was Critiqued By: Audrey R Donegan On Date: 2005-04-30 23:45:02
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 8.26087
Great first and last line. Singling them out, giving them room to breath 'lofty stature' - wonderful 'as fresh and true as multi-hues' - roles right off the tongue a minor suggestion:instead of 'in her wake the rainbow was born' maybe 'in her wake, a rainbow born' (unless ofcourse your intention was to imply that she was the reason rainbows were created - Then leave it as is.) Either way a beautiful piece. Audrey
This Poem was Critiqued By: Rachel F. Spinoza On Date: 2005-04-26 21:43:44
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Lovely evocative poem Somewhere over the rainbow I like it that you take us down this particular yellow brick road as an introduction to this splendid piece the daughter of [Titans] flew. A lovely haloed maiden fair with flowing hair, and fast of wing. Traveling with the speed of the wind [split-][needs a transition form here]light waves as she crossed the sky. In her wake the rainbow was born. ah, incredible legend indeed From the 'eye of heaven' earthward, bearing commands from [-Gods] Zeus and Hera[we know they are gods]. In Greek Mythology she was named the 'Goddess of the Rainbow'. Her task was bringing women's souls to paradise. To reveal to them love in varied form. To encourage hope, peace, gratitude, and compassion. a noble assignment inded! On earth, in the springtime she comes into day as floral sovereign. Lofty stature, she's the flower Iris. I always thought the Fleur de Lys and the attendant mythology referenced the lily! Interesting! Delicately fleshed blushed in beautiful [i think this lacks a noun], as fresh and true of multi-hues, the poor man's orchid. [neat expression Common yet royally rich, the three petal [f]lag. Guarded sacred in the garden stand [good "gu" and "a" assonance] by sharp and bladed knaves. She's pleasure to the soul, a brilliant show of cheer and healing. From the sun - to a raindrop - to your [eyes,] the rainbow arcs. Presenting part of the full circle. Our souls exist through our eye, colored Iris. good allusion to another iris!~ A bouquet gift 'From the eye of heaven…' Indeed - and this year I have two delicate pink ones among the purple ones which are just starting to bloom I will look at them anew because of this poem. Thanks Dellena~
This Poem was Critiqued By: Claire H. Currier On Date: 2005-04-22 12:07:09
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.10000
From this reading on I shall see the Iris in the side yard in a different light......wow, this is so beautiful, so well structured, enjoyed the word flow and all it brought forth.......you are a very talented writer and one that knows how to present her work. Each line just continues to flow like a river on a warm spring night...........thanks for posting and sharing with us.....God Bless, Claire
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