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I am a 23 year old female born and raised in LA. Thankfully I was blesses with the ability to travel the world from a very early age. I have only a 9th grade English and writting education so I would appreciate any and all help offered. I am addicted to writting and do so in spurts. I started when I was 14 and upon completeing my first poem felt like it was the first time I truely expressed myself. I need all the criticism I can get. A bit more about me: Favorite poets are Ginsberg, Sexton, Plath, Adrienne Rich, and Yeats. Favorite authors: Vonegut, P.J. O'Rourke, Salinger and Volaire Favorite musicians: Ani Difranco, Led Zep, Coltrain, Monk, Miles, Etta James, Billy Holiday to name a few.

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Poem Title Poet Name Critique Given by Audrey R Donegan Critique Date
Weep No More Helen C DOWNEY A natural caregiver. So much love in this poem I feel only a woman could write. 4 lines in each stanza makes this an easy read and allows the reader to stop and take in what is needed. A few suggestions - feel free to persecute me if you think I am over diong it:) 2nd to last stanza, maybe: open your eyes, see me. we'll ascend the whitest mountain and watch the dawning of the new day. 3rd stanza, maybe: I'll guard you from all that's evil silence the thunder and cut the blackness for you to see the light. I truely admire your work, Audrey 2005-04-28 19:38:49
For Dead Fathers Who Live Latorial D. Faison This piece screams raw emotion of abandonment and hurt. I have worked with many teens abandoned by a parent and the effects on their soul, trust in humanity and relationships can be devistating. It captured my attention the whole way through. It seems to me you have a raw talent - keep writting and you will go far. A suggestion would be to change 'even if I live, even if you die' to 'if I die or if you live' I think it might make for a more dramatic flowing ending. thanks for sharing, Audrey 2005-04-28 19:26:07
The Thought Of You Nancy Ann Hemsworth Wow, such gratitude! Very impressed, terrific flow. I read it over and over to keep feeling the intensity and resolve that I found in this piece. Honored to have read it, thanks for posting, Audrey 2005-04-28 19:11:08
Eye to Eye Dellena Rovito Nice work. Might I suggest changing the 2nd stanza to read something like Illuminating for me to view my mirrored reflection shown clear (either way very nice)I especially like 'the light of day turned bright' Thanks for posting, Audrey 2005-04-28 18:51:17
Bethany Revisited Paul R Lindenmeyer Stunning! This piece flows magnificently. So appropriate for these times upon us. Celebrated as is. Thank You, Audrey 2005-04-27 17:49:22
Cracked Plaster Helen C DOWNEY This piece unearths the longing in my heart to be held again - the need to be loved and belong in another's arms. Painfully hopeful for this reader. One suggestion would be to change 'searched our universes' to 'searched the universe'(only for flow purposes)and maybe 'relaxed' into something like 'entranced'. Again, celebrated as is. Audrey 2005-04-27 17:43:51
Night Helen C DOWNEY Ah, seeking solace and refuge in the night - Haven't we all. The ability to admire the beauty of the world in our loneliest state of being - a true gift. Suggestion: to take out 'It is' in the 2nd line and then maybe add another line inbetween the 2nd and 3rd describing its attentiveness, something along the lines of- to my every need/desire Again, stunning as is. Audrey 2005-04-27 13:47:13
Moon Dancing Helen C DOWNEY This poem captures all the romance and passion a single moment can offer. Beautiful! One possible change (and no offense taken if disregarded)would be to take out 'as the' in the 5th, and 'which is' in the last line. I think it would let your final thoughts stand out and cut into the readers pssion a little more. Thank you again, Audrey 2005-04-27 13:37:56
Who Are We? Helen C DOWNEY Concise, yet filled with power. I see a poetess speaking to the readers - as they will take only what is needed. They will swallow your tears: your pain, life experience, and all life's exqisite emotions left for us to pen. Nice structure and flow. Thanks, Audrey 2005-04-27 13:30:04
