This Poem was Submitted By: marilyn terwilleger On Date: 2005-07-31 15:22:27 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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You give sublime pleasure to my melancholy soul.  Your love is passion's caress I sigh

Copyright © July 2005 marilyn terwilleger

This Poem was Critiqued By: Dellena Rovito On Date: 2005-08-06 18:50:40
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.50000
Marilyn, So nice/such love. I sigh. I'm not really reviewing this, I just wanted to tell you how very lovely this is. don't even score me....... Hugs Dellena

This Poem was Critiqued By: Rachel F. Spinoza On Date: 2005-08-04 09:06:09
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.86486
Sometimes less is more - that is certainly true of this consise and lovely piece, best rach
This Poem was Critiqued By: Joanne M Uppendahl On Date: 2005-08-02 10:00:35
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.95238
MT: I see why this one got gobbled up and also why it is so high in the ratings! Sigh! It could have been written by any one of us at times (or currently) in our lives. It speaks to the romantic in all of us. The sounds are as soft as a sigh, as a caress. This one speaks to my own "melancholy soul" and makes me remember with another 'Sigh!' the caresses I have given or received. The poem itself is a verbal caress. Sigh!Why is it that we never seem to tire of caresses and the memory of them? Sigh! OK, I've got to stop as I am sighing too much and it sounds breathy in here. LOL! I love it, MT. Besides that, it's an exquisite cinquain. You do good work, Madame Romantic Poet! Applause and a dozen red roses tossed, Joanne
This Poem was Critiqued By: Joyce P. Hale On Date: 2005-08-02 09:29:10
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.53488
Marilyn, excellent lines!!!! You put in only 15 words so much meaning..... extensive plesure, a melancholy soul, someone's love, a description of their passion, and your gentle response. Outstanding! I can find no comments to make to improve upon it. (:D
This Poem was Critiqued By: arnie s WACHMAN On Date: 2005-08-01 13:25:58
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.85714
Sighhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh! Melancholy. Are you still pineing for someone? If you have someone's passion and love, why be anything else but happy? (spoken like a true Psychiatric Nurse?). Ahhh my dear friend...there are roses to smell along with the morning coffee. Be well.
This Poem was Critiqued By: Claire H. Currier On Date: 2005-08-01 01:58:17
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.65789
Good Morning often do I do that during the day? Often enough.......good title, interesting word flow, love the thought of passion's caress.........I can hear the sigh......soft, gentle, like a soft breeze......thanks for posting and sharing, God Bless, Claire Good luck with the have more then one winner.......
This Poem was Critiqued By: Duane J Jackson On Date: 2005-08-01 00:00:15
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.96552
Hi Marilyn, A lovely cinquain...full of the power of love, brimming with the effect of being touched by its blessings through moments of loneliness and sorrow, 'you give sublime pleasure to my melancholy soul'. 'Sigh' builds on the effect of expecting the unexpected when all seems lost, relief when everything seems so cumbersome. This was full of feeling and you have done very well to say all this in the constraints of this type of poetic form. As always, looking forward to reading more of your work. Take care, Duane.
This Poem was Critiqued By: Lora Silvey On Date: 2005-07-31 20:22:33
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.58333
Marilyn, This is a great CINQUAIN, the count is exact and your structure is right on (old hippie talk). I love what you have stated here, a thought epitomized in this easy flowing poem. No truer words can be said of ones true love, how it makes you feel, and in the end all the wonderous feelings leave you with a sigh. This is so romantic, so full of life, love, all the juiciest things that make life worth while and keep treasured memories close and soft to be brought forth when they are called upon. Thank you for this well crafted uplifting work. There is no place for improvement here, this is a master piece. Warmest, Lora
This Poem was Critiqued By: Turner Lee Williams On Date: 2005-07-31 19:33:46
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.74194
Marilyn–I see you’ve graced us with another gem from your newly discovered form (cinquain). Judging from this and your previous post in this genre–you’ve found an apt outlet for that subdued amorous side-“Smile” (hah ha hah). Se- ductive title, theme and tone made me “Sigh” also. I’ll have to attempt one soon. Great job! TLW
This Poem was Critiqued By: Paul R Lindenmeyer On Date: 2005-07-31 18:30:18
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.91667
Marilyn, well you go from the Dark Side to the sensuous, and in minimalst style to boot! Well the line breaks are well placed with the 2/4/6/8-2 pace of the meter you force the reader to your conclusion as a piece of this length should. The verbiage is lush and subtle, again as it should be with the subject matter. Wish someone had written it for me! Always a pleasure to comment on your work.. Peace, Paul 1
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