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Poem Title	Poet Name	Critique Given by Sherri L Smith	Critique Date
Blue Dragonfly - Revisited	Joanne M Uppendahl	Dear Joanne, I see a few changes, but I still like the first one. I love the line "dipping low as to graze my skin" I can just feel the soft wing and gentle brush across my arm. It makes me feel it. I just can't resist reading and commenting on your work, although not a technical critiquer, I can tell when I can feel a poem down to my soul. Thanks again for sharing, Sherri	2004-05-06 22:25:05
Instructions for My Burial	Joanne M Uppendahl	Dear Joanne, Though at first I thought this a pretty gruesome subject for a poem, I was entranced with the images, and I can picture you as you walk in your lovely surroundings. I imagine you as a beautiful Katherine Hepburn, willing the world to be what you see it as and the wonderful ways you describe it. Thanks for another lovely work of art. Sherri	2004-05-06 22:19:58
japanese verse 45 (Stream)	Erzahl Leo M. Espino	Dear Erzahl, Another beautiful haiku, I bow to you the King of haiku! This one is so visual and special to me as it speaks of the sea. I love the sea, hope to someday live within driving distance to it. It is so peaceful and soothing to me. Thanks for sharing, it's another good one! Sherri	2004-05-06 22:05:15
Blue Dragonfly	Joanne M Uppendahl	Dear Joanne, I love sharing the world you see. You write so descriptively and beautifully and I can always see and hear and feel what you are talking about. Erzahl might be the king of haiku, but you are the queen of nature poetry. Your ability to convey so much with so few words is remarkable. I see you have a rewrite, don't see how you could make this any better. Sherri	2004-05-06 22:03:15
Thumb of Green	Mell W. Morris	Dear Mell, This is a wonderful portrait of someone who actually loves what she is doing. Her garden means a lot to her, but yes you can tell that the sharing is the her first love. It is wonderful that she has the talent of the greeen thumb. That truly is a talent, I sure didn't inherit it from my Mom! Thanks Mell for sharing this wonderful story poem. Sherri	2004-05-06 22:00:03
japanese verse 44 (Cross)	Erzahl Leo M. Espino	Dear Erzahl, No you don't sound "righteous" I think you are expressing your feelings in the best way that you know how to do and it is a beautiful one. Keep up the good work. Sherri	2004-05-06 21:51:44
Who Slew My Daffies?	marilyn terwilleger	Dear Marilyn, What a humorous little poem. Yes I can see some of my own poor little flowers with their heads droooping with the cold we have been having and the awful wind too. I think summer officially got here today, it hit nearly 90 degrees. It's cute Marilyn, I liked it. Sherri	2004-05-06 21:45:49
Why is it that.....	Sherri L. West	LOL Sherri, This Sherri can certainly identify with the above work. Gravity is certainly taking its toll on my body, even as I struggle to eat healthy, and do at least a little bit of exercise. I have not joine AARP either, right now the way I look at it, this is the best time of my life. And yes, I don't look in the mirror except once a day when I am putting on make up for work!! I really enjoyed this one. Sherri	2004-05-06 21:42:17
Changing With The Changes	Marcia McCaslin	Dear Marcia, I can see the farmhouse, the fields with seeds just beginning to germinate and smell the breakfast that has just been eaten. This is so moving and picturesque as well. The question at the end was perfect...and I believe the answer is yes, he was telling her that he loved her. My husband tells me that he loves me in so many ways that has nothing to do with the spoken words. I feel that this was a long-standing relationship and that each knew each other well enough to know what was in the others heart and mind. That has to be the secret of long term relationships. I loved the lines: He hadn’t realized he had a glass heart, and she hadn’t realized she had a failing one. Perhaps it was best for him not to know. So they could enjoy their time together without worrying about what the future would hold. Just my thoughts on a beautiful poem. Sherri	2004-05-02 16:28:47
Haiku (She Digs It)	Marcia McCaslin	Hi Marcia, I think this might be classified as a senyru. Same syllable count and 3 lines but not about nature. Cute, and so appropos for the times. I think you have really gotten into the spirit of the times here. Nice to see you again. Sherri	2004-05-02 16:19:03
Passion's Pardon	Andrea M. Taylor	Dear Andrea, You touched on the very thing that I hoped people would remember. We can't blame all Jews for what happened in the past, just as we cannot blame all Germans for what Hitler did. We are never without our own blame in the scheme of things. This one touched me, and I am sure that it will many others as well. Sherri S	2004-05-02 16:15:49
