This Poem was Submitted By: Kenneth R. Patton On Date: 2005-08-26 12:22:20 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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We Love Yet

Our tears mingled caught in a jar then hung around our necks Each in an amulet Our fears mingled sent from afar then flung from our lives …and we love yet

Copyright © August 2005 Kenneth R. Patton

This Poem was Critiqued By: Joanne M Uppendahl On Date: 2005-09-04 19:00:03
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.77778
Ken: From the title, with its implications of enduring love through the ending which repeats the title, this poem is like a continuous wave of warmth from one being to another. Whether the love is romantic or filial doesn’t seem to matter as much as the reassurance of it permanence. It is for such love that we all yearn. Often it comes at great price, as you show in L1: “Our tears mingled” Why is love without suffering seemingly impossible? Or is it that we do not truly love unless we are ‘passionate’ in the truest sense of that word--suffering with another? “caught in a jar then hung around our necks Each in an amulet” There is something so soothing in reading this poem – I think that personally it is the reminder that such love exists and continues. We are not separate beings at these times, but truly connected at a soul level. Even reading can induce the sense, at least for this reader, of such loves in my own life. There are times when we feel at a distance even from those for whom we feel the deepest of attachment. But the poem reminds, with its “amulet” that we do not lose that connection other than becoming unaware of its presence. Our fears mingled sent from afar then flung from our lives …and we love yet To love without fear – this is the highest achievement, in my view. To be rid of doubts and past failings and insecurities. Whatever form those may take. To share the knowledge of the past fears, yet remain in the presence of the loved one – the highest achievement. This simply written poem speaks through decades of life, from one who offers hope to another. Who offers hope to the reader of the very thing that makes life most worth living. “We love yet.” There isn’t anything more that need be said than these words. Wonderful~! Bravo! My best always, Joanne

This Poem was Critiqued By: Mark Steven Scheffer On Date: 2005-08-30 16:48:25
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.56757
Ken, This poem is haunted by "yet" in the sense you see it when the word is normally joined with "and," as in "that much is true, and yet . . . " That "yet" is, as I said, haunting this poem. I see the backdrop, and the continuance of love is all the more poignant. That is a masterfull stroke, using a word in one sense and deftly exploiting its other sense. The best effects in poems are "unsaid," either by allusion, or by saying something that obviously brings in other meaning without saying it - like your use of "yet" here. A brilliant effect which I will assume you intended. Mark
This Poem was Critiqued By: arnie s WACHMAN On Date: 2005-08-30 12:04:27
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.25926
There's a yin and yang thing going on here. I guess that what this means is that your love is strong no matter the circumstances. Nicely done. Thanks for posting.
This Poem was Critiqued By: Latorial D. Faison On Date: 2005-08-29 09:37:05
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.96667
This is a short poem, yet it comprises so much said about life, love and living Kenneth. This is the kind of poem that I love to indulge in. It's short, and it gives the reader ample time to review and take in all that it could possible mean. To begin, the title is intriguing and it has a traditional sound and ring to it. It's poetic "We Love Yet" It suggests to the reader that something profound or prolific is sure to follow, and that's totally what I think. The first stanza is telling, and it reveals something so sweet and personal. Tears mingled/caught in a jar/then hung around our necks/EAch in an amulet . . . Not only are these lines poetic, but they are pure and sweet and revealing of a deep love, great feelings between two people, and what you reveal is a love so special that even the tears can be cherished and saved, salvaged or savored. They are keepsakes, and the amulet will transcend time, even when you are gone. People think of tears and crying in many ways, but as you suggest in this first stanza, they are memories to treasure. This is a great meaning to convey. Tears are a great part of love, and I'm glad that you focused on this aspect here. Our fears mingled/sent from afar/then flung from our lives/...and we love yet . . . This second stanza proposes another greater element of love. Often times, one of the greatest hurdles in love involves taking that risk and overcoming those natural fears involved. And you speak of fears mingled here in this poem, and that's very natural . . . to have fears of love or the days to come. The second line / sent from afar / could suggest many things and bring other elements into play here. You could speak of lovers separated or perhaps something in the past come back to confront the love that's shared. It could be about so many things, and this will allow readers everywhere to relate to this poem. Then flung from our lives . . . and that's often what has to happen with fear in order to move on. Yuu have to rid yourself of it, and go on in the name of love And we love yet . . . What a statment, what a poem. You did a very good job with this one. It's just two stanzas, yet there is so much more in every line of the poem. It all works together for a common, greater good, a bold statement on memories and love. Excellent. Thanks for sharing this one. Latorial
This Poem was Critiqued By: Rachel F. Spinoza On Date: 2005-08-28 10:22:17
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Ah, Ken! This piece combines the terse wisdom of a Blake with the luscious imagistic nuances of a poet like William Carlos Williams Our tears mingled caught in a jar then hung around our necks Each in an amulet But just one jar? A little confusing as to reference of subject. Perhaps caught in jars? The word "amulet" is one of the most beautiful in the English language I think and your use of it to end the stanza - which allows us to caress it slowly it is marvelous. Our fears mingled I think it is splendid in form to repeat mingled and rhyme the word previous to that end rhymne in each stanza. sent from afar then flung from our lives …and we love yet and we love yet - yes the indomidable way we hold on to hope is a miracle indeed, wonderful poem, Ken.
This Poem was Critiqued By: Turner Lee Williams On Date: 2005-08-26 20:52:37
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.90323
Kenneth--IMO,A metaphoric piece references lovers exchanging pledges and keepsakes; "Our tears mingled caught in a jar then hung around our necks Each in an amulet" And, for whatever reason something causes both parties some consternation, but still the relationship endures; "Our fears mingled sent from afar then flung from our lives …and we love yet" The short unpuncuated rhyming poem is musical in its read while also serving as a testament to this undaunted love. Thanks for sharing this terse post with your fellow TPLers. TLW
This Poem was Critiqued By: Dellena Rovito On Date: 2005-08-26 18:26:56
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.69231
Ken, I like the relationship with each stanza........ Our tears mingled caught in a jar then hung around our necks Each in an amulet Our fears mingled sent from afar then flung from our lives… and we love yet I like the internal rhymes.........hung/flung. I think the idea of the poem was even though we cry/fear/we still love. Even through the struggle we love. [yet] I actually think God is love ..... Good job Ken Dellena
This Poem was Critiqued By: Lora Silvey On Date: 2005-08-26 14:40:19
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.78571
Kenneth, Your title is perfect, it certainly draws your reader in. Our tears mingled caught in a jar then hung around our necks Each in an amulet [How very romantic, this tugs at the heart strings and on the real level what a wonderful way to keep close an essence of the one you love.] Our fears mingled sent from afar then flung from our lives …and we love yet [This definitly speaks of a love that will last through out time, an ageless love that will endure any and all things placed in it's way. It gave me goosebumps. This is the love that romantics dream of.] Your poem is well crafted, good structure and word flow, one that demands to be read and re-read. Thank you for sharing this poem with us. A true winner, top of the line. Lora
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