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Just For Fun When I take my last breath and I mount the white steed, Without bridle or saddle we’ll go; I’ll clutch to the mane, let the horse take the lead To that wonderful place we all know. Saint Peter will smile as we slow for the gates And with humble respect I’ll ride in, Not knowing for sure what adventure awaits But knowing I have to begin. There’ll be a short quiz for the newcomers then, “A standard procedure,” they’ll say. “Just write what you liked about where you’ve just been And events that have shaped you today.” I’ll sit down to a PC with pearl qwerty board, As fast as the lightning can flash, Where mistakes are corrected before I am scored And carried away to the Trash. I ‘ll contemplate what was important to me And the pictures will rush to my mind: The climb of a mountain, the shade of a tree, The way that events intertwined, The friends that I made and the ones that I lost, The lessons I finally learned, The bridges I built and the bridges I crossed And, with heartache, the bridges I burned. I’ll mention some good times, and some that were bad, Consider some choices I made, Thank God for the use of the talents I had (and point out all the times that I prayed.) And after my story is pretty much through, I ‘ll go back just to check it and see, And add that: “I think that’s enough about You!" "I think we should talk about ME.” |
This Poem was Critiqued By: Jennifer j Hill On Date: 2004-06-04 23:26:25
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.91667
Hi Marcia,
I miss having you around here. Please don't leave us! We need you.
I know what you're doing is really cool, but can't you stay here too?
This one sure reads like a humorous little country ditty with a nice rhyme scheme. Needs a differnet
name though. That one is not catchy enough for a country music song, ya know.*smile*
Something like "Meetin My Maker" or "My Judgement Day"
These are my favorite lines:
"I’ll sit down to a PC with pearl qwerty board,
As fast as the lightning can flash,
Where mistakes are corrected before I am scored
And carried away to the Trash."
The ending's cute too.
Did you make a song out of it?
Thanks for sharing. It made my day
Blessings,
Jennifer