The Last Visit	Sherri L. West	Dear Sherri, This is a wonderful tribute to your grandmother. I came to know my grandmother on Dad's side late in life, but in her, I saw where I got my love of writing, reading and so many other things that I didn't know I had that were hers. And my Dad's. My book is going to be dedicated to him, a thank you for passing his writing genes down to me. Your sincerity and love of your grandmother come through loud and clear and even though she didn't consciously know you, I know that she sensed it. I am glad that you recieved that precious gift from your grandmother. This was a very nice read, I enjoyed it very much. Sherri 2	2004-05-02 16:09:15
Eye Hath Not Seen	Marcia McCaslin	Dear Marcia, What a clever little poem and so humorous. Yes the truffle dog will be there, I believe that my pets will be there waiting for me in heaven. Especially my little dog Doc that I couldn't take with me when I moved out and away from my first husband. He was given away and I believe that he died of a broken heart. I loved him very much. I enjoyed this very much Marcia, so glad to see you back and active on the link. Sherri	2004-04-30 20:33:09
japanese verse 46 (Hyenas)	Erzahl Leo M. Espino	Dear Erzahl, I couldn't help but say hello and comment on your newest haiku. I have come to love this form of poetry and wish to thank you for insipiring me and teaching me love this poetry form. Great alliteration, and full of imagery and sound. Thanks for sharing, Sherri	2004-04-30 20:29:44
Between Seventeen and Eighteen	marilyn terwilleger	Dear Marilyn, A figment of your imagination it might be, but I have seen her and many like her in the streets of New York City. How sad to know that there are so many homeless children, driven from their home, or so desperate to get away from horrifying situations. I could see in their eyes, the lostness, the lonliness, and the stark look of fear. Some no more than 12 with backpacks on their backs and living on the streets. They often fall prey to those that deal with children and then their horror really begins. It is so sad, I cried. I only spent one day in the city, but it is an experience that I will never forget. Sherri	2004-04-30 20:17:08
Country Music	Marcia McCaslin	Marcia, Again, I am so glad to have you back. I love the way that you picture things, and this could easily be a country song. I do not know how to write music, but this would certainly work. I love the references to the old country and the one song that I think is the most fun is Jose Cuervo! Are you submitting to song writers? Are you submitting anywhere? You must!! Sherri	2004-04-18 17:01:19
"I Don't Know"	DeniMari Z.	Deni You are doing the right thing, just keep writing and keep posting. My husbands advice to me is to let go, write what I want, clean it up later, and not worry what someone will think. The secret is just doing, as I can see from this post, your muse is still there, looking over your shoulder, smiling with encouragement. I think they want us to think for ourselves once in a while. Thanks for sharing. Sherri	2004-04-18 16:57:06
The Sixty Seven Percent Solution to the Problem	Thomas Edward Wright	Dear Tom, This poem just resonates with sensory perceptions. It is a lovely, long poem that flows just as sweetly as the maple syrup doesn when you pour it on pancakes or waffles. It has the past and present and is pleasantly melded into a beautiful work of art. This one is going on my list for sure. You used alliteration so well and effectively throughout the work, as well as some internal rhyme. I probably could go on and on about it as this one is one that really caught me up into the mood as I read it. Thanks for sharing, Sherri	2004-04-18 16:51:16
Hat Language	Marcia McCaslin	Maricia, oh Marcia How I have missed your wonderful western themed poetry on this site. I love this one, telling about that old hat. I have often wondered if items could talk, what they would talk about. You gave an excellent example of that. I could see the hat, and the many things that it had served for...as well as the man who wore it. So picturesque and so simple to understand, and full of emotion. I am so glad to have you back. Sherri	2004-04-18 15:07:20
An Atheistic Affermation of Faith	Paul R Lindenmeyer	Hi Paul, I liked the concept and the way that you wrote the (void) like a scrabble word. There is a misspell in the title, and I am sure you caught it as soon as you sent it, I normally do...lol. Yes, I think that even an athiest will call out to God if they have the time before they pass. I watched my Mother die by inches, and in her final days, she was able to reconcile herself with the God of her childhood. She died peacefully. I don't believe there is a void, I believe that God is directing my path and I am sorry for those that don't have their faith to lean on. Thanks for sharing, Sherri	2004-04-17 16:37:20
