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Awakened Spring I view the daybreak, spilled in sunshine's gold which flood my world in hues of wakened pleasure it summons me to such abundant treasure I barely grasp the beauty I behold. For on this fine Spring day, I feel a stir a wakening, of all stilled bounty bound new life springs forth, the Earth's rebirth profound in gentle breeze, abundant joys occur. The crocus and the daffodil arise to lift their heads and greet a warming sun and sparrow's song, rings sweet that Spring's begun the perfection in God's work, before my eyes. I barely grasp the beauty I behold it summons me to such abundant treasure which floods my world in hues of wakened pleasure I view the daybreak, spilled in sunshine's gold. |
This Poem was Critiqued By: Jordan Brendez Bandojo On Date: 2006-05-05 21:30:31
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.77778
Hi there Nancy,
I am glad to have stumbled at your poetry. So much in the energy on this one and I am fully awakened...
I am fully awakened that...
- it contains with so much wonderful imageries one can energize on (is my words apt?)
- these imageries are abundant treasure in themselves
- nice rhyming with ABBA all the way, creating a very nice sound when read aloud
My favorite strophe is the third one:
The crocus and the daffodil arise
to lift their heads and greet a warming sun
and sparrow's song, rings sweet that Spring's begun
the perfection in God's work, before my eyes.
Thank you for the energy this poems and more of this please!