This Poem was Submitted By: Dellena Rovito On Date: 2005-09-18 19:15:32 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!To Listen to Music While Reading this Poem, just Click Here!
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Stars The Sun cast a flashy sparkling smile in the daytime sky.
Dazzling with fancy footwork dancing in and out of clouds.
Moving to the rhythm of the universe across a theater of sky.
Partnered in orbital rotation with the earth in the solar system.
Not unlike Fred Astaire who once tap-danced across the stage in ‘Top Hat’
synchronized with the soundtrack and Ginger Rogers on his arm.
He sparkled like a star in the evening sky in brilliant magical moments.
Timed to the beat of his heart, always in expression of the impossible.
Both captivating spirits, who shine spectacular in every performance.
Gentleman who posses and utilize dynamic cadence in the spot light.
Two of one hundred billion stars in our galaxy........
Beings with absolute humility,
tipping their top hats to you………
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Copyright © September 2005 Dellena Rovito
This Poem was Critiqued By: Tony P Spicuglia On Date: 2005-10-01 16:44:35
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Dellena, - “Stars” there immediately has “there is a subject worth a poem”, going through my mind. And I wonder, what new nuance will present the prize to me? You did not disappoint.
I like the thought of “flashy smile”. The sun, a star of course, does brighten the sky like a smile from across the room. And you capture well the “footwork” as the sunbeams dance to and from the clouds which act as paramours to the light. I think, to think of the larger dance, that of “orbital” and “solar” makes the suns crossing a dance step, and the entire view a universal dance.
I particularly like the you bringing in “Fred” and “Ginger”. You could have gone farther and brought in many of Fred’s other partners, but the spirit is held completely in this pairing. “Timed to the beat”, a descriptive piece for ball.
You speak of “spirits” and then you collide the thought with “one hundred billion” and we see the power and resources of this dance. Humility must accompany the beauty, for the beauty has birthed the “poetry” of the sky.
An excellent piece, thoroughly enjoyed the read.
This Poem was Critiqued By: Joanne M Uppendahl On Date: 2005-09-22 19:33:29
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Dellena:
I had to go hunt for this as it disappeared! I read it when you posted
and thought, this gal speaks my language! We have talked so many
times of Brian Swimme, quantum physics, astronomy, life and love.
But you have it all here. You give the stars human personalities, or
you give humans stellar ones. You mix it up, and I love that! It
is as dazzling, as the “fancy footwork” you write of. What it
makes me visualize is the endlessly moving universe. No stasis
in it except through our own limited perceptions of time and
space. We talk of “fixed stars” as though they really are. The
movement of the dancers “in and out of clouds” as fleet-footed
as Fred and Ginger is a fabulous analogy. They twinkled on the
screen, always in motion, and now are gone. The stars appear
to twinkle and we see them, and in our tiny ant-life they seem
as predictable and unperturbed as solid trees or mountains.
And yet everything is always and constantly in a state of
change. Even if you only raised a single thought here, such
as “rhythm of the universe” you would have sent me into
outer space – as I was prepared by your title to go there. I
see the reference to Fred and Ginger as “captivating spirits”
and smile, for recalling our discussion of the nature of these
luminaries just makes me happy all over again. You paint
them, or rather, produce/direct them in this ‘film’ of a poem,
as beings. This is a fascinating idea that has captured me for
most of my life. I can’t get over it, and you remind me of
the happiness I get just from looking up at the night sky,
and remembering – I do not know what. Someday we will find
out what it was that we forgot so long ago. Wondrous!!
Love it, D!
Hugs,
Joanne
This Poem was Critiqued By: Lora Silvey On Date: 2005-09-22 12:06:34
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.88372
Dellena,
What a wonderful tribute to fabulous people. I also, as a child used to watch mesmerized as Fred and Ginger glided across the small screen in our living room.....in black and white..although in my mind they already where in techni-color...*smile*. Not only have you paid such a wonderful tribute you have coaxed memories to the fore of a time when life, entertainment and taste were way different then today. Thank you for this journey into the past, the present and hopefully the future......lest they be forgotten.
Lora
This Poem was Critiqued By: Troy D Skroch On Date: 2005-09-21 18:51:06
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Dellena,
I love the sun and the stars. I love the fact that you capitalized "Sun" in your first line.
Bravo!! Everyone smiles when they see the sun. No matter where we are or what we are
thinking, we can't respond to the sun in any other way.
Your bring your first stanza alive with word combinations like "flashy sparkling smile",
"fancy footwork dancing" and "across a theater of sky." This, of course, works so well as
you draw the reader into the second stanza with the comparison to "Fred Astaire" and
"Ginger Rogers". You bring the double meaning of "star" to light.
I like "shine spectacular" very much. Not as much as the line you once wrote "I kneel at
the foot of my life", but close. LOL!
And with that my fair lady, I tip my hat to you and say thank you for another dazzling
piece of poetry. Besides, I can't stand to wear a tux for too long. LOL!
Take care,
T
This Poem was Critiqued By: arnie s WACHMAN On Date: 2005-09-20 19:22:20
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.40000
Okay, I found a way to change the font style. Don't ask me how 'cause I just fiddled and Rome did not play!
Aren't you proud of me? No need to answer that...I know you! I remember Astaire and Rogers very well...okay I'm old. It's neat that you put them in the perspective that you did. I had trouble with the
para. starting ..."Both captivating...." The next line doesn't fit. Maybe it's the punctuation.
Ah yes, we can have a little humility now and then...They certainly were "Stars". Fairly good structure. And yes, I did enjoy your take on them.
This Poem was Critiqued By: Karen Ann Jacobs On Date: 2005-09-20 12:41:56
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
This poem makes me smile, especially today when I need a smile. We’ve had thunderstorms with patchy sunlight, so as I’ve read this poem, with my room going from dark, to light, to dark again, I am getting to see your images effecting the world around me. It’s very cool! Yep, this is a perfect day for this poem, for me at least. “tipping their top hats to you” Thank you.
Kayren
This Poem was Critiqued By: marilyn terwilleger On Date: 2005-09-19 15:58:39
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Hi Dellena,
What an amazing notion that our sun dances in and out of clouds across the universe just like Fred and Ginger! With a fertile imagination you have given us a new look at the sun and personified it by giving it rhythm and allowing it to trip the light fantastic. I still love to watch Fred and Ginger dance and when I find an old movie of theirs I always watch it....he sparkled like a star in the evening sky in brilliant magical moments, timed to the beat of his heart, always in expression of the impossible...yes he did. His moves were so fluid, easy, and full of expression. He was not the most handsome guy but when he was on the dance floor I doubt if their was a woman watching that wouldn't have given anything to dance with him.
....two of one hundred bullion stars in our galaxy...beings with absolute humility, tipping their top hats to you...wonderful ending. I do believe I will think of this poem every time I look at the sun from now on!
Blessings....Marilyn
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