Untitled 2	stephen g skipper	Dear Stephen, What a wonderful tribute to your wife. You can see the love and devotion that you felt for her. I know that she is smiling down tenderly and loving you and just waiting for you to join her someday. When you have had the love of your life and known the joy of that kind of loving, it has to be devasting to lose her. Thanks for sharing. Sherri	2004-04-17 16:29:45
Haiku:Glory	Valene L Johnson	Dear Valene, Thanks for submitting the rewrite. I enjoy haiku and enjoy reading it. I didn't use to, but Erzahl has certainly shown me the beauty of it. Thanks for sharing, Sherri	2004-04-17 16:24:19
Haiku:Glory	Valene L Johnson	Dear Valene, haikus are fun to write and this one fits all the criteria. Very good imagery, 3 lines that say a lot. Thanks for sharing. Sherri	2004-04-17 16:22:50
Spring is Born	marilyn terwilleger	Dear Marilyn, How this poem gladdens my heart as I realize that spring is here. Not yet as warm as I wish it would be, but today the sun shone gloriously! My favorite stanza and the one that just seemed to sing out was: Gone are the belching spasms of wind and the yammering of winter birds, born are dainty bonnie butterflies and red robins rejoicing in splendor I love the alliteration in that last line. then the forest becomes tranquil, the carpets of white are gone, Thank God, and softly the rain falls to noursih the new leaves and festive petals. A beautiful poem of spring, I am so glad it is finally here. Sherri	2004-04-05 21:02:09
The Bucket	Marcia McCaslin	Hi Marcia, great to have you back, I missed you and the wonderful scenes that you paint with words. Even the rising of a resurrecting sun Can barely coax a gleam, although reds and oranges translate to a bit of glint on its pocked surface. A wonderful beginning with glorious visions. I can see that old bucket hanging there not looking at all like it did when it was new, but still being used and the sun can still catch that bit of "glint".Two roan horses and a mule wait by the bucket, noses nudging it, eager for the morning routine. The purpose of the bucket, the feeding and watering of the animals, so familiar with it and just knowing what was coming. Marcia with your ranch "cowboy" background this is perfectly done. As late afternoon calls in its debts, the stabler fills the bucket with water and forgets. His mind is on the tavern-- the sounds and smells of it reach irresistibly into his lonely world. With the falling of the dark sky, the bucket, old as the dirt that packs its seams, has become a thing of beauty as it proudly cradles a crescent moon, and reflects a bucketful of stars from The Milky Way. The bucket we see is multipurposed. First the oats and then the water...but in his haste to be done with the chores he has forgotten to dump the water. There it is sitting all forlorn, but the beauty of the stars and heavens are mirrored in the buckets contents. Wonderful visually beautiful. It is so glad to have you back with your delicious ways of telling a story. Sherri	2004-04-05 20:55:00
Spring Quartet	Joanne M Uppendahl	Dear Joanne, Another wonderful nature poem with so much hope in it and beauty. The first stanza: I have no problem at all seeing the mallards and their little backsides swinging back and forth and their beautifully colored heads looking all around. Second stanza: A vision of wonders and great alliterations, the whole stanza just seems to trip off of the tongue. Third stanza: Then the sense of sound, with the singing of the frogs in the pond, engages the senses and makes you want to shout for joy at being alive! Then the beautiful ending, falling asleep listening to the symphony of nature. Gorgeous and another masterpiece is all I can say. I love it! Sherri	2004-04-05 20:31:14
At The Mammae of Modernity	Thomas Edward Wright	Dear Tom, I think this is the first time that I have actually read about a man wanting to bear a child. The old saying "If a man had to have the children the world would soon be empty" does not apply to you. I am amazed at the depth of perception that you have into the workings of a woman's body during pregnancy and birth. Awesome job, maybe someday a man will experience the wonder of childbirth. But, I don't think that God intended things to work that way. Thanks for posting. Sherri	2004-04-05 20:09:07
Terra Incognita	Mell W. Morris	Dear Mell, Excellent! I wonder what does go through others heads. Surely they can't be as crazy as mine!! Then along you come and share your wonderful thoughts and sights with us. I think it must be the artist in us that makes us think of things differently then other people do. I know my husband just gives me strange looks at some of the things that I come up with! My mind seems to go a little crazy at night. My dreams are something else, full color and sometimes they even turn into short stories! Well last night I gave my son-in-law what for because of the heartache he is causing our daughter. So anyway, I will keep that one contained! Which brings me full circle: what quirks, majesties, and mysteries teem in the heads of others that forever will remain unseen and unsaid? Great ending question. Sherri	2004-04-05 20:02:57
