This Poem was Submitted By: Dellena Rovito On Date: 2009-02-25 17:16:07 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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I insect whack with swatter's wrath Ants and spiders they’re on the rise Moths, beetles and mosquitoes needles Summer's bug’s season that's the reason They creep and crawl, consume and gnaw Double there substance they eat all  Big bug eyes, huge fangs and horny clawed                                  If they grew any larger I'd be mauled           They swarm, buzz and cause commotion  I don't realize, what's their notion? In my face so out of place, I'm disturbed They’re everywhere they should never be I wish them wee small, out of sight,  Unborn or long moved on………that works for me

Copyright © February 2009 Dellena Rovito

This Poem was Critiqued By: Claire H. Currier On Date: 2009-03-28 03:22:14
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
And it would work so very well for me too my friend....loved this read from start to my attention with the spiders of course....they are so big here in Tully I think they do nothing more then move in for the winter and eat all that gets in their way.......You certainly had me chuckling. We heat with wood and I did forget to tell my oldest daughter to be careful when they bring in wood with too many holes for the critters are close at hand......I usually put that piece right into the flame but it seems her boyfriend placed it on the top of the pile, near the wood stove and the heat called all 200 ants out to dance.....what a mess.......Hope you are well, take good care, God Bless, Claire

This Poem was Critiqued By: Duane J Jackson On Date: 2009-03-07 21:59:57
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.77778
Hi Dellena, The fear of add a light touch to it! I enjoyed this piece. My favorite line - "Big bug eyes, huge fangs and horny clawed/ If they grew any larger I'd be mauled Duane.
This Poem was Critiqued By: James C. Horak On Date: 2009-03-06 11:31:50
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 8.71429
Damn, I love your style here. This is comical and entertaining and builds an illusion that promotes for men a better understanding of the female repugnance for the "creepy crawly". And "Unborn or long moved on..." is great in rhyme, assonance and illusion. Very, very good. JCH
This Poem was Critiqued By: DeniMari Z. On Date: 2009-03-01 06:21:06
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
They say all God's creatures are here for a reason, but I've yet to find anything of purpose in spiders, ants, or any bugs I found around. Mice are everwhere this winter where I live -not in my home, but I hear others talk about their mouse This is cute; very descriptive and works in the idea of why we do share space with them. I wish them out of sight too, if they are here for a reason I'd prefer not to have to see them; or invest in sprays or detterants fo them. Good read, Blessings, Deni
This Poem was Critiqued By: Rene L Bennett On Date: 2009-02-28 00:27:55
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.69231
Dellena, Thanks for the giggle! I hope that is how you meant this piece. I picture in the midst of summer, misquotes, gnats, flies and all the other annoying insects. Did I read this right? Either way, I think it is cute. Has a sing along song rhythm to it! Always, Rene'
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