This Poem was Submitted By: Mary J Coffman On Date: 2007-01-07 17:42:44 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!To Listen to Music While Reading this Poem, just Click Here!
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Winterpane - Etheree #3
Frost
forests
of glass trees
emboss against
the ebon milieu
of chilled December nights.
Immaculate renditions
of vitreous illustrations
create unspoiled panoramas
on luculent panes of winter windows.
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Copyright © January 2007 Mary J Coffman
This Poem was Critiqued By: Dellena Rovito On Date: 2007-01-29 21:34:36
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.82353
Mary J.,
I think I saw that pane of glass.
It was exactly as you described.
The icy frost look as trees in a forest.
Unspoiled panoramas.
Looking through to light can even bring out rainbow colors.
Reminds me of Dr. Zhivago in winter palace.
Lovely...
Dellena
This Poem was Critiqued By: marilyn terwilleger On Date: 2007-01-23 17:08:56
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Hi Mary...such rich imagery you have penned. "Glass trees" is wonderful. Where I live trees covered with snow and ice do look like they are made of glass. I also remember, as a child, believing Jack Frost really was a person who came out at night and frosted the window panes. This lovely poem that took me back there just long enough to experience that wonder one more time. Just beautiful.
blessings...Marilyn
This Poem was Critiqued By: Tony P Spicuglia On Date: 2007-01-14 16:18:41
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Mary,
A wonderful piece. To look at the darkened, icy world through etched glass of winters window, is a poem in itself; your descriptions are scrumptious, "ebon milieu" - "vitreous illustrations" - "luculent panes" - simply delicious syntax that matches the cold of the moment.
I think "unspoiled" could grant itself to the frost, or the creation- panoramas embossed!! Such an excellent piece, don’t' change a word!
This Poem was Critiqued By: James C. Horak On Date: 2007-01-09 09:21:40
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
I believe I've discovered the purpose in this poetic genre,
to disguise the simile by removing "like" from the context.
Thus the image better becomes the thing. So we SEE the magic
of looking at poetscape through frost covered pane and we
SEE how, through imagination, such "illustrations" can
be "vitreous". Such a short poem to teach such a big discovery.
JCH
This Poem was Critiqued By: Claire H. Currier On Date: 2007-01-09 05:47:48
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Good Morning Poet..........nice to read , your penned words have brought this one to life with its frosty windows and glass trees. Glad to say this has been a warmer then usual winter so far here in New England and that I can handle as well. Chilled December nights brings back many wonderful memories as well as goose bumps just thinking about it. Thanks for posting and sharing, God Bless, Claire
This Poem was Critiqued By: Nancy Ann Hemsworth On Date: 2007-01-08 20:18:22
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
I really like this Mary..I wrote one called "Silver Storm" don't know if you critiqued it or not.."frost forests of glass trees" lovely just lovely..and very descriptive. Also loved the way you ended this "luculent panes of winter windows." nice job
This Poem was Critiqued By: Lora Silvey On Date: 2007-01-07 22:42:48
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Mary,
You are getting quite good at these. I love the images presented here, I can just see those frosty trees on iced windows....ooouuu, chill bumps of delight. Thank you for such an imaginative and wonderous scene of winter splendor put in such a well penned offering.
Lora
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