This Poem was Submitted By: Dellena Rovito On Date: 2007-05-13 15:29:48 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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On A Horse Of Course

I await my Prince Charming  The companion of my dreams The man upon the pale horse Mighty stallion of esteem I've seen the flaring nostrils Of steed pounding down the road The rush of air ripples wind Bolds the gait of overload The knight sits tall with purpose Dauntless he's braced to win  A maiden's hand in marriage  With sincere respect of him I watch pageants of suitors Chivalrous ones moving past  Many gallant champions With their armor shined as glass And yes, my heartbeat quickens   Arms always extended wide Greeting to my charming Prince  His horse continues in its stride. The years race long and many My waving hanky's worn old Patiently I have waited My emotions now less bold The brightness from the armor  Will ever shine in my eye Now oxidized to dullness Silver polish I need apply

Copyright © May 2007 Dellena Rovito

This Poem was Critiqued By: DeniMari Z. On Date: 2007-05-26 11:44:48
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Dear Dellena, Such passion, deserves attention. You have put your heart, out on your sleeve, and have invited us in to your tale of love seeking. It doesn't matter how worn the hanky is - because in this piece, we are exposed to the true emotions you feel - heartbeat quickens, greeting the Prince, having a shine put in your eye............ all good descriptives to enfore the poem, and give it it's backbone. All in all - I enjoyed the read. It seems to me, the right "Prince", has not shown his face yet - and to settle for less than your hoping for would not make you happy. Good job, sincerely, Denimari

This Poem was Critiqued By: Gerard A Geiger On Date: 2007-05-21 08:21:00
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Dear Dellena; Chivalry isn't what it's made out to be. Nice humorous slant on the culmination of the designs of most spectators at events for which we all wax romantic...It appears that the lady has steadily held on to her handkerchief, when actually she was supposed to give it to her favorite...who then would wear it on his arm to signal his affection, and perform for her honour. Quite entertaining piece....enjoyed the read and the rhyme scheme. Thankyou for sharing this with us at TPL. Always your friend, Gerard
This Poem was Critiqued By: Claire H. Currier On Date: 2007-05-16 06:58:34
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Love horses my dear friend and the beauty they add to this world of ours. Living in the country I wish I had one but the old man said, as I venture out to the post office and through the woods like Alice in Wonderland, I find so many beauties along the way.......never see the Prince Charming though just the wonderful stallions frolecking in the fields. One day I came upon two horses that had broken loose and they were so enjoying their freedom for a change. Of course they stopped traffic even on this back country road. Enjoyed the road so much; hope and pray you are scheduled for June llth.......I am hoping to be able to see after that............take care, God bless, Claire
This Poem was Critiqued By: marilyn terwilleger On Date: 2007-05-14 17:41:56
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Hi D....I love this poem about your Prince Charming...I assume he is yours since you wrote in the first person! I'm still awaiting such an event myself. You wrote this so well...your rhyming is musical and has an easy flow. You have written this with so much humor and I found myself smiling all the way through. Dad-gum Prince Charming anyway...he could have at least slowed down as his trusty steed continued his stride! Love of your best and on my list. Cheers....Marilyn
This Poem was Critiqued By: Lora Silvey On Date: 2007-05-13 22:09:53
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Dellena, I loved this in it's entirity....easy flowing read with good rhyme. Ah, for the want of armore polish--is there any knights left out there. Oh my, what is a Lady in waiting suppose to do, we'll wait to hear the rest of your saga in such a wonderful write. Bet, Lora
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