This Poem was Submitted By: Michael Bird On Date: 2005-08-22 19:48:31 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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Hungry Heart

I`ve been wanting to tell you I have this feeling That won`t go away Much to my surprise I get it everyday I`ve got you in my sights You`ll be mine tonight With this hungry heart There ain`t no explaning My hungry heart I can feel the magic all around us I want to hold you so tight and show you  What love is all about I`ve got you in my sights You`ll be mine tonight With my hungry heart One look at you And I can`t disguise my hungry heart I can offer you proof Soon it will be a moment of truth I want you to see  What love was meant to be I can feel the magic all around us With my hungry heart We`ve had a passionate start Just listen to my hungry heart I can feel the magic all around us And I`ve got you in my sights You`ll be mine tonight With this hungry heart One look at you and I know it was meant to be With my hungry heart I can feel the magic all around us And I`ve got you in my sights You`ll be mine tonight With this hungry heart

Copyright © August 2005 Michael Bird

This Poem was Critiqued By: DeniMari Z. On Date: 2005-09-05 20:39:16
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.76190
This poem seems to be written with a thread of country spirit. I've read it before, but am just coming back to it. It almost reads like a song, a song of someone very much in love. It's nice to read about love, and this expression is in timely fashion, with anticipation of what is to come. I see some repetition, and I'm not sure how it works with this poem, may have gone over board with hungry heart in the next to the last verse. Otherwise I enjoyed your thoughts on the subject and I'd imagine there is a lucky lady out there, who will benefit from all of these deep feelings. DeniMari

This Poem was Critiqued By: arnie s WACHMAN On Date: 2005-08-26 12:53:03
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.25000
Oh you have improved since I last read you. This is a delightful tribute to the one you love. Sounds like this should be put to song (have others suggested this?). Be careful that this love isn't all consuming if you get my drift. Take care.
This Poem was Critiqued By: marilyn terwilleger On Date: 2005-08-25 13:51:24
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.96667
Hi Michael, I wish I could compose music because this piece should be a song. It is lyrical with a soft cadence that makes it a compelling read. Since I am a hopeless romantic poetry written about love really appeals to me..and this one certainly does that. I hope the lady you wrote this about has had the opportunity to read it...and if she has I am certain she will soothe your hungry heart! Well done! Peace...Marilyn
This Poem was Critiqued By: Claire H. Currier On Date: 2005-08-24 22:13:53
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.76744
Good morning poet.....this one reminds me of a song I heard in the movie dirty dancing or at least my mind keeps playing this poem to that tune as I have read it over and over again. Some might want to tell you that perhaps you have repeated too often about your hungry heart. I am not sure what I feel in the way it does come across. There is no doubt about your having feelings of love for the person you are speaking to in this one my friend, I hope she feels the same way and that both your hearts may be together as one. Thanks for posting and sharing, be looking for more of your work, God Bless, Claire
This Poem was Critiqued By: Joanne M Uppendahl On Date: 2005-08-24 08:35:14
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.85714
Mike: Great to see you back on the site! I like this poem a lot for its song. I would love to hear it sung. This is definitely a poem to be heard. Very romantic, and rhythmic. I think you've got a great thing going here with the music in this one. Wish we had a recording feature on this site so I could 'hear' this spoken or sung. I especially enjoyed We`ve had a passionate start Just listen to my hungry heart I can feel the magic all around us And I`ve got you in my sights You`ll be mine tonight With this hungry heart One look at you and I know it was meant to be With my hungry heart If it is a 'true to life' poem, may she return your sentiments in abundance! Best wishes for success, Joanne
This Poem was Critiqued By: Lora Silvey On Date: 2005-08-23 23:37:03
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.81818
Michael, This is quite a bit different from your other poem that I read. Great range of emotions, desire, and owning the feelings in this one. However, I did have a problem with the repition of the line "with my hungry heart", for me it is a bit like over kill...... Thank you for the opportunity to read another of your works, I hope you'll keep them coming. Lora
This Poem was Critiqued By: Mark Steven Scheffer On Date: 2005-08-23 14:19:33
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.66667
Michael, Hmmmm. Well . . . hmmmm. You appear to be in the early stages of your poetic journey. You're on to something which you should never lose: repetition is a wonderful device. But you need to be a little more subtle with it. Mark
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