This Poem was Submitted By: Mick Fraser On Date: 2004-12-18 13:40:33 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!
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Copyright © December 2004 Mick Fraser
Christmas with Joe
Much time has gone by my dearest darlings
three hundred days or more without your warmth
lost in my space but only a note away
all I can feel is my painful remorse
Without a family like you my sweet siblings
I'd have nothing to hold my dreams
you bring the presents that mean so much to me
you add the color to every scene
The little ones that are here to take our place
always seem to fear their uncle Joe
hearing of their plays and feats keeps me strong
knowing that they'll be fine when it's time to go
Oh how I beg for your complete approval
I know it isn't easy knowing naught of me
but I promise you loves that I'll return each year
to be warmed by your smiles and cry by your tree
A TPL friend asked me to write a poem, so here it is...Merry Christmas Jennifer and all TPLers.
The idea of this quickly written poem is: Being away is sometimes a neccisity, and makes coming home even sweeter. (could be tears of joy ya know)
To the tune of a song called "What am I doing to make you so sad?" by Kim Mitchell.
This Poem was Critiqued By: Latorial D. Faison On Date: 2005-01-07 21:43:00
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.87097
This is a great Christmas recollection. It's funny how poems written by others inspire me to write on subjects. I've not actually attempted a Christmas poem like this one.
I think that poems like yours are so important because they document memories that might otherwise be forgotten or go left untold.
You have written about near and dear sentiments and people that you love, and you do it naturally. I'm glad that you shared this one. It shows that Christmas really is a special time to be shared with loved ones, whether we like to do it or not. When it comes to family, especially a younger generation, time is very necessary. I feel that so many older family members neglect an obligation to share with those coming up.
Obviously, this poem encourages sharing special times with special people.
Thanks for sharing. I enjoyed reading this one.
This Poem was Critiqued By: marilyn terwilleger On Date: 2004-12-29 16:31:41
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.90909
I read this piece several times and still feel sorry for Joe. He appears to be
a lonesome soul...whether he is real or imagined he is a loveable guy. Family is
everything during the holidays but also every day of every year. I always feel sad for
those that don't have children and especially as they age when children are needed so
badly by a parent. Joe loves his siblings and their families....the couple that live
next door to me are just like uncle Joe. No children of their own so they have Xmas
for their nieces but when we were all young and our children small they would come to our
house on Xmas eve to help set up all the santa presents under our tree. At times that was
a real undertaking as the 10 year old that could put everything together in a snap never
comes in the box. Thanks for posting this endearing tale about uncle Joe.
This Poem was Critiqued By: James Edward Schanne On Date: 2004-12-23 07:34:08
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.75000
I tried to sing this one but every time I try to carry a tune I drop it and trip over my tongue, but I enjoyed it as It read as being very heart felt and thats always a good thing Thanks for letting me read and comment.
This Poem was Critiqued By: Jennifer j Hill On Date: 2004-12-18 20:31:04
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
You really did it! I'm impressed.
It is so good to have you back at the link!
You say quickly written poem but this doesn't seem thrown together in
any way. If you can do this on a moments notice, then why do we have to
wait months to hear from you? Sound like your mother? Just trying to make
the place seem homey. *Smile*
Are you uncle Joe?
Something that rings so true in your poem:
"Lost in my space but only a note away"
Isn't it sad how even though we are just a note away from our loved ones
instead of sending them a note we send those dumb pass this on to twenty people before
midnight and your get your christmas wish. blah bah blah. Actually I delete those emails
when I get them, but I don't communicate with my daughter near as much I wish I would
through email. She lives in Mississippi and I miss her.
So you're remorseful about not writing to your family? Or about not going home often?
This is a very sentimental poem that touches on those family feelings and I think it exudes
love and understanding that only a family member can express.
Thank you for humoring me with this poem. You're the best!
Now I must go visit with my brother who is here from Alanta.
And please don't cry by the tree, you'll cause a short in the lights!
Hope you have a fantastic time with your family!
This Poem was Critiqued By: Dellena Rovito On Date: 2004-12-18 17:23:38
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.00000
What a nice fellow "Joe" is.[Mark is Joe I think]
To come home to family at xmas is wonderful!
To kids becoming constrained after so long gone,
and siblings, all loving and missing each other is terrific.
Thats what its all about.
It's been a long time since I've experienced family.
I can imagine the joy. Thanks for the writing...
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