This Poem was Submitted By: DeniMari Z. On Date: 2009-09-28 23:26:49 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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Cry It won't change the symmetrical pattern of those who  stereotype people with no reason to judge Alone or with others Laughing at the grand mess of simple differences they believe are funny pathetic shrugs God's eyes see Stupidity Basking in their own light signaling needless pain elsewhere to ears; minds and feelings Of the cat or mangy dog loved inside  Sheltered roofs where they lay wondering alone about life's cruelty Special superlative souls need the magic dust of compassion sprinkled daily living as they have been made -  Why would fools evict a person who can not change the way they are?

Copyright © September 2009 DeniMari Z.

This Poem was Critiqued By: Mark Andrew Hislop On Date: 2009-10-06 17:37:46
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.96000
Dear Deni This sums it up "Why would fools evict a person who can not change the way they are?" "Fools" is the only way to describe them. Best, Mark

This Poem was Critiqued By: Duane J Jackson On Date: 2009-10-04 22:28:52
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.95238
Hi Deni, For me, this poem highlights inidividulaity and the response it gets from the 'stupid' majority who take it upon themselves to steretype and of course, ostracize....Through your imagery, particularly of the mangy dog and cat (in their shelters of isolation), you bring this dark side of humannature to the fore. I liked the flow of this and the lines captured your theme well. Duane.
This Poem was Critiqued By: Dellena Rovito On Date: 2009-09-30 16:05:06
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.85714
Deni, By using evict, sounds like someone being evicted from their home. What I think about this poem, is someone is unaccepting of the differences of others. Their view is the only view and if not kick rocks. Their loss..... You do well expressing. I don't like the spacing so much. It runs together thoughts and separates thoughts. But I like the idea as a whole. Just ignore me, I can't say it any better. Keep on writing..........I'm so far behind at the moment. Dellena
This Poem was Critiqued By: Claire H. Currier On Date: 2009-09-29 09:26:46
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.88889
to me this is a very powerful statement of what takes place daily in the lives of so are right in that tears won't change a thing or mean anything to those who enjoy judging others the way they do.... God's eyes certaily sees it all and your words hve given much to think of, images to not only see but to feel as well.....just the other day a child hit out at another with words concerning the size of his stomach....might be a small matter to some but the child was deeply touched by the hurting words.....God Bless, Claire will make my list of the months's poetry......
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