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Poem TitlePoet NameCritique Given by Ashni IreyCritique Date
THE ALTERNATIVE THEORY.kevin DunnKevin, this was very entertaining. Leaves the reader wondering if theories like this are true. The rhyme scheme was great fun and easy to read. 2015-08-14 10:38:52
Don't You KnowJames C. HorakJames, I imagine my living room at night or a forest with lovely trees. Something eerie but so beautiful about the shadows and how they fall into each other. I love these short words from you that take me elsewhere albeit for only a moment. Wonderful. 2015-08-14 10:31:44
THE QUEST.kevin DunnKevin, I actually liked reading this. The last line is gold. In para 2, when you ask if a sentence could be written with seven times "and", it made me wonder for a moment. Some small punctuation eg. mis-spent in L4, pray instead of prey in L13, etc. but otherwise easy to follow. Keep writing!2015-08-14 10:28:33
If I Should SpeakLora SilveyI went through a phase where I wasn't sure whether forgiveness was a virtue or a weakness. I like this poem because it describes what goes through the minds of those who forgive freely and some who look upon those who do as weak. Very strong emotions and nicely written. 2015-07-24 01:09:54
WhenJoe GustinI feel like this is the sequel to Petals. A woman should be so lucky to have someone like you write this about her. The unusual comparison of fingers on a face to astronauts discovering a whole new world expresses the newness of the experience and the joy of discovery. Very nice. 2015-07-24 00:42:51
AssonateJames C. HorakThis poem makes me smile. I feel that way when I come to the poetic link many times. 2015-07-24 00:33:17
PetalsJoe GustinI love the imagery. The words show so much understanding of the "hunger" being felt the beloved. Clearly there is a parched desert in the poet's heart as well and it makes me wonder why there is no action. :) Love how your eyes thinly "hide" the fire that abides in your soul?2015-07-24 00:20:32
The Black RobesMark Steven SchefferI love the inspiration for the poem. Your choice of words convey an intensity of emotion - disclaim trespass but shit on my reef and i can smell you.. I like when you describe the presence of mollusks - it's not something want to see on our turf but even that has grown familiar and the only invaders are the "black robes". By "bath", I also imagine a river where mollusks have a home and the black robes are smoke from evil factories that dissolve in the water and become hard pollutants. These thoughts took me away from my desk for a good minute. :)2015-07-24 00:12:22
Too Youngcheyenne smythCheyenne, This touches the soul. Young love that was forced to part. I find the repetitive lines "their lies that bind could choke and wither steel" so powerful. It projects the intensity of pain felt by the writer in a manner that is very unreal. Beautiful. 2013-05-01 01:45:58
The KissJoe GustinI LOVE the lines A kiss is the soul's way of saying hello. I like the theme and the flow of this poem, but I'm finding the punctuation making the read difficult. I would line the words a little differently - Let our kiss for a while be our only method of touch. Just as an example. The last 4 lines seem like a summary of everything written earlier. I am not sure they are necessary to the poem at all. I think your message and sentiment are stronger captured by the preceding lines and if you wrote it out with the right pauses inbetween, it will make a beautiful poem. Good work. :)2013-05-01 01:33:48
Wisdom Of The WoodVictor David RooksVictor, "If I could see a tree... " I think you would have books to write! I find this short and meaningful poetry. The last four lines are powerful and nicely worded. I can imagine the beauty just through those lines. I think lines 4-6 could be better. They read just fine but I feel they are not as strong as the title, beginning and ending. Do keep writing. I would love to see more from you. :)2013-04-01 08:16:02
Young Couple In LoveJoe GustinJoe, I liked this piece. I feel all through that it speaks of the very age we live in, where the world is mixing and physical barriers (race, community, etc.) mean so little in the face of true love .. and it does take courage to walk (or run) in that direction when so many (living in their small-minded communities) have paid the price for letting their heart choose. Flames without candles, indeed! Keep writing! 2013-04-01 08:07:13
