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This Poem was Submitted By: stephen g skipper On Date: 2005-10-03 19:50:00 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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My Other Passion

The “wasp” is now black, custom chrome marks her as mine, air blue with two stroke. Celtic soul brother, dreams of casino dance floors, Wigans heady days. My scoot needs a name, I’ll call her “Vespa D’Amore”, moniker given. Music to ride to, two-tone, ska, reggae even punk, more a way of life. Metamorphosis, Mod becomes a Scooterist, iconic styling. Ten inch wheels roll, dancing to Northern Soul, a rich tapestry.

This Poem was Critiqued By: Marsha Steed On Date: 2005-11-04 12:42:48
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.61538
Stephen, as I scooted along your jaunty piece, the sun basked and the pavement skittered. Charming usage of more decade-related nomenclature with Mod and ska, wigans and two-stroke. "Celtic soul brother" dances through the vocal scale with a playful aire. Music to ride to. Isn't this really what the whole piece is about? Made-up words like "Scooterist" gives the carefree feeling validation and even a little playful swat. Tapestry is a fabric word however, it sort of stuck out for me in your music/ chrome world. Perhaps Symphony or Concert or something? Iconic styling indeed. M

This Poem was Critiqued By: Dellena Rovito On Date: 2005-10-22 18:41:27
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Stephen, To love your skooter as to write a poem about 'it' is a kick! My scoot needs a name, I’ll call her “Vespa D’Amore [of love!] You are a most passionate fellow of all things. Why not? Music to ride to,two-tone, ska, reggae even punk,more a way of life. Metamorphosis,Mod becomes a Scooterist,iconic styling. Ten inch wheels roll,dancing to Northern Soul,a rich tapestry. [I get an impression your skooting around town, wind in your hair...... happy to be alive! In love with life!/I say you're one lucky duck!] It's as if your skooter represent youth and love] To live such, I'd write about it too] Thanks for the little jaunt down your lane. Dellena

This Poem was Critiqued By: marilyn terwilleger On Date: 2005-10-14 13:52:59
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Hi Steve, Like most men their car rates right up there with their most prized possessions. I stopped trying to figure that one out a long time ago. I smiled when you said 'my scoot needs a name'..the reason being that I name most things..like vacuum cleaners for heavens sake! This piece is full of fun and delightful to read. My favorite line....'ten inch wheels roll, dancing to Northern Soul, a rich tapestry!' Well done...wish you could take me for a ride! Peace...Marilyn

This Poem was Critiqued By: Lora Silvey On Date: 2005-10-08 23:20:37
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Stephen, Excellant structure, colorful verbiage within an easy flowing offering. Yes, all bikes (scooters, etc.) should definitely have a name. I chuckled through this, thouroughly enjoying the images you delivered here while I remembered my sons and their scooters, then motorcycles even my husband and his, they all recieved names and definitely were the other passion of their lives. There is something about the love to ride that just cries of passion, of freedom and by the way I like the name you gave your scoot. I enjoyed this poem immensely and hope to see more delights from your pen. As Always, Lora

This Poem was Critiqued By: Jillian K Sorenson On Date: 2005-10-07 00:04:56
Critiquer Rating During Critique: Unknown
Hmm. I have a scooter, didn't name it however, and not quite so fancy as a Vespa....mine is a Mosquito. You have to stand on it when riding. I liked it alot until the handlebars fell off and I hit the street at 25 miles an hour. How on earth do you listen to music while riding? Structure here is good, easy to read....what's your first passion? Nice work.

This Poem was Critiqued By: Turner Lee Williams On Date: 2005-10-03 21:30:22
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
Stephen--We boys must have our toys-smile. This sure reads like you've invested quite a bit of personal attention on this two stroke/two wheel gas miser. Vivid imagery and metaphoric language indicates an almost reverent fondness for scribes object of affection/ esteem. An excellent tribute from this Scooterist to his scooter. Some reader(s) who dote on classic vehicles or other joyful modes of transport will surely identify with "My Other Passion." And, yet there will be those that think this is a strange, but harmless obsession. In any case remember you are sharing with your TPL friends-smile. TLW

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