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This Poem was Submitted By: Monica ONeill On Date: 2007-02-12 18:31:49 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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MY CLOWN

within a simple pine box the Star of David stark white against the black drape a clown rests my clown no make-up no red shoes no stethoscope no crazy wig or floppy hat cleansed and robed by tradition blessed by his Rabbi praised by a son missed by many especially me his red nose sits upon the dresser the silence is deafening

Additional Notes:
In memory of my clown, Arnold Sydney Wachman May 24, 1935 to Feb 8, 2007.

This Poem was Critiqued By: Gerard A Geiger On Date: 2007-04-13 16:11:47
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
Dear Monica; What a lovely tribute to the unconquerable spirit of Arnie. I knew him through his poetry here at the poetic link. An amazing fellow...who was an engineer, changed careers at midlife to nursing and also went to clown college. He just did what interested him....the only problem with that as I can see is that his interests were so varied and life on earth too short for him to achieve all he wanted and was capable of. My life is better for having known Arnie, and I know your loss is deep. Take a certain degree of solace from the fact that he is proud of your work "My Clown" and such self deprecating humor espoused through Comedy is a very humble way to help lift the collective spirit of our fellow man...an idea also that Arnie believed in with his whole heart. Thank you Monica for this work remembering a wonderful Human Being, artist, poet,comic,engineer,nurse, and servant of his fellow man, Arnie S. Wachman. May God bless you and keep you, Gerard A. Geiger

This Poem was Critiqued By: Ellen K Lewis On Date: 2007-03-01 15:36:25
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.83333
This is an awesome tribute! I can feel the empty room around that dresser....the silence is deafening...how true that is, it conjures up lots of images... I enjoyed this piece for it's simplicity of expression and it's deliverance of emotion. I consider this to be quite good. Although I have never had the priveledge of reading you before, I like the style you used here in this piece.

This Poem was Critiqued By: Dellena Rovito On Date: 2007-02-24 21:53:50
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Monica, This is a wonderful tribute to Arnie. I am so sorry that you must go through this. Arnie was quite a colorful character. We had our time him and I. Pure misunderstanding. He explained himself well in his writings but I'm not sure he understood me. I pray that he's at peace near a waters edge watching the wildlife. Arnie always spoke highly of you. He loved you dearly. He would be very proud of your work. Sincerely sorry, Dellena

This Poem was Critiqued By: Mark Andrew Hislop On Date: 2007-02-16 03:02:47
Critiquer Rating During Critique: Unknown
Monica I knew Arnie only by our exchanges here. We often said "Let's get together an have a food chat over a coffee ... a bit of a trick for me, since I live in Australia. He struck a chord with me, and I had a lot of time for him. I'm genuinely sorry we never got to meet ... in this life. He had a good heart. We weren't what you'd call "super close", but we were friendly and I miss him. I was very surprised and saddened to hear of his passing. My condolences to you. Mark

This Poem was Critiqued By: Leo Wilder On Date: 2007-02-14 13:49:56
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
I am so sorry.

This Poem was Critiqued By: marilyn terwilleger On Date: 2007-02-14 11:00:18
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.80000
Hi Moni....this is such a sad poem and I can truthfully say that I feel your pain and the silence that screams. Arnie was full of fun and a gifted writer. At times he searched for answers, in his writes, but none could give an answer. It is heart breaking that he had to leave but perhaps now he does know the answers now. I pray that your heart will heal quickly even though you will always hold him there. Thank you for sharing this poem. I wish the best for you. God bless....Marilyn

This Poem was Critiqued By: Paul R Lindenmeyer On Date: 2007-02-13 11:54:22
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
Dear Monica, my sympathy to you on the loss of Arnie. We had many conversations over the past few years, and we crossed poetic swords more than a few times, but while his scarcasitic humor and tongue in cheek wit were caustic initially, over the years he became a delightful critic and psuedo pen pal. Hopefully the memories of joy and light shared with you and your son, will ease your sorrow at his passing. He will be missed by the old guard at TPL and by many others he touched I'm sure. It is also my hope that through the "deafening", you and yours find the peace and comfort offered by our compassionate G_d. Shalom, Paul. PS. Your writing is direct, heartfelt and moving. Poetry is indeed a mirror of the heart, but you always knew that. Peace, Paul

This Poem was Critiqued By: Claire H. Currier On Date: 2007-02-13 07:40:25
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.71429
Monica what does one say as they sit here in shock after reading your poem and your deep emotional love to Arnie.....I am so very sorry to hear of his passing. Please know a prayer is sent to heaven for he is there now watching over you and will always be a very important part of your life. My prayers are with you too for a love like you two shared is something to treasure forever. God Bless, Claire

This Poem was Critiqued By: Lora Silvey On Date: 2007-02-13 01:26:50
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.80000
Moni, Thank you for sharing this part of your Arnie with us. He was a wonderful friend that taught me many things about poetry, critiqueing and friendship. He will be missed more than believable. He was always so happy that he had you and truly felt blessed for you being in his life. May God speed Arnie on his journey and help to mend your heart. My thoughts and prayers are with you. God Bless, Lora

This Poem was Critiqued By: DeniMari Z. On Date: 2007-02-12 18:47:31
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.50000
Dear Monica, Thank you for posting this in tribute to your husband. My heart is heavy with sympathy for you and your loss. I will miss both his poetry and critiques, his grand sense of humor and witty remarks. Through the years he befriended many people here, and was truly a remarkable man worth being remembered. May God speed your healing, and bless you. Sincerely, Denimari

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