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This Poem was Submitted By: Joanne M Uppendahl On Date: 2005-05-25 15:40:47 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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Hybrid Haiku

“nothing gold can stay” but then the poppies, scattered, flame the roadside grass

Additional Notes:
First line from Robert Frost's "Nothing Gold Can Stay."

This Poem was Critiqued By: Jennifer j Hill On Date: 2005-06-06 19:43:21
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Hi Joanne, Well, I did it again. Ran out of time to do much critiquing. But I have to at least comment on this one before it goes away from my list. This one is a nice surprise. I very much love Robert Frost's "Nothing Gold Can Stay". And what you do with it is create a grand image in the readers mind. This little gem is shinning brilliantly in my mind and will live on every dawn and dusk. Brava! Nice one! Blessings, Jennifer

This Poem was Critiqued By: arnie s WACHMAN On Date: 2005-06-04 15:07:09
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.51111
Well we certainly have a lot of poppies growing here but they are all orange for some reason, but I well can see the red ones making like flames. "In Flanders Fields the poppies blow, between the crosses row on row." (John McCrae). The poppies then were to signify the blood the soldiers gave. McCrae was a Canadian, an officer in the army and died shortly after he wrote that epic piece.

This Poem was Critiqued By: Thomas Edward Wright On Date: 2005-05-29 19:09:31
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Title and last line... but you've captured the essence of life. (See Upon a Lion, Laconically) Nature's first green is gold, Her hardest hue to hold. Her early leaf's a flower; But only so an hour. Then leaf subsides to leaf. So Eden sank to grief, So dawn goes down to day. Nothing gold can stay.

This Poem was Critiqued By: Paul R Lindenmeyer On Date: 2005-05-26 20:17:36
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Joanne, this haiku reminds me of a Renoir, splashed with the bright red of the poppies, and instant polaroid of nature, commented on and adjoined to Frost's short vignette of nature's verdigris only mandate. It is as it should be, instantly envisioned and absorbed. Once again, delightful work.. Peace, Paul

This Poem was Critiqued By: Nancy Ann Hemsworth On Date: 2005-05-26 10:43:31
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.33333
This is lovely Joanne, and I love the direction you have taken off of "Nothing Gold Can Stay". This little picture just burst off the page in "flames scattered". What a lovely way to mention there beautiful colouring. One can just picture the colour dotten among the green of the grasses. Loved this little piece of poetry..and you know that I love the haiku!! and you have written a simply perfect one!

This Poem was Critiqued By: Thomas H. Smihula On Date: 2005-05-26 07:38:19
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Joanne, What I like about this Haiku is the complete thought given the reader and yet you show the statement is incorrect for gold can be more than the ore itself. It is the worth you give it and how you see it that determines if you have obtained gold. Open your eyes is another side of this for treasures are abundant. You have kept the 5,7,5 format intacked and the layout is pleasant. Thanks Joanne for the thought. Thomas.

This Poem was Critiqued By: Claire H. Currier On Date: 2005-05-25 16:47:47
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.87273
Beautifully done my friend, true to form of Haiku, image of beauty painted with the flare of your pen...... poppies scattered flame the roadside grass......and how such beauty also fills your soul. Thanks for posting and sharing with us once more your God given talent.....I think I tried Haiku just once ..........not sure how to put it all together I guess.......enjoy reading others work of art though. God Bless, Claire

This Poem was Critiqued By: Duane J Jackson On Date: 2005-05-25 16:33:07
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.85294
Hi Joanne, This was a terrific haiku! It's amazing how poetry enables us to say so much in such a few words and Haiku is one of the more limiting forms of expression - yet you have managed to click a beautiful picture through this fleeting form. Nature has always been your speciality and the image of poppies flaming the roadside grass is amazing. I've never tried my hand at Haiku but am tempted to, even as I read more of the ones posted here. Excellent work as usual!! Take Care, Duane.

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