This Poem was Submitted By: James C. Horak On Date: 2007-01-08 22:00:01 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!To Listen to Music While Reading this Poem, just Click Here!
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Young Man on the Ropes "Why won't it come off?"
Well Johnny, it's counter-threaded.
"Counter-threaded?"
Yes, so it won't come off when you're riding.
"What if I'm going backwards?"
You going to town backwards?
"I might, why do people lie?"
Taken aback, I responded without thought
And
from the hip,
Answered both posits:
Doing it right is too easy. |
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Copyright © January 2007 James C. Horak
Additional Notes:
Another in the If It Cannot Be Known to A Child Can it Be True series. Especially for
Lora and Nancy in fond observance of their youthful persistance of child beauty.
This Poem was Critiqued By: Tony P Spicuglia On Date: 2007-02-02 11:22:25
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.78571
James, the analogy between counter-threaded and lying- linked by “going backwards†I think is a strained device. You have, indeed; made the obvious inference in this piece that lying is as natural to a child as each of the other references are natural evolutions. I have raised many children and from the first to the last- their first lies were theirs. An evolution began and was acted upon within their own devices. Could be the later children learned it from the first, however I have thrice raised an “only†child- and their first lie was not structural not innate.
I did enjoy this poem immensely. As much as you consider structure and relevancy to be the foundations of poetry, you are probably going to hate me for this; LOL, like that is an issue- this piece I enjoyed for it pure artistry and the “fun†of reading; substance aside. I think this series of yours may be some of my favorite poetry of yours. Considering the quality of you verse, that is something to say
This Poem was Critiqued By: Claire H. Currier On Date: 2007-01-24 04:35:25
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.89286
Children are full of questions , thoughts that perhaps only they can muster up in their prescious minds.....once again you have touched on the pure beauty of being a child and all it may entail. Great images projected and looking forward to more of course, God Bless, Claire
This Poem was Critiqued By: marilyn terwilleger On Date: 2007-01-22 20:55:29
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Hi JCH...this poem is certainly a gem! For anyone who has raised children (I did it three times) questions, such as you have written about, are so common. The trick is to stay ahead of the child at least one step. That might be easy if the child isn't too smart otherwise it is a certain challenge. First the child in this poem is saying he might ride to town backwards and then he takes a huge leap and wants to know why people lie...very good question. Do any of us really know why? The answer "doing it right is too easy" is perfect, not only a good way to end this poem, but a reasonable answer even if it does come from the hip. This poem is more profound than one might think if they only read it once.
Well done....Marilyn
This Poem was Critiqued By: Nancy Ann Hemsworth On Date: 2007-01-19 14:38:09
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
lot of truth to that I feel..I like as I think I said before the innocence and knowledge so simply stated in these short poems on childrens questions and seeking of truth..you are right, "if it cannot be known to a child can it be true" for children have such pure and quik way of slicing to the truth and reconizing it. Too bad we didn't all become flawed through the years..thanks for the second in this series James..enjoyed
Nancy
This Poem was Critiqued By: Dellena Rovito On Date: 2007-01-14 22:33:26
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
James,
Riding a Horse? [maybe?]
walking a tight rope?
riding a bull?
None the less...sometimes doing it right is too hard.
Doing 'it' your way is the way to do it/learning the hard way
if we must.
I've been a hard learner myself.
To go against the establishment ain't bad.
I don't go for lying much....face up to your actions, I say. It is easier!
Counter clock wise, seems counter productive?
A poem to ponder!
I like pondering....
Dellena
This Poem was Critiqued By: Ellen K Lewis On Date: 2007-01-12 15:32:42
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
Ah, James, a new style for you? It's a charming tale and I love the ending. I have worked with some gifted/handicapped children as a volunteer, and I think the answer was just right! Smiles to you, Ellen
This Poem was Critiqued By: Lora Silvey On Date: 2007-01-10 18:51:33
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
James,
Thank you so much for such a delicious respite, a taste again of the inquiring mind of the young. Amazing how they glibly go from one subject to another without so much as blinking. You've captured those innate qualities so well, such a vivid picture you've painted here; another to add to the collection, perfection at it's best.
Lora
This Poem was Critiqued By: Mary J Coffman On Date: 2007-01-10 10:11:20
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
James,
Despite the fact that I usually don't feel qualified to comment on your wonderful and very accomplished work, I found this delightfully witty! Ahhhhh, through the eyes of the child... And, the constant "whys?" You have captured so much in this little, but well presented poem. I love how you break your lines, as well. This adds to the over-all effect with perfection. Bravo, James! I love it!
Sincerely,
Mary
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