Ripples of Love Helen C DOWNEY Oh, such passion in your sorrow. Beauitfully written, and such stunniing imagrey.'yesterdays cresent moons thrust deep within us' - powerful. Thank you for sharing this piece of you with us. 2005-04-18 15:28:58
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Poem Title	Poet Name	Critique Given by Audrey R Donegan	Critique Date
Weep No More	Helen C DOWNEY	A natural caregiver. So much love in this poem I feel only a woman could write. 4 lines in each stanza makes this an easy read and allows the reader to stop and take in what is needed. A few suggestions - feel free to persecute me if you think I am over diong it:) 2nd to last stanza, maybe: open your eyes, see me. we'll ascend the whitest mountain and watch the dawning of the new day. 3rd stanza, maybe: I'll guard you from all that's evil silence the thunder and cut the blackness for you to see the light. I truely admire your work, Audrey	2005-04-28 19:38:49
For Dead Fathers Who Live	Latorial D. Faison	This piece screams raw emotion of abandonment and hurt. I have worked with many teens abandoned by a parent and the effects on their soul, trust in humanity and relationships can be devistating. It captured my attention the whole way through. It seems to me you have a raw talent - keep writting and you will go far. A suggestion would be to change 'even if I live, even if you die' to 'if I die or if you live' I think it might make for a more dramatic flowing ending. thanks for sharing, Audrey	2005-04-28 19:26:07
The Thought Of You	Nancy Ann Hemsworth	Wow, such gratitude! Very impressed, terrific flow. I read it over and over to keep feeling the intensity and resolve that I found in this piece. Honored to have read it, thanks for posting, Audrey	2005-04-28 19:11:08
Eye to Eye	Dellena Rovito	Nice work. Might I suggest changing the 2nd stanza to read something like Illuminating for me to view my mirrored reflection shown clear (either way very nice)I especially like 'the light of day turned bright' Thanks for posting, Audrey	2005-04-28 18:51:17
Bethany Revisited	Paul R Lindenmeyer	Stunning! This piece flows magnificently. So appropriate for these times upon us. Celebrated as is. Thank You, Audrey	2005-04-27 17:49:22
Cracked Plaster	Helen C DOWNEY	This piece unearths the longing in my heart to be held again - the need to be loved and belong in another's arms. Painfully hopeful for this reader. One suggestion would be to change 'searched our universes' to 'searched the universe'(only for flow purposes)and maybe 'relaxed' into something like 'entranced'. Again, celebrated as is. Audrey	2005-04-27 17:43:51
Night	Helen C DOWNEY	Ah, seeking solace and refuge in the night - Haven't we all. The ability to admire the beauty of the world in our loneliest state of being - a true gift. Suggestion: to take out 'It is' in the 2nd line and then maybe add another line inbetween the 2nd and 3rd describing its attentiveness, something along the lines of- to my every need/desire Again, stunning as is. Audrey	2005-04-27 13:47:13
Moon Dancing	Helen C DOWNEY	This poem captures all the romance and passion a single moment can offer. Beautiful! One possible change (and no offense taken if disregarded)would be to take out 'as the' in the 5th, and 'which is' in the last line. I think it would let your final thoughts stand out and cut into the readers pssion a little more. Thank you again, Audrey	2005-04-27 13:37:56
Who Are We?	Helen C DOWNEY	Concise, yet filled with power. I see a poetess speaking to the readers - as they will take only what is needed. They will swallow your tears: your pain, life experience, and all life's exqisite emotions left for us to pen. Nice structure and flow. Thanks, Audrey	2005-04-27 13:30:04
Ripples of Love	Helen C DOWNEY	Oh, such passion in your sorrow. Beauitfully written, and such stunniing imagrey.'yesterdays cresent moons thrust deep within us' - powerful. Thank you for sharing this piece of you with us.	2005-04-18 15:28:58
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