This Poem was Submitted By: Erzahl Leo M. Espino On Date: 2007-01-18 12:11:35 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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Poetry (entry 71)

soft as a vowel solid as a consonant language of the heart

Copyright © January 2007 Erzahl Leo M. Espino

Additional Notes:
* I have made some revisions on my haiku / senryu entries: - "Poetry" is simply the subject and title. - "71" is just my 71st haiku/senryu entry - set in small letters, so it would be more haiku-like

This Poem was Critiqued By: Dellena Rovito On Date: 2007-01-24 21:23:55
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.72727
Erzahl, poetry is the language of the heart...I like the softness and the hardness. The strength of words, the love of the spirit. It encompasses it all. good.... Dellena

This Poem was Critiqued By: Lora Silvey On Date: 2007-01-18 23:04:12
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Erzahl, Isn't it simply amazing how much can be said with just a few well chosen, well placed words. This senryu is so delicate yet strong in it's statement. Your count is right on and so is your structure. Thank you for this little gem to read. Best always, Lora
This Poem was Critiqued By: Tony P Spicuglia On Date: 2007-01-18 21:24:19
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.62500
Erzahl, I like this piece. I don't think I had ever really given consideration as to the "charector" of each alphabet entry. Listening to your piece, "soft" and "vowel" meet- and "solid" and "consonant", meet. I think I shall, on the face value of your verse, never look at the alphabet the same. As for the metaphor- "language" taking and using the "soft" and "solid", is a work of both when expressed verbally- yet you lead us to the unspoken "heart" and there is the dual metaphor- that the "language" expresses the values of its building blocks, yet the heart speaks silently- and requires building blocks of language to transit from one to the other. very nice verse!!
This Poem was Critiqued By: marilyn terwilleger On Date: 2007-01-18 15:14:13
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Hi Erzahl....It is so nice to see one of your haiku's today. You are such a master at these terse little gems and I am glad to see your muse is alive and well. I have dabbled some in cinquain poetry....are you familiar with that poetry form? You have a litle more freedom than haiku. This particular haiku is lovely. Yes poetry is the language of the heart in more ways than one. I have decided that poets see things differntly than most, which is a blessing, really. In three terse lines and few syllables you have managed to sum that up and make it wonderful. Well done. Peace....Marilyn
This Poem was Critiqued By: Claire H. Currier On Date: 2007-01-18 14:35:46
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
my granddaughter who is in the fifth grade did a haiku in school with her class and it was on view when I went to the Christmas play. It was wonderful and entailed the find your work as I know it comes from your heart. Be good.........stay healthy and enjoy the New Year....God Bless, Claire
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