Tranquil in the Wind	Debbie Spicer	Dear Debbie, What a beatuiful melodic poem filled full of serenty, tranquility and safety. Gave me a sense of peace this morning. In a world of turmoil and uncertainity it is good to be reminded that we need to take care of each other and our children, grandchildren. Delicate as they are, we don't know whether they might be a world leader some day. Most of all, I think it is important to give then a sense of security and serenity. Thanks for sharing this Debbie. Love, Sherri	2004-04-03 10:51:39
Haunted Hunt	Andrea M. Taylor	Dear Andrea, I love this one! Controversial I am sure but I can't wait till they catch or (kill) him! I feel as passionately about this as it seems you do. I feels good to know someone who shares your feelings and emotions about this horrible man. This is good! Headlines readied without a date Fill-in blanks for your ultimate fate I can believe that, and can't wait to see the headlines. It seems we have come so close to catching him and his sidekick, I have to believe that they will eventually be found just as Saddam was. Without their head they will surely flop around like a chicken with it's head cut off. I don't have one bit of guilt about hunting him down like a dog and giving him the "justice" he deserves! Sorry, stirred up my militant side! LOL. Good flow, good rhythm, easy to read. It gets my vote! Sherri	2004-04-03 10:25:17
No title	Andrea M. Taylor	DEar Andrea,, Sounds nice and relaxing to me! Good use of allits and a cute haiku. Woke me up with a good laugh this morning. Sherri	2004-04-03 09:44:11
I Am Fred	marilyn terwilleger	Dear Marilyn, What a perfectly delightful poem. Humorous and colorful with lots of internal rhymes. Where on earth did you come up with such a cute and funny idea? It was fun to read and a delicious break from the more serious stuff we have had lately. Thanks for sharing this funny, cute poem. Sherri	2004-03-29 22:15:43
High-ku	Andrea M. Taylor	Ah Andrea, A beautiful example of haiku, with alits with the s sounds makes it just seem to flow. Good job on this one Andrea. Sherri	2004-03-29 22:10:36
japanese verse 43 (Destiny)	Erzahl Leo M. Espino	Dear Erzahl, I would love to have a wonderful collection of your beautiful japanese verses. They are truly beautiful and say so much in so few words. Have you looked into publishing a collection? I think they are beautiful and very worthy of publication. I would buy your first book! Prodigy of our shadows, ...yes the shadows of the past can make us what we are today, Path of our footprints...I believe that we can make our own footprints by following a path that we are most comfortable with, the one that God designed for us. We are what we are...Are we a product of our environment? or can we make the change? I think we can, and I did! Thanks for this inspiring haiku. Love, Sherri	2004-03-29 20:43:12
By the Pond	Joanne M Uppendahl	Dear Joanne, I was so happy to see another one of your delightful poems on my list! And of course, with your beautiful descriptions of nature scenes, you are the Goddess of nature poems. The whole poem is absolutely wonderful but the last stanza combines nature with birth and that makes it just perfect. Again another wonderful addition to this months offerings. Love, Sherri	2004-03-29 20:34:22
"The Passion"	marilyn terwilleger	Dear Marilyn, What a wonderful description of a movie that will probably live for all time. In my Church we had studied all scourging meant to the Romans and how brutal it was. I know that other movies have totally sanitized what really happened. Mel Gibson told it like it was. I haven't seen it yet, but we intend to, I will probably bawl through the whole thing, but I know it will refresh my relationship with Jesus. Thanks for sharing your innermost thoughts on this movie. Thank God for the outcome. Sherri	2004-03-28 15:38:34
