This Poem was Submitted By: DeniMari Z. On Date: 2004-12-19 21:17:29 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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If your feet are hurting  like you've marched in a war and the rest of your body is just as sore I'd say you've been Christmas shopping from store to store Tis the season to be jolly as you pull out the decorations to find crumpled holly Broken lights, missing pieces of this and that Glitter peeling off your Santa hat Who put their chewing gum inside the nativity scene? Now that's just getting a bit obscene! Trying to loose weight before the holiday sadly ten extra pounds got in the way That's alright because now it's time to feast on your burnt cookies, candy and boring fruit cake Get ready to spread some Christmas cheer Try doing that without drinking too much beer  Along with candles burning aglow, you'll have scotch tape stuck to your clothes An odd assortment of Christmas bows peeled off last years gifts, broken candy canes, egg nog for the guests as you sleeply wait to get rid of those pests It's only once a year to face that awful fear giving someone a present that make them shed a tear   Not because they were happy, they were really sad had the nerve to tell you it's the worst gift they ever had, So they'll exchange it and all will be ok No matter what else happens Have a Merry Christmas Day!

Copyright © December 2004 DeniMari Z.

This Poem was Critiqued By: James Edward Schanne On Date: 2005-01-04 12:56:33
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.14286
I wish I had read this before christmas and new years were over but it still put a smile on my face and a chuckle in my mouth thanks for letting me read and comment.

This Poem was Critiqued By: Dellena Rovito On Date: 2004-12-31 19:04:39
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.39286
DeniMari, Happy holidays to you too. Cute poem. Xms is madness/you captured it well. Don't worry about score I just wanted to say yo. Happy NY Dellena
This Poem was Critiqued By: Tony P Spicuglia On Date: 2004-12-29 13:09:41
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
DeniMari This is such a delightful piece that I could pull every line out and speak to it. It was like you were watching in my (sans snow) CA window and could see the draping and traipsing of Christmas to be and not to be. From the tape on Christmas hats, dieting, store by store – getting sore, you had the knack to unveil the whats and what fors. I had to laugh out loud with the “returns” and those not quite satisfied with their hauls!! You seemed to seam the entire Christmas experience into a unique, masterful, Christmas quilt. Ending with “have a merry Christmas day” returned it to the smiles of yore!!. P.S. should you decide to edit this for another year, one evolution at my house is the after-Christmas-bargain hunting, that has to take place, where, had there been some patience, all the revelers would have saved a bundle by waiting just one day. GREAT VERSE, and a nice smile evoker!!
This Poem was Critiqued By: marilyn terwilleger On Date: 2004-12-27 21:43:19
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.89474
Hi DeniMari, I love this homorous Christmas was so much fun to read that I did it twice! You touched on all the mishaps of the race to accomplish all that needs to be done and still make the due date. I loved the gum in the Nativity scene, broken lights, crumpled holly and the peeling glitter on Santa's hat...'trying to lose weight before the holiday, sadly ten extra pounds got in the way.' Now that is a true statement. It is so easy to grab a bite here and there and never remember it so grab another one. is finally over and if I had even a smidgen of a brain I would do my Xmas shopping for next year while the sales are on. But there are so many people out there shopping for bargins and I am just not in the mood...I have 21 people to buy for and I just keep getting more as my grandchildren are now beginning to reproduce. Thanks for giving me a good laugh as it cured my holiday blahs immediately! Blessings....Marilyn
This Poem was Critiqued By: Sherri L Smith On Date: 2004-12-23 10:17:11
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
Dear Deni, Good Christmas poem. Just couldn't help reading some of the entries from my friends. Happy Holidays, Sherri Smith
This Poem was Critiqued By: Monica ONeill On Date: 2004-12-20 15:16:21
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
No matter what country I am in, all the sentiments in your poem appear to apply. They say it is all about the be it. This is a lighthearted view of the annual ritual of the Holidays...and very astute at that. I've never had chewing gum in the nativity scene though...that is a new one for me. Maybe some thoughtfull child envisioned a gift to the newborn King. I guess, to a child, a wad of chewing gum, though perhaps slightly used, is a very appropriate and usefull gift. I really got a kick out of this, and thank you so much for the Greetings. I hope you have a Merry Christmas too. Moni
This Poem was Critiqued By: Paul R Lindenmeyer On Date: 2004-12-19 23:01:12
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
DeniMari, the holiday season's upon us again, and poets send greetings of joy to good friends. It's right and it's proper to do every year, so I'll return the greetings of joy and good cheer. May your Christmas be merry and full of Gods' light, and may all of your memories be happy and bright. Peace, Paul
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