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This Poem was Submitted By: Dellena Rovito On Date: 2005-10-08 15:16:16 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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Anatomy

Front is usually the forward portion facing directly ahead. To the rear is the furthest point from behind the front. Behind me is what's left in back of the rear. The part within my body to the left or right is my side. Center's core is the same distance away from the middle. Top is over every underneath and upper part of the end. Under is lowest position at the bottom of everything. Whatever is left remains to be whatever is also right.

This Poem was Critiqued By: Tony P Spicuglia On Date: 2005-11-03 13:53:23
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.90476
Dellena, I had so many thoughts when reading this piece. They ventured sort of like this; • this is like the instructions for the bicycle I recently put together, only this one is accurate • wow, here are the exact “definitions” of everything relative to something, and it makes sense, a miracle in itself • when’s she going to get to the real “relative” anatomy!! (Never did) • Am I supposed to be smiling while I read this, I mean, is it serious, or is it a satire on anyone and everyone who has ever tried to describe something or give instructions for something where everything is relative to something else? • Let’s read it again, alright children, put your right foot in, take your right foot out… I finally decided I am going to let my seven year old read it and tell me what he thinks. If he sees the same value I do, then you really have a masterpiece her. Thanks for the anatomical “dissection”? A fun and somewhat- instructional view of relativism.

This Poem was Critiqued By: Claire H. Currier On Date: 2005-10-15 13:57:16
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
As my husband would say and probably add is that his arms are no longer long enough to do the trick. Enjoyed the read, loved the visuals you created in my imagination. Thanks for posting and please let me know if you are interested in some of my credits that I would love to transfer to you. God Bless, Claire

This Poem was Critiqued By: Joanne M Uppendahl On Date: 2005-10-14 14:30:49
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Dellena: Wow! I read this quite a few days ago, and pondered then. You have a way of consistently surprising me with your poetry. I found myself thinking from within the poem as if I were you or the speaker, and found that that was quite an assignment. <smile> Anatomy Front is usually the forward portion facing directly ahead. This is TIC and wittily flavored. “usually” makes it clear that directionality is relative. Your penchant for quantum physics shows up here, along with your unique humor! You refer to ‘facing’ and immediately I am placed within my face. To the rear is the furthest point from behind the front. And then, and then, you make me think of my ‘rear’ to the rear! And “what’s left” is apparently right, or left, depending on whether you are ‘facing’ forward or backward. The words “Behind” and “rear” in the same line give me a fit of giggles! Behind me is what's left in back of the rear. “Side” takes on a whole new meaning. Now it’s as if I’ve never heard this word before and am trying to define it. If I am round, do I have a ‘side’ or if I have no flat surfaces, do I have a plane? Is the ‘side’ the way we define the margin of something? What is my margin, and where does yours begin. If we own a piece of property, how far down into the earth’s core does that ownership extend, and how far up into the air? And also, which particles would belong to whom if we looked at them under a neutron microscope, trying to hit the exact place where one person’s property or self ends and another’s begins? The part within my body to the left or right is my side. Center's core is the same distance away from the middle. The core would depend, then on the circumference being measured accurately. But since we are mostly made of up fluids, which come and go, that could vary from moment to moment, hour to hour. Top is over every underneath and upper part of the end. D, I absolutely love this! I am so lost! And laughing so hard! It would be much easier to be a bird and not think about these things, landing on a branch, and not worrying about what is dropping ‘underneath’ and being unaware until the sensation hits of anything ‘above’ me. LOL! Under is lowest position at the bottom of everything. There’s that “bottom/behind/rear” again! How far under ground can we go? If we go far enough, gravity reverses so that we are again facing ‘up’ and that is why I like to be called “JoUp”! Whatever is left remains to be whatever is also right. I am so flummoxed, baffled, perplexed, bewildered, bemused, at sea, mystified and entertained, that I don’t need anything else today to lift my spirits! This is ‘Delectable D’ at her best! Thank you for clearing these matters ‘up’ for me in case anyone asks me what I am ‘up to’ today. I am definitely not in a ‘down’ mood after reading this, but my ‘sides’ hurt. LOL! Thanks again for a great one!!! Hugs, Joanne

This Poem was Critiqued By: Turner Lee Williams On Date: 2005-10-13 20:07:44
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Dellena--An excellent mind twister and such a fitting name for this imaginative humorous piece. The verbiage/body teaser is well worth the read. Thanks for sharing this bit of levity with your fellow TPLers. TLW

This Poem was Critiqued By: arnie s WACHMAN On Date: 2005-10-11 10:52:38
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
And then proximal is distal, etc. Center's core is medial, etc. That is anatomy...but you gave it a layman's shot. Whatever is left is the guts. Cute.

This Poem was Critiqued By: Lora Silvey On Date: 2005-10-08 23:02:45
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Dellena, This well crafted, good structured easy flowing read is a delight. Only you could come up with something like this. It is simply delightful and definitely put a smile on my face. How very clever of you and how very cleverly worded. Now had I had an anatomy teacher who percieved lessons and teaching in this style I might have enjoyed the class much more. I find that I am now looking at myself quite differently. Well done, brava! Always, Lora

This Poem was Critiqued By: marilyn terwilleger On Date: 2005-10-08 15:35:38
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
Hi D, You should be a medical school instructor! You have given a whole new meaning to the word 'Anatomy' I took a course in anatomy once...and it is not an easy subject to learn as it becomes so involved and the medical terms (which I am fairly good at) just blew me away. Where were you when I was trying to memorize parts of the body I didn't even know existed? Love this piece...it is clever and humorous and fun. 'whatever is left remains to be whatever is also right'...certainly a phrase to be pondered and a great way to end this poem. Good writing, as usual! Blessings...Marilyn

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