Purposely Me	DeniMari Z.	Dear Deni, This is a wonderful work about who you are. Did you do it as a result of the challenge? There are several things that I liked about it. I think the image of you running up the stairs to your life is wonderful imagery and shows the zest you have for your life. Even though you might not be star quality (I am sure that you are in someone's eyes) you enjoy who you are. You yelling at the top of your world, a defiant bring what may attitude shows that you are happy with who you are. You may not have had the best of lives, true, some may have hated and spited you, but the fact that you are loved is the most important thing. Often we cannot give a reason why we are loved. I have no idea why my husband Steve took a chance on marrying me, I was so screwed up at the time we met. When I look at the reflections in my mirror, I too see the sweetest reflections. Fortunate is the person who can look at their lives and say we are satisfied with what we are. Thank God for giving me the time to do it all. I can echo those sentiments and I hope God gives me more time to accomplish some of the goals that I have in my life. This is a touching poem, and one that I indentified with as well. I am glad that you shared a ittle of yourself in this work. Sherri	2004-03-28 14:32:58
Compassion	Debbie Spicer	Dear Debbie, This is so wonderful to read and to realize how much progress you have made in the last 3 years. You are so much more secure, and so much freer then I have ever known you to be. This poem is a wonderful tribute to those on the link that have been so good to you, to me and to all others that have found compassion, companionship, encouragement and love from this site. TPL is very much a one of a kind site. Glad to hear from you again. Hope you have a wonderful time with JoMo. I'll be thinking of you! Love, Sherri	2004-03-27 19:51:12
APPROACHING FULL CIRCLE (a self portrait)	Marcia McCaslin	Dear Marcia, I have never been happier since I found my inner child and acknowledged her, let her have the childhood that had been denied her. She has helped me to love more freely, give of myself more openly and to let myself live in the moment. Stop worrying about what might happen and just be happy for what I have right now. She has also taught me how to play, with my little hobbies, my writing, my grandchildren, and to laugh freely even if it is at myself. She is there, even if someone that I love has forsaken me. Thanks Marcia for sharing this lovely self portrait. It is so nice to have you back, I have missed you! Sherri	2004-03-27 19:44:39
Swimming With Mary	Thomas Edward Wright	Dear Thomas, I had this critique all written out and somehow my computer lost it. So, let me see if I can recreate it. First of all I found the poem heart rending, and an awesome read at the same time. It has all the elements that I like in poetry. Most of all that it was written from the heart. The saddest line to me was: The room is a morgue with a waiting list. How sad to have all the children afflicted with the same terrible disease. It is so hard to see someone that you are close to die in front of your eyes. I watched as my Mom died by inches as the cancer caused paralysis from her legs on up. Finally getting to the muscles that allowed her to breathe, and mercifully she went to Heaven. Are you a Doctor? If so you are the kind of Doctor that patients love as well as families. Shows what kind of man you are that you allow yourself to have emotions for those that you are caring for. I will never forget the Doctor that delivered my still born daughter. He stayed with me over two hours, just holding my hand, not saying things like "you'll have another" or "it was for the best." He just sat there with me as I cried and listened to the newborn babies crying in the nursery across the hall. He got me transferred as soon as possible to another wing, so I wouldn't have to deal with nursery sounds, and happy families with healthy babies. He was a wonderful man. Well, Thomas, I wouldn't change a thing, this is beautiful as it is, touched my heart in a special way. Sherri	2004-03-27 19:39:04
Untitled	stephen g skipper	DEar Stphen, This is a wonderful tribute to your wife Paula, I am so sorry for your loss. If we don't love deeply then the pain isn't as bad. For me, I will take the loving deeply, no matter how much pain I will be in later. Best wishes, Sherri	2004-03-27 18:57:47
The Fiasco In Me	Erzahl Leo M. Espino	Dear Erzahl, This certainly does hit home in a big way. What we show the world on the outside is not always what is really on the inside of us. The first stanza suggests that we peel away the outer facade and look to what is really within us. Sometimes that can really hurt. The second stanza is one that hits me the most. We think we are fine on the outside but the past that we try to keep buried keeps bubbling to the surface. (Here I pictured the mud boiling) No longer able to control it, it has to come out. This is where I am glad that I can write. I can bare my soul and then seek healing from the hurts in the past. Do we smile because we are hurting....yes, I think we do, we don't want those around us to see the real pain that we might be going through. Do we give because we want to receive?...I think if you are emotionally hurting we do that trying to win some love and affection or find what we have missed out on in our lives. Yes I think we deceive others and fool ourselves...but do we? All good questions and a very thoughtful poem. Thanks for sharing, Sherri	2004-03-27 16:42:19
