This Poem was Submitted By: Mark D. Kilburn On Date: 2010-11-10 09:36:16 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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Pachyderms & Jackasses

The wolves are hidden in the shadowed night, gnashing bloody teeth that gleam in winter's moonbeam, as they lick thier bloody lips. Driven by an insane desire for more and more they are never sated, never resting, devouring entire classes of people, yet their thirst remains unslaked. This wanton desecration and planned pollution only feeds greed's destructive flame. The few strongest wolves band together, they become master manipulators degrading our corporate laws by corrupting regulations. Spending fortunes to propagrandize the masses into a stupor of fear, when the same fortunes could have easily prevented our own extinction! But wolf packs never sleep and always needs more from us. These wolves have great healthcare for themselves, but the rest of us are on our own. Costs and deductions continue to soar at unsubstainable rates until the price for coverage becomes obscene, while the wolves continue their greedy lip-licking. When prices escalate, fewer buisnesses offer coverage, more of us die from being uninsured. Simple arithmetic really, and while mothers cry, the affluent wolves and their networks tell more lies. Is their stratagy working? Apparently so, they've effectively inspired us to hate one another as they laugh themselves to the bank they now own. Only the richest of gated communities have avoided the rush of foreclosures. My neighborhood's full of them, as wolves offer tenants up to four grand to get out now, or else. Most take the money (along with the threat of eviction) and walk away from their shattered dreams.  This plundering won't stop until we unify. Only when we realize it's richest versus poor can we stand against them and what they represent, racism, greed, elitism, as well as a complete disrespect for Americans who aren't exactly like them. The salivating wolves whose fangs glint under ominous moonlight truly are doing more than just grinning; they are laughing at you, laughing at me, and laughing at our founding fathers.                                      

Copyright © November 2010 Mark D. Kilburn

This Poem was Critiqued By: DeniMari Z. On Date: 2010-11-30 10:42:59
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
So blatantly stark and true. Best choice in words to describe them as "wolves", never satisfied with what they have and always looking for a way to make life better in their lives not J.Q. Public. Shameful acts and your description is powerful and strong as haunting a memory we all wake up to every day. Unification is a tremendous idea yet how does what has become the lower class of society now start? I imagine most are just sitting, suffering all of the putrid consequences - most have given up hope for change that would really make an impact. I don't believe we are told the truth - just half of, and then we go to see a professional and learn the hard way via humiliation especially with health care just how unimportant we are. Very good write, intense and thought provoking - "We're not in Kansas anymore" and I fear where we are now. blessings to you, Deni

This Poem was Critiqued By: Dellena Rovito On Date: 2010-11-20 18:30:53
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
Mark, And the plan has been in operation for a long many years. Nobody had the time or ability. The computer has made us aware as never before. Still the majority don't know or believe. Your story is great! True and difficult to live. That's where all the depression is coming from. We need to unite and fight city hall and continue forward to congress and the leaders. dellena
This Poem was Critiqued By: Mandie J Overocker On Date: 2010-11-10 22:40:45
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.33333
Mark, Well said! It is such a sad state that we live in today and the 'wolves' in washington and elsewhere in the nation certainly don't seem to mind those of us whom they represent and supposedly serve. Your metaphor is apt and sadly your poem a portrait of America as it stands today. Thank you for bravely posting this brilliant piece. Mandie
This Poem was Critiqued By: Lora Silvey On Date: 2010-11-10 17:57:37
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Hello Mark, It has been awhile since we've seen something from your pen, nice to see you. This is quite an ambitious write. While loaded with tons of metaphors, heightened language, I must say that I wouldn't classify this as a poem but a wonderful piece of poetic prose. Even in that context, you've made some very astute observations that to my way of thinking are spot on. This thesis prompts one to wonder if things will ever change; is it to be the eternal struggle between those who have and want more and those who have not? Yes, perhaps it does come down to absolute power corupts absolutely although, you've said in a much fancier way. You've given this reader much to ponder with your finely honed pen. Lora
This Poem was Critiqued By: cheyenne smyth On Date: 2010-11-10 15:49:39
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Hi Mark, This ambitious poem speaks so many truths. It comes down to the haves and have nots...what a sorry state of affairs. Those without insurance never seek a physcian until they are so sick they are brought to a hospital feet first. Of course it costs thousands to get them well and when they can't pay the doctors and hospitals have to write the cost off. Which raises the cost of care, insurance premiums and bad debt. You make some valid points in this eassy poem. It is well written and thougthful. You may be right, unification may be the only way to keep the 'wolves' from our door. Well done. Best wishes, cheyenne
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