This Poem was Submitted By: Michael Bird On Date: 2007-08-05 11:52:51 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!To Listen to Music While Reading this Poem, just Click Here!
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love will keep us alive standing all alone
at the bridge of tears
feeling lost and lonely
watching the wind of the world
passing me by
hungry for you all these years
now that you're gone
I wont say goodbye
love will keep us alive
I will cry for you
and sigh for you
in the end I know
love will keep us alive
don't you worry
you've given me the will to survive
baby,there's nothing we couldn't do
I will always remember
all of those simple things
that you enjoyed so much
your home and safe now
with your angels watching over you
love will keep us alive
I will cry for you
and sigh for you
'in the end I know
love will keep us alive
surrounded by strangers
who I thought were friends
thinking of what to leave out
what to leave in
I would die for you
climb the highest mountain for you
now that your gone
I wont say goodbye
love will keep us alive
I will laugh for you,and cry for you
and sigh for you
`cause in the end
I know
that love will keep us alive
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Copyright © August 2007 Michael Bird
Additional Notes:
FOR MY WIFE,AND FELLOW POET HERE ON THE LINK,WHO PASSED AWAY AFTER A LONG ILLNESS.
FOR SURE,YOU WILL BE AND ARE MISSED.
This Poem was Critiqued By: Thomas H. Smihula On Date: 2007-08-24 08:59:44
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Michael,
I see this as a lyrical song that comes from the heart. You will always look-out over the horizon from the bridge you and her created. Life is fragile but when a heart is touched it lasts forever. Love makes us stronger and we appreciate life much more. I do you crying out and you have shown us your deep eternal thoughts. Thanks for sharing.
Did your wife submit poetry at this site and what was her handle?
Thomas
This Poem was Critiqued By: marilyn terwilleger On Date: 2007-08-12 16:22:30
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Hi Michael....I am so sorry that you have lost your wife and also a good friend who was also a poet. I lost my husband some years ago and while I can tell you it does get better, with the passage of time, the grief is always there and ready to strike you at any moment. I find that writing poet does have a cathartic effect on me and I would guess it does for you, as well. This poem is really heart rendering. Your repetition of "Love will keep us alive" works well here. I was so saddended when Mell Morris passed away as she mentored me when I first joined TPL and we became friends. We talked on the phone, when I would go to Ft Worth to visit my daughter, but we never able to meet due to her illness. She wanted to meet me for coffee but was too ill to do so. This is a lovely poem. I wish you well and also peace in healing.
Best....Marilyn
This Poem was Critiqued By: Dellena Rovito On Date: 2007-08-11 22:17:18
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
Michael,
So loving, so sad!
The repetition is good I think. It is a powerful statement you drive home.
And yes, love lives on.....thank God.
I believe you were much blessed to know such depth of love.
A very poigant poem.
You did well sharing your emotion.
Could fellow poet me Mell? She comes readily to mind?
My best,
Dellena
This Poem was Critiqued By: Rene L Bennett On Date: 2007-08-11 05:10:22
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
Michael, My heart to yours. I am sorry to hear about the passing of your wife. I too, am widowed. Your poem is a wonderful tribute. I only see one error. In your second to last stanza, you have, now that your gone. It should read, now that you're gone. I always get that mixed up too, on your and you're. I know only those who have grieved the loss of a loved one truly knows just how deep grief really goes. Others can only imagine.
Wishing you a gentle healing.
Rene'
This Poem was Critiqued By: Claire H. Currier On Date: 2007-08-05 18:47:30
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Michael I am so very sorry to read of your loss. Words are never enough at a time like this and the words you have written here belong set to music.........love will indeed keep her alive in the lining of your heart where you shall hold her forever. She will surely be missed by all that knew her, that was fortunate to read and share her poetic words.......indeed she loved life, she surely loved you. Thank you for sharing this most difficult one with us; you are in my thoughts and my prayers. God Bless, Claire
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