japanese verse 42 (Pollination)	Erzahl Leo M. Espino	Dear Erzahl, Flowers and pollination, what a different way to write japanese verse. A haiku of nature, but with our own ability to read what we want to in it. You are the master of haiku and I admire you for your ability to write such simple lines with so much meaning in them. This form of poetry has caught my fancy and I want to thank you Erzahl for introducing me to it. Another beauty! Love, Sherri	2004-03-26 18:48:40
Sable Shadow	marilyn terwilleger	Dear Marilyn, Thank God we have our writing to chase away the blues, the blahs, and the ghosts! You did a very good job of describing your vivid dreams, and the grief must still be there bubbling to the surface in your sleep. The last line is scary and brings it all together. I fear that you will beckon me. Very well expressed and I like the visualization of sable shadow. Thanks for sharing Marilyn, I am glad that your dreams have stopped. Sherri	2004-03-26 17:10:52
Haiku	Andrea M. Taylor	Dear Andrea, Ah, now you have the correct syllable count! Now it is a Haiku! It is really a beautiful one, full of the promise of spring. I enjoyed it! Sherri	2004-03-24 13:55:42
The Splendor of Fire	Jordan Brendez Bandojo	Dear Jordan, This is a very nice dedication to your muse. I liked the idea of fire, fire can do so many things, all of the things that you mentioned but also fire up our imaginations, get our creative juices running freely. The alliteration works very well, and I liked that part very well. The only thing that I would think of changing would be in the last line. I would substitute enkindling with just kindling. Your muse is obviously very busy helping you out. Thanks for sharing. Nice to hear from you and to read one of your poems. Sherri	2004-03-23 20:35:22
My Summer Dream Cabin	Marcia McCaslin	Hi Marcia, I really liked the first one! Now I can't compare and figure out the differences. Oh well, this seems ideal for all writers, and lovers of peace. I sometimes wish I had such a place, but my respite usually comes when we make the trip to Missouri to see my mother-in-law. My ideal place is somewhere on the ocean where I can look at the movement of the sea whenever I want to, feel the sun on my face, and the salty breeze blowing my hair. To me, the sea is so totally comforting and serene, but when it is kicking up, it can also be bracing and exhilirating. Oh well, that is a whole new poem! Marcia, the last stanza is what I think I like so well, the nurturing of my own soul, after years of nurturing others, always on the go, working, racing around doing things, it is nice to be able to relax and take in all the wonderful sites that God has given us to enjoy. Thanks for sharing this with us, Sherri	2004-03-23 13:56:47
Israel	Marcia McCaslin	Marcia, With the risk of starting another fury on the forum, I believe as well that God's word is true and he will indeed bless those that bless them and curse those that curse them. We as Americans need to stand behind our allies. I liked the fact that you state how you feel and not afraid to take your own stand. I am like that too. Enjoy your vacation. Sherri	2004-03-22 11:21:12
reflections	Robert L Tremblay	Dear Robert, Whether or not it was from your primitive period or not, this is a wonderful and stirring poem. A tribute to a God that cares for what he has created. The flow was excellent and the sentiment expressed without gushiness. It is a fine work, keep them coming. This particular stanza is beautiful: The light drizzle on a summer's eve, a bird in flight, The warm touch of someone you love, an infant asleep, The stars that orchestrate the grand Symphony at night, All of this is witness to me that now He must weep. Thanks for sharing Robert. Sherri	2004-03-19 07:54:48
Two Roads	jeramy j gordy	Dear Jeramy, Welcome to ThePoeticLink. I hope you like it here and get the encouragement and support you need to be a great writer. I am glad that you chose this poem to post first. It is a very deep poem and it can make you really think ab out what road we are traveling on. I know you are writing about the choices that we can make in this life and where it will eventually lead us. Sure it may be fun for a while, but what about eternity? The premise of this is very good, I do think that some of the lines are a little long and could be shortened and tightened up without changing the meaning of the poem. I am a gut critiquer, there are others that will write to you about technical aspects. There are some very good critiquers here. Good luck, I am glad you joined. Sherri	2004-03-18 20:27:57
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