This Poem was Submitted By: Michael Bird On Date: 2010-08-11 21:54:15 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!To Listen to Music While Reading this Poem, just Click Here!
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DRAGON SLAYER MEETS THE PREACHER MAN
BEWARE YE THE STRANGER
WHO CALLS HIMSELF A PREACHER MAN
A MAN OF THE CLOTH,IF YOU WILL
HE WILL PURCHASE YOUR GOODS
AND THEN LIKE A THIEF IN THE NIGHT
STEAL THEM BACK FROM YOU
HE WILL USE A MICROSCOPE TO SCRUTINIZE EVERY LAST DETAIL
TO SEE WHERE YOU ARE MOST VULNERABLE
FOR HE IS A MAN OF THE CLOTH,
AND HONEST TO A FAULT
HE HAS NO CARE OR CONSIDERATION
BUT OF ONLY FOR HIMSELF
CUNNING LIKE A FOX, YET A SNAKE IN THE GRASS
LIVES BY THE OCEAN HE DOES
AKIN TO A DERELECT OF THE SEA
DRAGON SLAYER WILL NOT WASTE ANOTHER MOMENT OF TIME
LIKE THE LAWS OF ODIN AND MERLIN
EVENTS HAVE BEEN PUT INTO MOTION
WHAT GOES AROUND WILL COME ABOUT
DRAGONSLAYER WILL RETURN TO HIS QUEST
HIS LIFES JOURNEY OF SEARCHING
FOR TWO FAIR MAIDENS,SILVER CHAINS IN HAND
BEWARE YE THE PREACHER MAN
WHO LIVES BY THE OCEAN
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Copyright © August 2010 Michael Bird
Additional Notes:
A recent business deal gone bad......a warning for all.....
This Poem was Critiqued By: Dellena Rovito On Date: 2010-09-06 15:48:58
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
Michael,
It is the God preaching men you have to watch.
Always ones you wouldn't expect [Godly-holy] let you down.
So easy to ay, not so easy to do. They are all talk!
I like your anger showing in capital letters.
Dellena
This Poem was Critiqued By: DeniMari Z. On Date: 2010-08-21 16:53:32
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
It's a passionate write Michael, sorry for the bad luck with the business deal - and I hope you are moving forward from the experience. I enjoyed your poem, see a few words that could be omitted, but doesn't take away from the strong emotion you've added to enhance this piece. Not sure if I like all caps - I'm sure you used them to bring out the boldness of the poem, but def feel regular style lettering would have worked just as well.
blessings.
Deni
This Poem was Critiqued By: cheyenne smyth On Date: 2010-08-16 15:35:34
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
Hi Michael,
Your use of upper case words shows your angst and frustration because of one who caused your deal to go bad. You have used a couple of cliches but even so they work well in this piece. I can almost see you striking your key board with determination and anger as you wrote this piece. There are those who delight in making others miserable and maybe that is what happened to you. This is an emotional and compelling poem.
Best wishes,
cheyenne
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