definition: I get what I deserveMedard Louis Lefevre Jr.Dear Medard, A very harsh coming-to-face with the choices one has made.. I can feel the intensity with which the person in the poem deplores his own self-absorbed living and the strength with which he recognizes and accepts the results of his actions. I dwelled a long time on the lines a sine wave is trying to become a circle I must say it set my thoughts into much momentum.. beautiful lines.. I arrive at the sine wave.. trying to progress.. it is a form that has its ups and downs, yet can progress.. but the circle.. it is endless.. it is the same beaten path over and over again.. but the sine wave thinks the circle is more defined... more familiar.. and wants hopelessly to become the circle.. I find it to be a beautiful metaphorical expression.. and shall take the liberty of quoting it when I see a fool on a hopeless quest in the future (if I have the good fortune of meeting one who fits the description!) I loved the food for thought.. keep it coming! Best wishes, Ash2012-05-31 09:36:40
Motherly LoveDeniMari Z.Dearest Deni, A lovely tribute to your mother and all mothers. :) I had some trouble with the punctuation on several lines that ended with a period that I didn't think was necessary since the following line was continuous. Other than that, a simple poem neatly written... and a very happy Mother's Day to you as well! :) Hugs, Ash2012-05-31 09:08:56
I Was In the Middle and You Were All AroundEllen K LewisMy dear Ellen, So sad, this.. Even if I have my loved ones with me, it makes me wonder how I will feel when they are gone.. "I sat alone in the living room.. this used to be your chair" these lines make my heart ache.. I am so sorry for your loss. Do keep writing. You can do it! :)2012-05-24 11:00:14
Nature's Blisscheyenne smythCheyenne, I can tell this came straight from the heart.. So much beauty in this world.. so much that we can draw strength from it everyday.. Your descriptions are an absolute delight for the senses. I simple love stanzas 5 & 6. I see so much of this Earth painted before my eyes just by reading this poem. The couplets are a nice touch.. They intensify the emotions behind the strength and the love that you describe. Very nice piece. :)2012-05-24 10:54:39
Why?Mark Steven SchefferMark, Very nice! I think many poets can identify with this reply to Why? The ending brought a smile to my face. I'm sure God would get a kick out of it too! Keep writing! :) Ash2011-08-30 00:13:41
Heavenly ConnectionsMandie J OverockerMandie, Deep and emotional piece from you. I like that you've captured a moment of intense joy but are able to look back at life to be reminded of "shadows" and hope to no longer hide from them. Nicely written. The word free is repeated in the first line and in the second paragraph.. I feel like it fits better in the 2nd paragraph and perhaps could be replaced in the first to avoid repetition. Just a thought. Last two lines convey a very powerful meaning.. something that every human being would want.. I'm not sure dim was the best possible rhyme to use. Maybe ... "to see the light of truth within and hide no more from shadows grim." ?? Good Luck! :)2011-08-29 21:59:36
LimitlessThomas H. SmihulaMy goodness.. so true of existential thoughts that plague the mind through some phases of our lives. If there is no one.. no rules, no authority, no goal.. what are we then? Beautiful piece... the last line will be in my head for some time.. :)2011-08-29 13:35:33
UndoneJoan M WhitemanYou know .. I really enjoyed the simplicity of this poem. I especially liked the last paragraph with closing doors and opening statements. I found that very original. This poem flows very well and really makes me feel like there are so many people out there who can feel the same emotion you describe .. and the title was apt! :)2007-02-07 21:57:35
My Father's FuneralNancy Ann HemsworthI find this poem very invoking of emotions in theme. However, I feel like much can be done to improve the flow of poetry ... a starting suggestion would be punctuation and better alignment for ease of reading. I liked the intervening blocks of phrases such as 'So Sorry' and the last two as well. I remember watch him "write it writing it as" ... needs to be revised to just "write it". As I said earlier, the theme is very moving and has potential for invoking a lot more emotion in people if written the right way. 2007-02-07 21:53:29
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